[X] Went over to join Shinmyoumaru's conversation with the chicken god.

Shinmi time.

I have joined this quest after noticing that nobody commented on Shimmy having a Shadow of The Colossus bossfight against a Giant Bear.

I am disappointed in all of you for not acknowledging her rightful glory.

[X] Went over to join Shinmyoumaru's conversation with the chicken god

[X] Gave one of the games a try

I DON'T KNOW WHY,

>>45350
tbf isn't alice the one doing explosions?
>what Alice is doing would be considered domestic terrorism
>>45352
i haven't actually gotten to any official stuff with seija so i kinda wonder why she's above ground if she's really that much of a trouble. just "no i'm not going down there lol"?
>even herself if left to her own devices
>So much bark
but maybe it's also fair to say she'd be in much more trouble there? at least how she is presented here.
i feel clueless and there's questions to ask. like, what for/how was she locked up in the first place? we must consult dasshi for her infinite wisdom. or...

RHETORIC - She has given up on any pretense of emancipation and revolution, reducing herself to a squalid existence of petty nuisance and crime.

AUTHORITY - Put her in a hole and let her fight for her life.

we can just be mean.

[x] Something a little more nuanced. (Write-in)
-[x] Seija's not generally dangerous, but her presence destroys the air of comfortable familiarity that otherwise pervades Gensokyo.

That's just my understanding of Seija in general. I'm unclear as to why this question is being asked at this point in particular, and why it's worded this way. Is the implication that Regis's response to the question of whether Seija should be sent back to jail already will be to state his opinion on what Gensokyo in general should think of Seija?

[x] Seija is just as normal as any other Gensokyan. Why she gets the different treatment is beyond me.

“Is this some sort of test, Ran?” I prod. “The day is far from over, and we’ll see Seija plenty more.”

“A Youkai’s riddles are not made in the intent of insult. Do not disparage it as such,” she deflects. A finger lifts out from her sleeve, pointing at Seija. The girl is still fleeing from Alice, but here and there I see her attempt something with the strings tied to her knuckles. The doll she conscripted is lying limp on the ground, likely having its own connection to her severed. Then what is she–?

Chen jumps from my arms, morphing from the diminutive cat to a human, and skirts to the outside of Seija and Alice’s scuffle. She doesn’t act from there, simply observes.

I side eye my partner and query, “Something wrong?”

“Potentially. She is reassurance, not the solution.”

“But you question…”

“Yes?”

I pause for several moments. She’s asking me, but she also already said the answer doesn’t matter to her. What’s her reasoning, here? A Youkai’s riddle? Something in confidence? And even besides that, how the hell do I explain this without sounding like a total anarchist?

“Ran.”

Golden hair turns in my periphery. This time, I point at the group.

“What do you see there?”

“Chen, Alice Margatroid and Seija Kijin in conflict with one another. Chen is ordered to take out Kijin at an opportunistic moment, not interfere with Margatroid’s advance. You are to say this summarization is inaccurate?”

“No, that’s not what I mean. To me, I see three girls causing a ruckus, for lack of better phrasing. A common sight in Gensokyo, from what I’ve learned.”

“This is to answer my previous question?” Ran asks, tilting her head further into my vision.

I grunt, “Not exactly. What I’m thinking is… this is normal. Isn’t this what Gensokyo is all about? Troublemakers making trouble? I don’t see how Seija is any different from the rest. More than that, I don’t see her being someone that could rock the boat. From what I’ve read in the papers, she was only really a b

[x] “Fine, drag me away for all I care. I’d love to see you come up with a better idea.”

[x] “Fine, drag me away for all I care. I’d love to see you come up with a better idea.”

We've come to the bottom of the page once more. I wonder how many notebooks we've filled by this point?

New thread: >>45332

>>45249

You do realize that both of those are simply facts of life for writers, right? I've also had some pretty depressive moments in terms of confidence in my own writing, and I absolutely know that there are parts of USiL I could have written far better.

This really is just a fact of life - when you're writing a first draft without the ability to go back and edit, you're going to make choices you wish you could undo. I've never had a story where this didn't happen, and it's always frustrating - you just have to live with it and keep writing.

And for the record, outlines may or may not help depending on what kind of writer you are. It's worth a shot, but I know I personally can't stick to one to save my life.

Just remember that people are in fact reading what you're writing, and they care enough to comment that they hope you keep going. You're not a bad writer, Maxis, you just need to keep at it until you figure out what you're doing with your characters. If my own efforts are any indication, you'll eventually find a point where your depictions of Yukari/Reimu/etc. have solidified into something within the range of canon but just a little distinct, a touch of uniqueness that makes them your characters, and you'll find writing and planning a lot easier from there.

