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A Story in Which Youkai Rhyme
A few little nitpicks; those second two sentences in the first paragraph were fragments; they should probably be redressed. A few commas seem to be misplaced throughout, and there are a few other fragments that don't work in prose. Some pacing issues throughout.
However, I do like the story; I laughed when Waka asked about the hangover; it was quite jarring. And that was cute what Seki did at the end.
It needs some polish, but a good job all around.
Good scene building in the beginning. You don't delve long into purple prose, which is something I know I have trouble doing. There's a quick move from the intro to the scene-setting-soliloquy. A few quibbles on word choice, but that's likely personal preference. There's nothing major I see wrong.
Was sweet how it was Kosuzu that got through to her at the end, even if it took the tanuki tag team to really make the point. Reimu will probably be back to her surly self later on... But I believe you did a good job showing her relenting. All of the other characters seem to be right on point as well.
Krampus Steals Christmas
Was unsure where you were going with this at first. It was cute how the little granddaughter kept on interrupting and correcting Grandpa. The accent was consistent and there really. Seemed odd seeing some dialogue in quotes, and some not, but I suppose you did that intentionally to differentiate (and hide who Grandpa actually is by not giving him a description).
Felt like it just needed a bit of prose to wrap it all up. The confession at the end of part one was good, but without the reaction of the granddaughter, it seemed to lose a bit. Although, showing them as more alike than not was a nice little twist. Was a bit jarring at the end, switching to a more traditional layout.
Good humor, and good characterization all around.
A Story in Which Letty Whiterock is Beaten With a Shovel
Shitpost. No Koishi. Moving on.
Out in the Cold
Nice little short story, although I'm a little confused why Keine is at the Youkai Mountain (unless I've missed some of the meta). A couple of nice twists on words, though most of those were poisonous as well. The part about the deadliest poison (Moe?) was also nice, with it taking effect.
In the end, I feel that there just wasn't enough storybuilding and setup to explain "how we got here". The Kagiyama shrine portion was definitely a nice addition, and that paragraph's description was excellent. Just felt that there was more to get from a to b. A Medicine-Keine dynamic is interesting, though. There's the beginning of a setup, and a good ending, but this could be better with an expanded section connecting all the dots.
...Hidden Special Doll Place. Heh.
Under That Lake of Ice
Can't do my own.
So, as to the votes...
[x] A Story in Which Youkai Rhyme
Just enough silliness to be enjoyable; the nitpicks are many, but most are minor and the rhymes flow decently well (even if a few are groan-worthy).
[x] Winter's Warmth
I feel like this was the most complete and consistent one. As mentioned by others, a bit predictable in its ending, but it was executed the best.