I think Keine has the best hat. It's still darn silly though.

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It is time. A time. A good time. For what? For Imba as Fuck, a 2024 Lewd Shorts Writing Competition!

The terms are simpler by far than last year's, so do not fret. Indeed:
- You've got 5 weeks, till April 7th, to work on your entry.
- The submission window this time will be 3 days, from April 7th through the 9th, to avoid early gun-jumpers's entries going stale while the thread sits mostly inactive.
- 1 theme
- 1 entry per author
- 1 vote
- The voting period will last a week as usual, from April 10th till the 17th.

So with that in mind, your theme this year is:

- IMBALANCE -

In brief, there is to be a gap between the storied participators. You may interpret this however you wish; from an imbalance in age, perhaps with a dash of May-December romance, through an imbalance between their literal powers to a figurative imbalance of power in the relationship. Abuse of authority. Forceful seduction. Shameful submission. Interclass trysting. You are at complete liberty to interpret the theme however you wish, as are the readers to grant you their vote of confidence. Hell, write about Seija turning a man into a perrenial lucky pervert by messing up his sense of balance. It's all fair game in the meta.

In addition, just like last year, a prize doth hang in the balance:
- For 1st place, I, the anonymous obvious organiser, will pen a lewd short starring a character of your choice, fitting within the boundaries of the theme. Negotiation of the details - expected.
- Furthermore, if there are 5 or more entries, I will provide lesser - though hopefully still enjoyable - prizes for 2nd and 3rd place contestants as well. He who knows what this is likely to entail, well, knows.

Finally, to prevent shenanigans around the above, I myself will abstain from participating. The slack is thereby all yours to pick up.

Should you have any suggestions regarding the terms, questions about the theme, etc. please do speak up below.

Good fuck luck!
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My minds gone a few places, With the idea of imbalance;
- story where an explicitly formerly-male Miko ends up getting fucked by a relatively low-status man or youkai, either at tojiko’s request or even with her possessing Miko. Though I was working on that idea before the prompt came through.
- Cats vs Dogs, playing unfair games that heavily favour one side’s traits or the others, loser gets pounded and possibly pregnant. Chen and Kyouko play a much more innocent version in the background while Aunn acts as a neutral party/babysitter, being a lion-dog.
- frog tongue shibari by suwako where her victim is one of the bug girls or cirno, and hopelessly outclassed.
- Komachi confesses to Kutaka that she wants to ask Eiki out when she can’t find her boss. Kutaka doesn’t confess that she and Eiki are already going out, and the reason she can’t find her is because they’re in the middle of lovemaking.
And more!
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What's the policy regarding extensions?
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Scissors.

We'll cross that rope-bridge when we get there.
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Is there any word count limit or anything like that? I'm about 2000 words in and nobody's even taken off any clothes yet.
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>>17146
Not OP, but the custom around here has typically been no more than two posts per contest entry. With the character limit of 30,000 characters, that means you have basically 60,000 characters total as the hard limit.

But, well, OP can chime in to contradict or confirm.
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No hard-hard limits. If you meander, you'll be judged by the readers, not me. So, with that in mind, keep it decently brief and, ah, remember the purpose.
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Two weeks down, three to go. Ass in gear, people!
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We're down to two weeks, now!
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THPically belated heads-up that you have 5 more days more to go!
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Entries thread is now up: >>/at/41357

As a reminder, you have 3 days until the 9th, at whichever time seems appropriate, to submit yours.
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And since I ran into some chop last night, that was your unannounced 24-hour extension. The window is now... closed!

Without further ado, these are our entries this year:

👻 Echoes 👻
Double Dealing Indecency
🔔 Kosuzu MotoONI 🔔
🦁 Karma and the Komainu 🦁
🌭 Trapped in Tenseful Stakes 🌭
👹 Gensokyo is running out of- 👹

As a small reminder of the rules, you may cast your vote for 1 story only; however, commenting on several or even all of them is, as always, very much welcome. Away!
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Forgive me if I’m wrong, but aren’t these two posts just under 72 hours apart? I think your ‘extension’ just made it the appropriate three days long.