>>45250

I should elaborate on my reply: When I said "how much I appreciate," I meant somewhere between "quite a bit" and "a whole lot," and I definitely did not mean "not at all" or less.

Also, I'm not upset as in a-word-meaning-sad, I meant as in "I'm furious with myself for letting this happen." "This" meaning I let Reimu's ability and personality of floating infect the plot when it was just supposed to be in the narration. And when I tried to correct it, just like Reimu, I got suckerpunched by an unexpected danmaku/Yukari saying "I'm adopting you."

And don't worry, I don't think I'm a bad writer; in fact, I have the opposite problem where I KNOW I'm a GREAT writer, but I just make bad decisions (egomaniac)! I KNOW EXACTLY WHAT I'M DOING; I'M JUST SCREWING IT UP!

And! It's hilarious. You'd have to meet me in person to truly, TRULY understand, but I really wish I could get across just how upset-but-actually unbothered I am. "Screw it, we ball," is the only way I can think to describe it, but it's not enough. That and my image. Come Hell or high water, I'm gonna write a Reimu and Yukari relationship I like a lot more than the inspiration! Also, I was gonna say something about Jerma, but I don't know how to word it exactly, so...! There!

The day after Reimu visited Aya, Kasen came stomping up the shrine steps. The shrine maiden winced at the furious look on the hermit’s face. “H—”

“YOU FLEW INTO THE TENGU VILLAGE?!” she roared.

Reimu felt like she was facing down a tiger, but she still had to defend herself. “What?! I didn’t even do anything!”

“YOU FLEW… INTO THE TENGU… VILLAGE!”

“What’s the big deal?!”

“Reimu, do you even know how incredibly territorial the tengu are?!”

“N-no, not really…”

Kasen put her face in her bandaged hand and sighed. “Did you learn nothing from Ms. Kamishirasawa as a child?”

The shrine maiden ground the toe of her shoe into the stone pathway as she stared at her other one. Reimu didn’t feel like that was a very fair thing for her to say. She could read and write. And she knew how to exterminate any youkai.

“Not only that,” Kasen continued, “but you fought the guards!”

“They were in the way!”

“Of course they were in the way! Do you know what a guard is?! Do you even know what a guard does?!”

She looked away ashamedly. “N-no…”

“What? I can’t hear you when you mumble.”

“No. …I don’t know what a guard does.”

Kasen’s face went from angry to shocked. “Are you serious…?! Did nobody teach you these things?” When the shrine maiden didn’t respond, she continued. “Didn’t your parents explain anything to you?” At the word ‘parents,’ the girl’s lip started trembling, and a sharp pain pricked at her eyes. “Reimu? Are you alright? …I… I didn’t mean to make you upset.” Kasen reached out to her, and she swatted her away before rushing back toward the shrine. “R—! Reimu! I’m sorry!”

The girl threw herself into her futon, wondering why she had to be punished just for doing what she was told. She felt a hand on her shoulder. “I’m sorry, Reimu. This is my fault.” She turned to see Yukari sitting beside her, leaning on one of her hands.

“You

>>45106
First, I'm never against write-ins. I just make a note when having them is most apropriate.

Second, apparently this never came up previously, but the heads' range is limited. If Makoto won't go too far, then Sekibanki could have her cake and eat it too, but if she will go somewhere outside Kimon, it will be a hard time following her. Sekibanki could extend her range, but it will make it hard to focus on anything but that long-range head.

In any case, I'll extend the voting time untill this week's Sunday, GMT.

>>45107
Thanks. It's good to know about the range. My previous vote still stands though. I don't think splitting up is a good idea.

[X]Follow Kokoro inside the bar and ask around. While she had the captain's good graces, it was a golden opportunity to get information.

{X} Ask Kogasa to keep watch outside. She did have two sets of eyes, after all.

Would be bad if one of us will disappear.

[x] No need to make her do something she’s not comfortable with. If I have to nix the idea then so be it.

[x] No need to make her do something she’s not comfortable with. If I have to nix the idea then so be it.

Honestly, being given the choice NOT to do it when Wakasagihime clearly isn't too comfortable to do so just makes it rather clear to not do it. Besides, we already kinda messed up with Kogasa and it's a lesson to take to heart.

A double update?! No, a new thread! It it time for us to leave behind the chapters of the rainbow warrior and the forgotten umbrella. Let us remember them as we go into the next chapter's journey with the mermaid.

>>44955