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5208 No. 5208
It is high time to perform this ritual. I have delayed it for too long. There are no excuses this time. My foster parents are away with my step-sister and I have access to the secret basement.

Tonight we have a total lunar eclipse and father always said it is good for magic rituals. That is the reason they are away, too.
Saturn is properly aligned and Mars won’t make any trouble this time. Maybe Pluto could do something… no, the poor little dwarf planet will have little impact on my magic tonight.
Is snow still falling outside? Oh yes, it is! It is snowing! I have noticed that my powers increase during any kind of precipitation.
Conditions could hardly be more ideal!

I rush downstairs into the basement with everything I need. My supplies were stored in a large box under my bed.
That is the only place where my neurotic mother doesn’t check every Sunday.
First I have to draw the circle with crayons and fresh blood, just like the old book says. I’m using pig blood. We keep it in larger quantities in the fridge for my younger sister. I still can’t believe she is experimenting with vampirism… it was probably because she read that novel.
The circle is drawn. I paid great attention to the details because some demons are greatly angered if you draw the circle badly.
I’m using a universal circle that can be used for practically any demon in existence. Well, you should draw the higher demon’s personal circles if you want any real favor from them.
I light vermillion red candles, one by one, then I turn out the lights. These candles are infused with magical powders that are usually used in potions and other magical stuff. This makes them glow brighter and fill the air with magical particles that smell like decaying flowers…
Now the only things missing are the clean papyrus in the center and my blood on it, then I can begin chanting.

No, there are two major things missing. An offering must be made for the summoned demon! What would be an appropriate gift? I do not possess anything great, except for this little piece of jewelry… my silver demonic earring… well bugger. I should have thought about the gift earlier! It doesn’t matter now, this ritual must be done and there is not much time before the lunar eclipse.

The second thing I miss is a demon name. Despite the long delays, I still haven’t decided who to summon to my basement.
Okay, I won’t consider greater demons. I am a beginner, I have little to offer. Besides, they would most likely kill me without some higher protection. This basement is protected by some fine enchantments, but it is only sufficient for smaller devils.
So... let me find the page with the demon names.


Ugh, most pages are barely readable! I could only find three clean entries.
I should skim through these entries...

KAGHAMIN is the great lawyer in the western underground division, but his deeds as an attorney are overshadowed by his greatest invention, spiced rum. He appears as a humanoid that greatly resembles human, but has the traditional demon wings, three black horns and hooves.
Sometimes he prefers his secondary form. This form was rarely seen and is typically described as complicated clockwork octahedron made from various different metals, including yttrium, iridium, platinum, aluminum, iron, gold, cooper and also uranium as he personally claimed to me.

One should note that he is very friendly, despite his constant frown and high status. We often get reports by junior wizards that they got gifts and services for free or for a symbolic price.
But beware not to wear anything that could resemble bakers or cooks as he has killed my two friends who just happened to wear aprons. He dislikes bakers, cooks and aprons for an unknown reason and when asked about it he will become silent until you change the subject.
His gifts include spiced rum, high quality golden rum, books about loopholes in laws around the world, clockwork machines and sometimes he will offer advice (it works wonders, he helped me evade taxes). Other items include watches, lamps and also necklaces.

Note that despite his friendliness, he has a tendency to bite wizards when he feels like it. His bite marks do not heal easily and they glow, too. I have found difficult to explain it to my non-wizard friends why my wounds glows so brightly and I had to wear a scarf during summer.

LAHAB is an entertainer in the northwestern underground division. Some consider him a greater demon, but he is just a lowly demon pretending to be a higher ranking one. His job is to entertain the demons but due to his fairly common mood swings and unsuccessful method acting he has lost his whole fortune twice in the last thousand years. While he was regaining riches he lived in brimstone caves in the rural areas for a very long time.
He claims to know everything about caves.

LAHAB is known for only one form which has a striking resemblance with harlequins. The only thing that clearly separates him from harlequins is his bright purple ribbon he wears on his right sleeve.
When summoned, LAHAB will begin to sing aloud. Whoever hears this song will instantly know more about musical instruments, but will not learn how to play them. This knowledge is often very limited.
Anyone who summons him should be careful because he is moody. When he is happy and jolly he will give out gifts cheaply, requesting only a meal made by humans. When the harlequin is sad and drowsy he will give gifts for free, but he will usually not give the requested item.
Beware when LAHAB is quiet and does answer any questions. If the demon frowns during your first question then just tell him to go. If the harlequin shakes and smiles, then it is too late as he’ll [unreadable] anyone nearby, disregarding their [unreadable] or looks. To this day, every wizard that summoned him survived this with only minor injuries.
Note: never tell him you are an actor as he will be jealous and disappear.