Now, of the options given…

[X] Echoes
I’m one of the writers, so I’m holding off on why until the dust settles.
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Also one of the writers, also keeping my thoughts quiet until voting is over.

But as for my vote:
[X] Karma and the Komainu
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Seems like the other writers are voting early, guess I'll join in.

[X] Echoes
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Finally, I've made it to a contest thread on time to comment properly. Sorry in advance for taking this anime porn fanfic competition too seriously, I guess. Potentially.

First things first, I'd say every entry approached the theming rather loosely. Though I can't imagine how else one can approach a theme so vague, so the contestants aren't at fault. Therefore, I won't really comment on the theming.
Onto the individual reviews.

Echoes: Probably the best short story here, from a story perspective. I don't know much about those new characters, but it really seems to feel like a Touhou story, a story about Mizuchi, and not just one that happens to have a Mizuchi-shaped girl for the male lead to have sex with. I like the way her backstory is woven not just into the framing story, but into the erotic scene too. Even her costume is described with a pleasant attention to detail. Both the sexual and the non-sexual is very well-written. The sex had an especially sensual and passionate quality to it that I found rather nice. I like how forward and "predatory" Mizuchi is, just the right amount without looking farcical. I can't say much else other than that I really enjoyed this one.
Though, because I'm exactly that kind of pedant, I'll mention this. Teka is a strange name for a japanese man. Maybe he's some kind of half-foreigner, but it's still a strange one. Shortening Takumi to Tak is equally odd for japanese. Is having a consonant at the end supposed to represent vowel reduction? The vowel wouldn't even be reduced in such a nickname. But that’s just pedantry. Very well-crafted story. Earned my vote.
[ X ] Echoes

Double Dealing Indecency: What's immediately apparent is that the story is written with unfittingly and clumsily casual language. Frankly, if it weren’t for the dialogue, it would read as if the writer is retelling the events to his buddies over text. I cannot even be charitable and interpret that as a stylistic choice, the less-than-stellar punctuation throws that out the window. It all feels as if the writer isn't very experienced with neither writing nor, more importantly, reading.
Other than that - a byproduct of the inexperience - the plot is a contrived bore. It all seems to be an excuse for amateurish corruption/hypnosis/mind-wipe/etc fetish porn. Forgive my harshness, but it's rather noticeable. And it's not even good corruption, since the switch happens at the snap of a finger! If it was even intended to be that. Similar complaints for the characters. The enslaved girls seem like a completely random selection of characters that the writer thinks are sexy. Seija, among with her entourage, seems to be there simply because she's the writer's tsundere waifu. As a result, she's terribly unlike herself. I don't know much about those new characters, but isn't she supposed to be incapable of being pleasant, to hate being received positively? At least her ability was implemented in the schemes and the sex.
You, author! If you want to improve your skill, you need to read more good books. If you don't, well, who's to stop you from writing subpar erotica.
I must admit I was glad to see oldwork characters mentioned. Though... Where the hell did they get Kurumi of all people? They'd really have to go out of their way to find her, no?

Kosuzu Motooni: A second-person Anon character? How nostalgic. It would be a bit annoying, but the story is obviously silly and comedic, so it would be ridiculous to judge it as a serious one. I appreciate the attempt at meta-humour, I suppose. It doesn't really fall flat or anything. It amused me that the heroine is Kosuzu, I take it it's because she would be the best at dealing with fanfic and writers. And though the length and the meta-gag subject matter don't really bring the writing out, the story is decently written. Though I can't help but feel like the sex (well, a prelude to sex) is shoehorned in just because the contest is a NSFW one... Maybe that's part of the joke?

