>>30044 Not all of the story will be in the desert unless you guys lean that way. More importantly, do I use too many or not enough commas?
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I feel my posture slouch a bit as I give in to the urge to kill.
They are both to blame. Kill them both. I should shouldn’t I. I don’t want to outright kill my friend though.
She betrayed you. Kill her. No, she’ll only die if
I think she deserves it. I stand up loudly to make my presence known to the two. The man becomes agitated almost immediately.
“Who’s there?! Come out now, and I might not kill you!” He unsheathes two broadswords from his waist and stands ready to fight. I begin to laugh at him. He thinks he can kill me.
You are immortal. At least for now I can believe that. My laughing becomes a hysterical cackling the longer it goes on. The man seems only slightly phased by this, while my “friend” starts to panic and her face turns white. I have to give this entrance the best effect I can.
Thinking quickly I smear some of my own blood on my face. I walk out of the tree line slowly, dragging the sword along the ground behind for more effect. My friend just sits there in utter shock, her mouth gaping and her eyes wide. I stop walking about five feet from the man and bring my sword up to my mouth. I stare directly into his eyes as I run my tongue along the sharp, bloody edge of the blade. His eyes show that he is scared, and his body tenses.
“So you are the one who wanted me dead.” My voice slurs and breaks as blood flows from my mouth while I talk. He visibly starts to shake after this, but hell I would be too.
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ANSWER ME!” I bellow when he doesn’t speak; my own blood spilling out onto the ground. I let my eyes go wide and my rage be known to him. I give him ten more seconds to try and find his words before I strike. A simple horizontal slash, but executed with speed beyond my own belief. The strike gouges a long line across his reinforced steel armor. He trembles for but a second before bringing his swords up to defend himself.
Without even thinking I grab the blade end of his right sword and twist my wrist. His sword breaks cleanly into two pieces, leaving me with another wound without pain. He panics at this and swings, but I let his feeble attack hit me just because I want to see what happens. I feel the flesh on my neck tear open, but don’t feel the pain from it. I begin to laugh again.
“Let’s see what that does to you!” I scream as I slash for his throat. A second later he falls to the ground, his head half decapitated. I lick my sword again, but this time…
It tastes good. I turn to my once good friend to see her staring at me still in shock.
“H-How are… W-What?” Her voice is quiet and incredulous.
“How are you still alive?! Right? I’m not sure at the moment, but I’m sure that if you don’t give me a good reason not to kill you…” I let the threat taper off for her to think about it. I approach her slowly and put the already bloodied sword to her neck.
“You have one minute.” Is all I say.
Almost immediately she breaks out with a torrential downpour of excuses. She says to many things to count, and all of them
excuses. Not one apology. Not one thing reminiscent of anything that could have quelled my wrath right then and there.
“Times up.” My silent voice stops hers immediately. Her eyes grow wide with fear… and it’s well placed.
“Our friendship… is over!” With a flick of my wrist her head falls from her shoulders. Her body slumps to the ground dead. Her decapitated head locked into a perpetually unheard scream.
… The voice in my head finally stops. Everything around me turns darker than night. I feels myself fall, but don’t feel the impact of the ground. I just keep on falling,
and falling,
and falling,
and falling…
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Noon the next day… I had awoken today with a cold sweat and the chills. I must have had some kind of nightmare, but I don’t remember it at all. I had gotten everyone up and moving as soon as possible. I’ve felt on edge up until now. I’ve finally started to calm down some, because the city of at-Tnwʻ Fy al-ʻRq(at-Tnw’ for short) now stands within my sight.
At-Tnw’ is a small trading city near the edge of the desert that has been led and protected by the Hinanai clan for a very long time. It is a good place for mercenaries to get work, because many merchant convoys come through here as a checkpoint into the deeper parts of the desert.
As we near the gates I ask the merchants for my requested payment for the job. The man from all those other times takes a pouch from his belt and hands it to me. I can tell from the weight that he gave me the correct amount. I find myself ending up with one of their flasks of water completely by accident as well.
When we reach the gate we are stopped and both our inventories are inspected for chronicling. When they ask me to take off my eye patch I tell them that there isn’t anything there for them to look at anyway. They believe me thankfully and let me inside of the city.
Now, what to do?
[]Find a bar, I need to get a load off after that dream.
[]Procure some work with another caravan, then find an inn to rest at.
[]Let’s see if I can’t get some work from the Hinanai’s, I heard they pay well.
[]Find the local casino and test out my luck, I don’t have to bet that much.
[]Just wander around the city a bit, then find somewhere to stay the night.
[]write-in
*Gained 10 silver pieces and 50 copper pieces*
*Gained 2 stat points to distribute*
[]Strength-61
[]Magic-55
[]Perception-85
[]Intelligence-79
[]Charisma-68
[]Endurance-84
[]Speed-88
[]Luck-82
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With the stats, put the number you want to up the stat in the check box like, [2]Magic, and such.