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19775 No. 19775
Boredom. That is what Tenshi Hinanai felt for most of her life. Her family had been rewarded with ascension into celestialdom for serving the Nai-no-Kami while it was alive, but this gave no regard to the state of each individual within the Hinanai clan. Many were prepared to make the trip, but some simply did not have the training required to become a celestial to begin with, and as such did not have the capacity to act as one. Chiko Hinanai was one such individual, having ascended with her family while still a child. She was often bored, frustrated and had developed without the experience those who dwell on the surface possess. While she did have Iku Nagae to act as her tutor, her father, Lord Hinanai, was often considered to be too soft with her.

Chiko, who had named herself Tenshi somewhere down the line, was seen only as a delinquent due to her unique case. Brought up with none of the training but all of the luxury and power, she grew proud. This combined with several hundred years of pent up boredom caused her to interfere with the lives of the surface dwellers, whom she viewed with a jealous eye. They did not have the pleasures of Bhava-Agra, but at the same time they looked like they lived more fulfilling lives. She wished to interact with them, but decided the best way to meet them is to cause an incident that threatened Gensokyo. This worked about as well as one might have expected.

Amidst all the confusion and reaction no one had stopped to consider that perhaps she had not planned on going through with her own half-baked idea, and simply beat the ever-loving crap out of her several times over, all of which was more than the celestial had bargained for. Tenshi did wind up meeting a few people and wanted to know more about them, but she had shot herself in the proverbial foot in the process and found it hard to approach them after that. One of the few exceptions being Reimu, who simply treated her with the same neutral indifference she treats everyone with.

...

Tenshi is currently floating on a keystone, flying across the vast expanses of Bhava-Agra while getting the occasional glimpse of life down below. She was transfixed by what she saw, crimson eyes attempting to cling to the sights of Outsider life. Life down there looked so much more interesting than life in the heavens, interesting enough that she was willing to entertain the unthinkable: To descend from Bhava-Agra and appear before these faithless humans once more. She chose to dip beneath the clouds over a potentially interesting city, and surprisingly her presence is going completely unnoticed by everyone. Even the airplane that could have easily spotted her made no attempt to acknowledge her presence... Time to fix that!

Tenshi stands atop her keystone, flicks her hair to the side once, then makes a short hop off the stone to fall to the ground. Her ultimate aim is to land on the airplane, but she could make an entrance even without that flying hunk of metal. The wind whipped at her face as she descends, and she noticed that she was just a little off-course from the plane. Perhaps they're trying to avoid her? Couldn't be. She creates and kicks off a few more of her keystones until she safely lands on the flying chunk of metal with a soft clang. The wind didn't stop at all, but she doesn't care. This is far too much fun to worry about such a trivial element.

Tenshi is sitting cross-legged atop the plane, resting her back against a conveniently placed keystone while using the Sword of Hisou to cut down on the wind. She can barely keep her eyes trained on any one sight, and is completely oblivious to the panicked operators and the people murmuring within. To her, this is little more than a convenient method of travel until she can get onto solid ground.

---

Welcome to The Peach Tree that Bore Fruit, a Tenshi-centric story that focuses on the celestial in question and her experiences in life outside Bhava-Agra and Gensoyko. While some of you may be disappointed in the setting, I found that I liked the idea of her curiosity getting the better of her and leading her to leave her home in favor of seeing what the rest of the world was like. In this story, you can control Tenshi, an OC, or both. Things will change drastically depending on what you choose, so pick carefully.

Also of note: Tenshi loses none of her power when operating in this scenario. She still possesses the Sword of Hisou, her monstrous strength, all of her spellcards, ect. While you'll have to be conscious about using them lest you attract undue attention, you can and will have the opportunity to have a little fun with the humans who have decided that supernatural things don't exist.

So, here's the perspective vote:
[X]Tenshi
[X]OC (Name him/her, don't, leave it to the author, ect.)
[X]Both
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>> No. 19776
[x] Both

Playing two sides of a story is fun.
>> No. 19777
[X]Both
>> No. 19778
[X]Tenshi

I often read criticism about writers adding their own characters to Touhou. Not that I mind, but I would like to read a story from a touhou's perspective, just to vary.
>> No. 19783
[x]Tenshi
Let's see where this peach falls.
>> No. 19784
[X] Tenshi

A welcome change of pace.
>> No. 19785
[X]Both
>> No. 19786
[x] Tenshi
>> No. 19787
[x]tenshiiii I love youuuuu
>> No. 19788
[X]Both
>> No. 19789
[X]Both

I would say Tenshi, But that limits our options. Both makes the story longer, and knowing S.L.D.T will make the story better. The fact he's got a completed story or two under his belt furthers my confidence in his writing abilities.
>> No. 19790
I must say that I'm not very confident with the "Tenshi's adventures in the Outside World" stuff. I would rather have "Tenshi's adventures in Gensokyo".

But, you're SLDT, so you know what you're doing.
Take off every ZIG.
>> No. 19791
[X]Both
>> No. 19792
I must say that this was a close vote. Six votes for pure Tenshi, and seven votes for using both perspectives. [X]Both wins by the tiniest of margins!

It's pretty obvious, but in this scenario you will control Tenshi and the as of yet unnamed OC. This arrangement will grant you control over both their actions, but you can only influence one or the other. You may also switch perspective at any time to dictate what the other person will do, and gain insight into their thought process while doing so.
Also, thanks for the votes of confidence guys, it make it easier to write.

---

Current perspective: Tenshi Hinanai

The plane fight had been re-routed to an airport that's significantly closer than the one it had originally planned to land at. The fact that Tenshi had landed on the back of said plane and left a dent in it from the keystone she placed on it had everything to do with it, but at the same time the passengers inside the plane and the operators at the control tower could scarcely believe the pilot's reason for the emergency redirect. It was absurd to think that a girl floating on a rock had descended from the clouds soley to jump on the outside of the airplane, and inconceivable that she could actually dent the roof. The pilot dreaded the questions that would come from this, and knew that he'd be checked for any recent use of drugs or alcohol. He wasn't sure how he'd make his story believable enough to convince anyone but his co-pilot that things had happened exactly as he said they did, and finally decided that truth or hallucination, he'd need a drink once this was over.

It may be a cliché line, but the humans going about their business in the city below her really did look like a bunch of ants. Tenshi peered over the side of the plane to get a better look, and saw that she wasn't seeing people so much as she was seeing a bunch of small, shiny things moving along the roads at a fairly slow speed. She slid off the main body and onto a wing to get a better look at those shiny things, and was oblivious to the man who spat out his coffee upon seeing her.

The atmosphere in the interior of the plane was tense. Several people sitting on the right side of the plane and looking out the window at the right wing saw the girl with the colorfuly-decorated blue dress, naturally blue hair, and the curious red eyes, and almost all of them wondered if the airline food was laced with something to make the tedious task of waiting several hours more bearable.

Tenshi turned to look at the side of the plane, and saw the people gawking at her. Men, women, and children alike stared in confusion, astonishment, and wonder, something that made the celestial smile. She waved at them, and received a few waves back from the passengers. She wanted to get a good look at everyone on the plane, so she carefully lept from one wing to the other while either accurately judging the speed and angle she would have to jump to land safely, or simply told physics to pack sand. Either way she landed on the left wing with a dull thump, and turned to look at the people within to see if they'd be as shocked as the people on the right side of the plane.

The people on the left side of the airplane were growing both curious and concerned over the chatter of those sitting on the side opposite of them. The concern turned to shock when they saw the blue-haired girl land on the left wing, and could only stare at her. Reactions varied from passenger to passenger, but the underlying reaction was utter disbelief. Sure, some people were shocked, two wanted to meet this person on the ground the moment they had the opportunity, three fainted, and a dozen more had stared talking on their cell phones, but none could truly believe what they were seeing.

Tenshi wasn't bothered by the wind so much as she didn't like the cold. She got the reactions she wanted, but had to think about what she would do past that. She can see a door marked 'emergency exit' on the side of the plane and figured that would be a potential way to get inside. The other two options are to ride the plane as is, and to simply hop off and land within the city. The celestial would make an impact no matter what she did, so this was more a matter of patience than practicality.

[X]I'm sure I could open and close one measily door. Time to get inside and warm up!
[X]They say patience is a virtue. I may not have a lot of it, but surely I could wait this out.
[X]If I made this much of an impact just by landing on this flying chunk of metal, I wonder how many people I could shock by landing in that city...?
>> No. 19793
[X]They say patience is a virtue. I may not have a lot of it, but surely I could wait this out.
>> No. 19796
[X]I'm sure I could open and close one measily door. Time to get inside and warm up!
>> No. 19797
[x] Put on a show. You like the attention you're getting as well as seeing their reactions.
-[x] Maybe a little dance? A twirl, a bow, a smile?
[x] After you're done, take a seat on the edge of the wing of the plane, dangling your feet over and hum idly to yourself until you reach your destination.
-[x] You might want to disappear once there, though, as you don't want to cause too much of a commotion.

A bit too detailed, perhaps? I'm a sucker for nonchalance.
>> No. 19798
[X] They say patience is a virtue. I may not have a lot of it, but surely I could wait this out.

I doubt she'll be able to handle the boredom of a flight any better than a normal person, but it will be fun to watch her try.

>a dozen more had stared talking on their cell phones
Aaaand this was where my suspension of disbelief ended. You can't use a cell phone on a plane in flight because you're either out of range of the cell towers or switching between them so fast the system can't keep up. Now, if they were using phones built into the plane (which are satellite, not cell), that would make sense.
>> No. 19799
[X]They say patience is a virtue. I may not have a lot of it, but surely I could wait this out.
Opening a door in a flying plane? Not the brightest of the ideas.
Then against, she isn't the sharper knife in the drawer, is she?
>> No. 19801
[x] Tenshi God damn it, to late again.

[x] Put on a show. You like the attention you're getting as well as seeing their reactions.
-[x] Maybe a little dance? A twirl, a bow, a smile?
[x] After you're done, take a seat on the edge of the wing of the plane, dangling your feet over and hum idly to yourself until you reach your destination.
Warming up would be nice, but depressurizing the plane would not.

>While some of you may be disappointed in the setting
You've got that right. But eh...this is worth a shot, maybe, I guess. Wondering what it's doing in /youkai/, though.
>> No. 19802
[X] They say patience is a virtue. I may not have a lot of it, but surely I could wait this out.
>> No. 19803
>>19798

Well this is embarrassing. There isn't much I can say to this other than 'D'oh!' and be more conscious of it the next time.

>>19801

I was going to stick this in /border/ due to the setting, but this is Tenshi-centric and focuses on her. This could simply be me being a bit of a dolt though, so feel free to speak your mind.

---

As much as the celestial might have wanted to get inside the airplane to warm up or to cause an even bigger commotion on the surface, she had to consider the virtue of being patient for a little while. ...Well, as patient as the celestial could ever be when she's feeling so antsy. It didn't take her long to set up a game of chess using nothing but small keystones, and even less time for her to decide that it was more fun to make them blast each other with thin red lasers whenever a piece would have captured another.

The pilot and co-pilot received their second shock of the day when a second woman began to hover directly in the flight path of the airplane. Her hair is purple and is kept at around neck-length, her eyes crimson, and her outfit just as ludicrous as the girl who's lounging on the airplane's left wing. The woman kept pace with the plane's turning even though the pilot was purposely attempting to avoid running into her, and he blanched as the airplane approached. The distance closed in seconds, and both the pilot and co-pilot braced for an impact that never came.

A dull thump resounded in the cabin as Iku Nagae stepped onto the airplane. Her facial expression conveyed her boredom well, and did an equally stellar job at conveying exasperation when she saw Tenshi playing around with danmaku on the wing. "Eldest daughter, what are you doing?" Her words were lost to the combined roar of the wind and the engines, so she was ignored. She grumbled to herself quietly as she approached the celestial, and was not surprised when she entered a small bubble of calm air. "Eldest daughter, what are you doing? You know interaction with the surface dwellers is forbidden." Her tone and expression have not changed at all.

Tenshi looks up from her failed attempt at chess to look her tutor in the eye. "Since when have I ever cared about that rule? It's boring in heaven and the earth is interesting." She dismisses the keystones without even looking at them, and makes the bubble of calm air calmer still. When she finished one could swear that she wasn't sitting on a flying hunk of metal several thousands of feet in the air. "It's not like I plan to mess with them. Much."

The plane makes one more wide turn as it's pilot and co-pilot guide it down toward the runway they had been told to use. It had been cleared out in advance so they would not have to make a second pass and waste more time than they already had in attempting to avoid Iku, something everyone on the airplane was thankful for. "The question is not how much you plan to interact with them, but whether you interact with them at all. Humans outside of Gensokyo operate differently than those within. You may not be able to cope." The messenger is forced to alter her footing as the surface of the wing was not meant to be trod upon mid-flight. Tenshi is forced to do the same.

"Eh, if it gets to be too much I can just go back to Bhava-Agra using a keystone or something. It's not like I plan on staying for too long." The celestial is starting to form another set of choices, this time regarding how she wants to go about landing. "Iku, you probably shouldn't stay here too long. Please go tell father where I am, and come back to keep an eye on me. I don't forsee my having any problems, but I'd feel safer with you keeping an eye on things."

Iku raised her eyebrows in surprise. "That is... Remarkable. It's rare for you to show such foresight." She turns to leave, but pauses. "I will be back within a day, but I won't be able to locate you right away. Do be careful, eldest daughter." Iku floats away from the airplane and into the clouds, leaving Tenshi alone.

"Now how do I want to go about this..." She asks herself.

[X]Just wait for the landing. It might be a hassle, but the building the plane is heading for looks interesting.
[X]Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.
[X]Write-in

---

Tenshi's comment about leaving isn't for show. If things don't work out, she can choose to leave the surface and return to heaven. If you do vote to leave, Tenshi might or might not want to go back depending on the sum of her experiences on the surface.
>> No. 19804
[X]Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.

And going back to Heaven means BAD END?
>> No. 19805
[X]Just wait for the landing. It might be a hassle, but the building the plane is heading for looks interesting.
She should go all the way through her idea.
>> No. 19806
[x] Just wait for the landing. It might be a hassle, but the building the plane is heading for looks interesting.

Airport fast food, yum.
>> No. 19807
[x] Just wait for the landing. It might be a hassle, but the building the plane is heading for looks interesting.
>> No. 19808
Just to ask, what sign should we use when we desire to switch characters? Something like '[X]Switch'?
>> No. 19809
[x] Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.
>> No. 19810
[X]Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.
>> No. 19811
[X] Just wait for the landing. It might be a hassle, but the building the plane is heading for looks interesting.

Tenshi, worried about attracting attention? After that display on the wings? I don't see it.
>> No. 19812
[X]Just wait for the landing. It might be a hassle, but the building the plane is heading for looks interesting.

I hope Tenshi likes being questioned by authorities! There's no way this won't end well.

This story feels... detached? It's like not even Tenshi gives a shit about what's going on.
>> No. 19813
[X]Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.
>> No. 19815
>>19811
Celebrities love the attention. They just don't like signing autographs.

>>19812
As if she'd sit still long enough to be bothered answering them.

And the story just started. It's a grand adventure in the outside world, of course she doesn't care about the consequence of her actions. Yet.
>> No. 19817
[x] Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.
>> No. 19819
S.L.D.T, you're fine with the cell phone use, don't worry about it.

>>19798

As for you, did you forget that cell-phones have built in cameras now?
>> No. 19820
>>19819
That has no bearing on the situation when the line says "talking on their cell phones".

It's not a big or important mistake at all, but it's a mistake all the same, and the only way to fix a mistake is to know you've made it. No need to white knight.
>> No. 19822
>>19798
>Aaaand this was where my suspension of disbelief ended. You can't use a cell phone on a plane in flight because you're either out of range of the cell towers or switching between them so fast the system can't keep up. Now, if they were using phones built into the plane (which are satellite, not cell), that would make sense.

The major barrier to in-flight cell phone use is the regulations, not the infrastructure.
>http://www.nytimes.com/2001/09/14/us/after-attacks-communications-new-perspective-issue-cell-phone-use-planes.html
>''The fact of the matter is that cell phones can work in almost all phases of a commercial flight,'' said Marvin Sirbu, professor of engineering and public policy at Carnegie Mellon University.

In fact, Japan has recently repealed bans on using them in commercial flights.
>http://search.japantimes.co.jp/cgi-bin/nn20110126b1.html
>> No. 19823
[X]Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.
>> No. 19824
[X]Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.
>> No. 19825
[x] Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.
>> No. 19826
>>19823
>>19824
>>19825
>Three identicals votes...
I don't want to say it, but I have doubts.
>> No. 19827
[X]Just wait for the landing. It might be a hassle, but the building the plane is heading for looks interesting.
>> No. 19828
[x] Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.

No need to antagonize the police yet, better to relocate and explore somewhere else before we get cornered.
>> No. 19829
>>19826
I personally dislike posts without comments. At least say a 'Let's go with this'!
>> No. 19851
I'm not going to disregard those comment-less posts this time around, if only because the votes would be a tie if I didn't count them. I do agree that simply copy-pasting vote options and not saying a word is a little worrying though.

---

"Normally I'd be fine with going off on my own, but I have no idea what I'm going to run into in that building and..." Tenshi pauses her thoughts to look at the keystone that's still lodged in the roof of the craft. "I don't really want to have to answer to that, especially if Iku isn't here."

Normally this sort of thing wouldn't bother her overly much, but there is the small fact that the last time she damaged something that belonged to someone else, everyone in the area came and beat her up. She seriously doubted that she'd receive the same kind of punishment for this, but she didn't want to take chances right now. There will be plenty of time to mess with people later when she has Iku to help her out.

She sighed when she gave it a bit more thought, as she didn't really think her tutor would just up and bail her out of whatever trouble she brought down on herself. She'd be far more likely to take the celestial's punishment into her own hands, which in all honesty is far easier to deal with since it usually consists of danmaku.

The celestial looks out over the land to gauge an escape route, and decides that just flying off the back of the wing on a keystone would be the best solution. She hops onto the main body of the airplane, lifts the keystone off of it, then makes a running jump off the back of it. She falls for a few minutes before sliding herself onto it, at which point she stops her descent to get her bearings again. The city's not too far off, and there's plenty of those four-wheeled things moving back and forth on the roads... Her curiosity leads her to fly along the road, just off the side so she can look at the cars and those inside.

Once again the reactions are mixed. Some people just flat out ignore her, others stare, and one guy looked like he was tempted to pull over to start drinking. Not that you can blame any of them, as it's not every day that a girl floats on the side of the road on a rock. Ultimately the people in the cars were more interested in the celestial than she was in them. Tenshi began to follow the line of cars into the city, even falling in line with them to see who she could mess with. She certainly turned a few heads as she headed in, but for the most part the people here were just too preoccupied with what they were already doing.

At least until a few people stopped on the sidewalk to gawk. This created a bit of a domino effect as more and more people stop to look at what the other people were looking at. Tenshi beamed and waved at the crowds that seemed to gather wherever she went, but she started to want more out of this. She was getting attention, but she wanted reactions. Nothing that would land her in too much trouble though, since she didn't know what the humans out here would do to her if they felt that she got to be too troublesome.

[X]Head out to a clear spot to demonstrate your powers. If they reacted that much to you just floating around, who knows what will happen if you put a little more effort into it~
[X]I'm done with this for now. Let's see what's interesting around here.
[X]Write-in
>> No. 19852
[X]Disembark at the most opportune time. I won't have Iku watching my back for now so I should try to avoid attracting too much attention.

I hope opportune doesn't mean "Through a roof that happened to be below the plane."
>> No. 19855
[x] Head out to a clear spot to demonstrate your powers. If they reacted that much to you just floating around, who knows what will happen if you put a little more effort into it~

Tenshi likes the positive reactions she's getting, but I also want to see how she feels about causing genuine terror.
>> No. 19857
[x] Try talking.

Are these people even worth impressing?
>> No. 19859
[x] Head out to a clear spot to demonstrate your powers. If they reacted that much to you just floating around, who knows what will happen if you put a little more effort into it~
She wants attention? Sure, let's go
>> No. 19861
[x] Try talking.

"Hey, Wanna see a celestial's tits?"
"What tits?"
"You ungrateful little fucker."
>> No. 19863
[x] I'm done with this for now. Let's see what's interesting around here.

First we're gonna go shopping, then we're gonna get our nails done- I mean, uh...
>> No. 19864
[x] Try talking.

Tenshi can find out all the various things she can do to make everyone bow and scrap at her feet.
>> No. 19866
[x] Try talking.

I'm hoping this isn't Japan
>> No. 19868
[x] Try talking.
Well, time to meet our OC.
>> No. 19869
[x] Try talking.

>>19861
Hah hah hah hah.
>> No. 19874
[x] Try talking.
>> No. 19875
>>19861

I can see YAF trying it out, except replacing Tenshi with Mokou.
>> No. 19884
[x] Try talking.
"Ho, foolish mortals, I come to grant you the unbearable glory of my presence! If you prostrate yourself before me I might show you my true powers!"
>> No. 19887
[X]She's not in at the moment, can I pass on a message?
>> No. 19895
>>19887
"Yes, hello. This is the bondage equipment you ordered Miss Tenshi. Would you like to come pick it up or delivery?"

"IKUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!"
>> No. 19930
"I wonder if there's anyone here worth talking to. I mean, they're a bunch of faithless humans, but they can't be all bad." Tenshi shifted across a couple lanes of traffic, which earned her some honking from the drivers that were going in the opposite direction of the cars she was following. A cop did spot her and what she was doing, but was wondering if he should bother calling it in.

The celestial parked her keystone in one of the empty parking spots, ignoring the fact that it's for cars only. She didn't really know what the sign said or why everyone was looking at her like she had grown a second head. In fact, the chattering sounds like it isn't even Japanese... "Uh, hello?" She asks, which earns her a few more odd stares. Someone merely copies her greeting, which annoys her, but she keeps her cool for now. "Okay... Apparently I didn't watch where I was going, or else Japan's local language has diverted from what I thought it was supposed to be to the point that communication is impossible." She looks around once more and notes that she can barely understand what's written on the signs, and can only catch snippets of what's being said.

Tenshi scratched her head and frowned, obviously unhappy with this turn of events. "Oh great. Where did I end up?" She spoke more to herself than anyone else at this point since she doubted anyone could actually understand her. She tried to focus on the signs to see if she could understand them, but to no avail.The only conclusion she could draw from any of this is that she floated well away from her home and wound up in some distant land. It's the only possible reason she could think of to explain why she couldn't understand anyone, or be understood in turn. "Where's that gap hag when you actually need her? She could clear this up in an instant." She thought about that a little more, then rolled her eyes. "Assuming she could stop being lazy long enough to actually help."

She barely payed attention to the police officer who had walked up to her, and gave him maybe one glance before using her keystone to move off. She floated up a few feet into the air to avoid dealing with the cars for the time being, both because she wasn't in the mood and because she wanted to sort out the language barrier first. The fun had quickly drained out of this particular venture, but she planned to sort it out as quickly as possible. Spooking people who couldn't understand her would be troublesome after all~

The cop was torn between two courses of action. He could call this in and pursue the girl floating on the rock, or opt to leave the whole thing be and treat it as though it never happened. He was strongly considering the latter option, but it seemed like it'd be a poor idea. Some girl who appears to be foreign and has no idea what she's doing would pose a considerable threat, especially if that wasn't just some kind of special effect. He shook his head as he walked off, still undecided about what he should do about this.

[X]Switch perspective: Unnamed police officer
[X[Stick with Tenshi's view.

---

Short update today, but this introduces a concept for the dual perspective run. Since you start with Tenshi's perspective, the OC is undecided and therefore could be anyone. You'll run into several people as Tenshi, at which point you can choose to jump from the celestial's viewpoint to that of the other person. This will let you see events from that person's perspective and let you decide if you wish to guide him or her closer to the celestial, though you should keep in mind that you can only pick one.
>> No. 19931
[X[Stick with Tenshi's view.
>> No. 19932
[X] Stick with Tenshi's view.

We can do better.
>> No. 19933
[X]Switch perspective: Unnamed police officer
And update's an update
>> No. 19935
[X]Switch perspective: Unnamed police officer
>> No. 19936
[X[Stick with Tenshi's view.
>> No. 19938
[X] Stick with Tenshi's view.
No thanks to a police officer.
>> No. 19939
[X]Switch perspective: Unnamed police officer

This guy seems legit. Not your average, violent, fat, and racist american cop.
>> No. 19940
[X]Switch perspective: Unnamed police officer
>> No. 19941
[X] Stick with Tenshi's view.

They're filming a movie. Yeah, that's it.
>> No. 19943
[x] Stick with Tenshi's view.

Nah, let's wait for a more suitable protagonist to come along. Preferably a grocer. One who tends to the produce aisle.

One who absolutely cannot tolerate an unstickered piece of fruit.
>> No. 19944
[X] Stick with Tenshi's view.

Fuck the law.
>> No. 19945
[X] Stick with Tenshi's view.

I think this would be better for the cop. If he calls in "girl on a floating rock disrupting traffic", his superiors will think he's either taking drugs or going crazy.

>>19943
>One who absolutely cannot tolerate an unstickered piece of fruit.
Someone with OCD like that usually isn't fit to work in produce. The nice, even displays they make would be ruined as soon as a customer took something.
>> No. 19946
We're going to be scorning potential suitors for the entire story, aren't we? This is great.

Are you good enough for Tenshi? No? Next. Next! Next!
>> No. 19949
>>19946
I doubt whatever OC we choose has a big effect on the story, aside from his short backstory and maybe his personality. Or her.

Speaking of, Will we get a female OC?
>> No. 19950
>>19949
Oh, the other main character is no big deal, it'll just determine his or her background and personality. Barely worth a mention with all the self-inflicted problems and unknown enemies we've got coming up.

I want someone very young or very old.
>> No. 19951
[X]Switch perspective: Unnamed police officer
>> No. 19952
[X[Stick with Tenshi's view.
>> No. 19953
>>19950
By young, do you mean like a loli, or do you mean a young adult? Because I'm all for finding some sort of dude who just passed college, They always have some sort of superpower or some bullshit.
>> No. 19954
>>19953
I'm now imagining some wide-eyed little boy falling in love with Tenshi.
>> No. 19955
>>19953
Loli. Or shota. Or old man or woman. I'm just tired of teenager and college-age protagonists.

>>19954
This guy gets it! A little kid idolizing Tenshi would be the best thing. She's such a great role-model, you know?
>> No. 19958
>>19954
this

wide-eyed shota
>> No. 19961
>>19955
I like the way you think, Anon.
>> No. 19962
>>19955
After the "Do the Right Thing Tenshi" following a rock throwing guy, why not a guy following a rock-throwing Tenshi?
>> No. 20015
>>19954

This idea has received the Dr. Q Seal of Approval™.
>> No. 20027
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>>19954
>> No. 20243
Well, that voting system got tossed out the window in a big hurry. Wide-eyed shota it is then!
---

Tenshi had decided to pass the time by forcing a large stone pillar to rise out of the ground in the middle of the park. It took all of... what, five seconds to finish it? She sat at the very top of the pillar while thinking about what she could do, and where she could sleep. It hadn't occured to her just how complicated the Outside could be, and it's rather obvious that she didn't plan for any of it. She could rough it until her friend and tutor got back, but that would require her to do two things she didn't want to do: Eat the peaches on her hat, and sleep on the ground.