Karma and the Komainu: Another great story. This one is much more sex-focused than "Echoes", but equally as compelling. I liked this one for its male lead. He's unexpectedly charming for someone who's presumably meant to be a mere vehicle for self-insertion. Aunn's characterisation is great here, too. I don't know much about those new characters, but she's usually portrayed as childish and silly, so seeing her as a more mature, cunning and sexually forward girl was a pleasant surprise. It's a better fit for a komainu, even if she’s different in the games. The writer's use of metaphor is fun. I liked the canine comparisons, but the integration of Aunn's often-overlooked nature as a stone statue into her descriptions, as well as personality and sexual tastes was another pleasant surprise. Naturally, I'm glad that her ability to duplicate her body was utilised for sexy reasons, too. Also, Megumu's comment at the end was pretty funny.
Though the erotica, well-written as it is, wasn't particularly arousing to me. Sexually speaking, it's not really to my tastes. Which is a shame, I would have enjoyed the story much more otherwise. So when considering whether to vote for "Karma" or "Echoes", I picked the sexier one.

Trapped in Tenseful Stakes: A decent story. The sex is rather good in its descriptions. I like the bear trap play, it's certainly an interesting element. SeemS to be fitting for Enoko, too - though I don't know much about those new characters. The second-person narrative wasn't unpleasant to me, even though I have a distaste for this writing choice. The farmer feels like a fairly distinct character and not just a blank self-insert slate. Though, presumably, the reader is still meant to imagine himself in the man's place. Otherwise, the choice to tell the story in second person seems rather arbitrary. Or maybe there's something I'm missing about porn and second-person writing.
However, I did not enjoy the interjection about farmer and the yamainu's love story. I can't say it was entirely irrelevant, since it's meant to flesh out the relationship between our two leads, but it's... Well, honestly, fairly boring to read. Not much happens. They just talk about themselves and ultimately don't have much chemistry in that segment. Which is odd, because they seem to have it during sex... Well, could just be simpler to portray.

Gensokyo is running out of sex: Another (mostly?) comedic entry. The light and simple language is quite fitting for the genre. The story has a similar feel to an old-school raunchy gag doujinshi, strengthened by everyone's characterisation. Marisa is a horny lesbian, Suika is a funny drunk, Reimu is always annoyed at something, so on. I'm not too fond of that kind of fanwork, and even though it's a matter of taste... Come on, this approach is just low-brow and lazy.
The question mark part was rather confusing. I could not tell what was going on. Maybe that's the intention, maybe not. Though, really, the sex part was generally rather confusing. I think Alice did something BDSM-ish and doll-related to Marisa, but otherwise, it was hard to parse. Though, really, the story was kind of hard to follow in general. Yuugi just showed up for no good reason, what was up with that? Did we need another funny drunk? Found it hard to get behind overall.

My personal ranking would be, favourite to least favourite: Echoes - Karma - Trapped - Kosuzu - Indecency - Running out of sex.
Either way, thank you for your entries, everybody. Keep writing, keep reading, keep improving, have fun, etc, etc.

Though, what I truly care about here... Why hasn't anyone written about Shingyoku?! They're all about balance, you know! Oh well, guess all we're getting this year are mere scant mentions of PC-98. At this rate, I might as well write about oldwork characters myself next time. MASTURBATORY AS IT WOULD BE!
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Was a hard choice for me this year, still:
[X] Karma and the Komainu
Wouldn't think I would vote for Aunn one when I first saw the entry names, but this one is the one I simply liked - with no issues. Good usage of komainu nature, indeed.
Echoes is good, sure, but I couldn't help but to feel some... contrivance? Mainly in the first half and especially the meeting scene. Trapped... good as well, but probably will second about interjection.
Third one is just pure self-ironizing comedy and therefore outside of grading for me, second just read like a wacky eratohok/eratohoymaem AAR for me or something - still not sure how much it is ironic or unintentionally, sixth is just everything I detest about touhou fanfiction.
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I appreciate that newer characters made an appearance in stories. That's always nice to see and, sadly, a little too rare. I'm sitting out of the voting this time around, sorry.
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[X] Trapped in Tenseful Stakes
Since other writers decided to be quite, I have collectively decided to shut up and give in to the social conformity.
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