SHASHAPO is a dancer in the rural areas near [unreadable] located near the greatest demon city, [unreadable]. She is famous for her dances that strike as bizarre, but are always pleasant to watch. She is also infamous for her tendency to never leave places she likes. These places are usually castles and palaces built by great archdukes in the rural areas.
Her appearance is fascinating and breathtaking. She usually appears as a sexually attractive belly dancer with red scaly skin and a very long blue tongue. Her other form is very similar, only that her skin is blue and her tongue is green. One wizard claimed that she has another, third form, where her skin is green and her tongue red.
Despite her beauty and limitless stamina to dance, she is ranked fairly low in the other plane and she has been often ridiculed for her quirky nature.

Whoever summons her should be very respectful and not even think about seducing her as she will leave at the first sexual hint.
Her gifts largely depend on her mood and the gift the wizard offers. Usually she will just give the wizard a white kerchief that cleans perfectly and never stains as she can’t value items. If she is in a good mood and the gift is sufficient (jewelry works wonders), then she will grant the wizard such dancing skill that he or she will surpass very many.
Like I mentioned before, be respectful as she will disappear at the slightest hint that you want to do any sexual activity with her.

Who will I summon?
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>> No. 5209

Demon lawyer sounds fun.
>> No. 5210

I really got no idea what this will result in, but the odds of mysterious death seem the lowest.
>> No. 5211

ffffffff got to!
>> No. 5212

Still needs some work, but this is already a million times more readable than the short you wrote for the contest.
>> No. 5213
Its says we're a novice to demon summoning, but than we have things like >he personally claimed to me. So either we have randomly met Kaghamin before, or we have summoned him prior to this. Either way, Kaghamin seems like a bro, except his strange biting fetish...
>> No. 5214
Twintails tsundere demon~
>> No. 5215
>> No. 5216

I'm pretty sure it's the author of the summoning book doing the "I"'s in the demon descriptions.
>> No. 5217

Seems like the best choice, stable, reasonable, if getting bitten and never being able to be a cook.
>> No. 5218
What is this I don't even
>> No. 5220

Lawyers are awesome.
>> No. 5221

Best chance of becoming lord of the dance.
>> No. 5222
>> No. 5223
[X]ICON OF SINlol no

>> No. 5224
Correct, the ''I'' in the descriptions is the book's author. It is hundred+ years old and he didn't bother to write objectively.

Votes counted, writing soonish.
>> No. 5226
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I shall summon KAGHAMIN, the great demon lawyer and inventor of spiced rum!
The papyrus is in the center, my blood is on it and now I only have to begin chanting the ancient text to summon the demon to my side.

Slowly, my mind passes into a trance… I don’t know w-what I’m saying, but, but everything feels okay, every word written in the book leaves my mouth at, at lightning speed… my mind can’t keep up, my thoughts are s-speeding, I am slurring, I must, I must stop this… there must be an end to this madness- no, hell no, not now. I must push on, I only have to read this one last p-paragraph… and then, and then...

Sweet goodness, what am I doing? My arms are totally out of control, waving to and fro. I can b-barely feel them and wow, I’m s-stuttering in my t-thoughts!
Suddenly, the floor begins to shake as the summoning circle begins to glow brightly. The candles glow even brighter than before and the papyrus begins burns!
I scream his name at the top of my lungs. KAGHAMIN!

His transparent image appears and the eternal form rises from the burning papyrus!

“Behold, mortal, I, the great KEGHEMYN stand before you!”

The mighty demon proudly stands before me. The description in the book is accurate. He has three black horns on his head, a constant frown on his face, large hooves and the usual demon wings, but the book didn’t mention that he is Hispanic. And don’t get me wrong, but the man is handsome, sexy, a true heartbreaker.
KAGHAMIN is wearing something that I would call a hybrid between the traditional mariachi clothes and a nice, elegant suit from the 80’s. And good grief, look that at huge necklace! I bet all the rappers out there would be jealous when they saw that bling bling!

“What is your desire, human?”

“Oh great KAGHAMIN-”

“Please, don’t mispronounce my name. I’m KEGHEMYN. The author of that book you are holding was drunk when he summoned me. I killed his two friends as a warning, but no, he never remembered my name. I still answer to this name just because the government down here is too slow to upgrade my name. I sued them, but it never works. And lately more and more Japanese wizards have been trying to summon me because my name bears a resemblance to some cartoon character.”

The tall mariachi glares down on me... his gaze could turn candles alight, I swear!
“I hope you didn’t call me for that reason, eh?”

“No, I would never! