Hello there, welcome. This is going to be updated often if i can help it. This first choice is the first important one, so choose carefully
You have been waiting at this light for what feels like forever. It's times like this you wish you could just shadow travel home. But alas, you can't even use your powers for that. This reality has already reached a ridiculous tech level when it comes to monitoring people. You think to yourself, 'when i eventually leave this reality, I'm going too call it big brother world.' that will be astute. But for now you just want to go- oh the light changed. "finally" you mutter as you go home. After reaching your little cottage on the edge of civilization you unpack the car and walk up the stairs to the front porch.
As you use your shadows manifest to make your door key, you feel a shiver go down your spine. 'something unusual is going to happen today.' you hear go through your head. You don't know where the thought came from but you know better to write it off. You open your door and bring your groceries to the kitchen.
After unpacking the groceries you go into the living room. What were you going to do again?
[oh crap, you for got the fish in the trunk!] Gap path
[lets listen to that Hollywood vampires album] Scarlet path
[I'm wiped, time for alcohol] Shrine path
[what's that sound in the kitchen?] Idiot path
No. 186154
Using words I can not even bring across how incredibly sad it is to use a picture of your persona or whatever to start your story. Just wow. |
No. 186155
>>186154 |
No. 186157
that was the prototype for the main character, yeah. it is based off my avatar though. I had no idea what to do with him though so my faceless avatar made the perfect stand in, seeing as the MC and my avatar have similar styles in clothes. |
No. 186161
Having found some of your other work, I'm going to implore you to delete this thread and please lurk for a while. You're already at risk of getting ripped to shreds as it is, so it'd be best to just start from scratch after coming to grips with what makes decent writing. I should emphasise that this is not FF.net. Our standards may not be spectacularly high, but work that passes for average on FF.net tends to fall well below them. |
No. 186173
I sense potential for you as a writer. With a little polish and a bit more thought and a lot more lurking, you could do well here. |
No. 186182
[X] [I'm wiped, time for alcohol] Shrine path |
No. 186183
I think you need to lurk a bit more, friend. |
No. 186187
(Different anon) |
No. 186190
File 14483343932.png - (167.94KB, 500x500, never give up sheep.png) [iqdb] ![]() >>186182 |
No. 186194
my intentions are to try and learn as I go, this story will be an adventure for me as much as you guys, you get to decide where it may go, and I get to learn from more experienced writers. |
No. 186328
Welcome to THP! The unholy spawn of /jp/ and /tg/'s story threads! |