Oh sure, Celestial's didn't have to eat, nor did they have to sleep, but she had been in the habit of doing both for so long that her body had simply grown used to the routine. Get up, eat breakfast, bat- wait, Celestials don't need to bathe, err... Tenshi adopted a thinking pose while trying to think of what she considered her 'routine'. Naturally, she couldn't come up with much. She got up, ate, went down to bug her Reimu, try to put a collar on her, fail miserably, try to interact with the various denizens of Gensokyo...

Not really all that different from what she's doing right now. She's still trying to show off, just to a crowd that could be wowed by such simple displays. The language barrier was an understandable nuisance, especially since the whole 'language is not a barrier to understanding' deal Yukari had set up since Gensokyo's start made it so no one had to learn a different language. If you were inside the border, you could speak to anyone without having to pantomime or speak in the native language with all the aptitude of a toddler. The peach hat was more than a little annoyed by this aspect since she wasn't here just to preform increasingly complex magic tricks, she was here to hear the roars of adoration for those cheap tricks, and maybe convince those Outsiders that the stories that they had dismissed as childhood fantasies were in fact true, and that those 'fantasies' would like their place in the world back.

She absent-mindedly munched on a peach as she lay on her back, staring up at the evening sky, and by extension, the heaven only she could see. That being more because everyone else was too dense to look properly, rather than it being something truly unique to her. She lips turned downward into a frown the more she thought, and eventually she got back up to get back to ground level. She called up numerous stone pillars to accomplish this, each one being just as wide as the last, but coming down no more than a foot each time. The end result was a permanent staircase that went up about two stories, and took up a solid third of the park. She was so bored right now that she didn't even notice all the people gaping at her, and especially not the young boy who looked like he was staring at a goddess in human form. All she was interested in was getting the language issue taken care of.

She did pay attention to all the murmers around her, and eventually looked at those around her. Mere moments ago they had been staring at her, but now they're staring and pointing at something in the sky. She raised an eyebrow, then turned to look as well.

She wished she hadn't.

A beautiful woman with long, golden hair and amethyst eyes was descending from the clouds. She wore naught but a pure white robe- "And no undergarmnets if those perky nipples are any indication." -and had six angelic wings sprouting from her back. Everyone else was speaking in reverence of this angelic being, but the Celestial was merely annoyed. "Ugh, you and your fancy entrances." She was secretly glad that no one could understand a word she said, because she got the distinct feeling that the people staring at the 'angel' wouldn't take kindly to her badmouthing it. "You are such an attention whore, Yukari Yakumo."

Yukari finished her slow descent to the ground, finishing the display by making the grass her feet had touched turn a vibrant spring green, and had numerous wildflowers burst into bloom despite the fact that they didn't even exist before now. "My, how rude~" She took the insult in stride, spreading her little rejuvination effect as she walked toward the annoyed celestial. The people staring at her seemed to understand her words, which made them wonder just what the relation between these two women is. To them, it's like God Himself had sent one of his Seraphs to reign in an unruly angel. "I came to see how my wife is doing, and the first thing you do is call me an attention whore..." She mocked sadness as best as she could, but that smile would not disappear. "Though you are right~ I came here because I want your attention~"

"Urge to kill... rising..." Tenshi's smile was forced by comparison. While she was genuinely happy to see Yukari, especially at such a convenient time, she was just a little pissed off at how she was giving these people the wrong idea so casually. Yukari, pretending to be her wife? The idea was preposterous! She'd be poisoned the moment one tried to bed the other!

The gap youkai once again took it in stride, not growing resentful or angry herself and instead looking like she was having the time of her life. "Rudeness aside, you're having a few... language issues, correct?" She stepped in even closer until there was less then a foot between them. "Will you accept my aid~?"

The peach hat rolled her eyes and snorted, clearly unamused by the gap youkai's antics. "Just get it over with. You've already screwed things up for me as it is." She crossed her arms and waited.

She was genuinely surprised that Yukari had kissed her on the forehead rather than go for the lips like she thought she would, but wanted to display none of it. It was a nice change of pace from the near-routine harassment she usually got from her, usually after trying to collar Reimu, but she wasn't going to admit something like that! "Now you can speak without the barrier between language and understanding hindering you. You're free to do as you wish, for good or ill, so make the most of it, my angel~" She stepped away, then vanished in a pillar of blinding light.

Tenshi spoke four words under her breath while the crowd was still distracted: "God damn it Yukari."
>> No. 20245
>and especially not the young boy who looked like he was staring at a goddess in human form.

I'm waiting.
>> No. 20248
I wonder if this Yukari is the same as in AoS... as she's prone to go braless much like that Yukari.
>> No. 20252
I'm starting to wonder if it's even possible for Yukari to show up and not make me headdesk.
>> No. 20323
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20323
Honestly, I find myself genuinely unable to continue with this despite willing myself to do otherwise. This was a half-baked concept at best and now I'm paying for it by not knowing how to proceed. Sure, the OC's settled upon, but seriously... I ran into this headfirst the way I did AoS.

But that's a poor way to write a story, so I want to put this on haitus and work on something I have spent a great deal of time working out, and want to write.

So, I'm going to leave something up to a vote.
[X]Keep going with this.
[X]Put this on haitus and shift gears.
>> No. 20324
[X]Put this on hiatus and shift gears.

Really, I doubt anyone would fault you for doing something you'd rather do over something you don't.

Are we to be privy to this new idea or do we get to wait till you start it up?
>> No. 20325
[x] Put on hiatus and shift gears.

>Shota
Damnit.
>> No. 20326
[X]Keep going with this.

Normally I would say you should write what you want, but "I'm having trouble writing this, so let's start another story" is the "What could possibly go wrong?" of fanfictions.
>> No. 20327
[X]Put this on haitus and shift gears.

Don't try if you can't.
>> No. 20328
[X]Put this on haitus and shift gears.

If you end up having to face up to the idea that you might not like writing anything, so be it. Way too many people are in love with the idea of being something while hating the actual effort involved.
>> No. 20329
[X]Put this on haitus and shift gears.

No shame in putting something off until you clear your plate, you do have 2-3 other stories/shorts waiting.
>> No. 20330
>[X]Put this on haitus and shift gears.

And then the story was forgotten.
>> No. 20331
>>20324

If I can't put my all into writing it, I'd rather shift to something I can put that kind of effort into willingly.

I hate to influence decisions, but the 'new' idea is the second run of AoS, massively retooled to the point where it will look halfway decent instead of something I crapped out on a whim. Like this story.

>>20326

Well, the difference between the typical person writing and I is the fact that this idea was not planned out and the one I've been mulling over and ironing out the other idea for the last year at least.

>>20330

Nah, give it time. If inspiration hits, I'll be working on a functional story the moment I get it.
>> No. 20333
>>20331
>Well, the difference between the typical person writing and I is the fact that this idea was not planned out and the one I've been mulling over and ironing out the other idea for the last year at least.

As far as I know, many stories here are started on a whim. That's why they're quicly stopped.
>> No. 20336
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20336
>>20331
>> No. 20337
>>20336
>curage_wolf_Poster.jpg

/th/ is over to the left about 6 paces.


I'm going to say [x] Hiatus blah blah blah because if you cant find inspiration for a story, It's not a story. It's just shit.
>> No. 20340
>>20331
The last thing you need to do is start YET another story with the 2-3 you have going. Try finishing the alchemist story first at least as it seems the easiest one to do.
>> No. 20341
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20341
>>20340
Sometimes, writers simply don't want to finish their stories. Accept this. Raging about it will only piss you and them off.
>> No. 20346
>>20341
I wasn't talking about this being put on hiatus, but rather him putting out yet another idea before finishing others. I don't want him to end up another HY or AngryDesu, with dead stories in nearly every board.
>> No. 20409
>20331
Considering you're not going to finish this story, will you be finishing your /at/ shorts (http://www.touhou-project.com/at/res/5764.html) or Wintertime Alchemist (http://www.touhou-project.com/coriander/res/2928.html)?
>> No. 20412
>>20409

For the /at/ shorts... Honestly, I'm a bit burnt out on writing porn for the sake of porn. While the Eirin short is unfinished, it's been sitting for almost eight months now. I've forgotten what I wanted to do with it and lack the drive to finish it.

Wintertime Alchemist will continue, though I need to set aside some PC time to get a thread started and the post re-written since the whole bot attack faggotry resulted in the site being in an unstable enough state to not remember that I had posted anything. Coincidentally, now that /shrine/ covers the Human Village and Myouren Temple, I'll be moving the story there instead of to /Eientei/ as I had originally planned.
>> No. 20413
>>20412
So we have all the Innocent Maiden Nightmare nuts to blame for the Eirin short going unfinished? How typical of them even despite Sanae smut being absurdly plentiful compared say Eirin smut.
>> No. 20415
>>20413
Please don't remind me of that story. By butt is still sore.
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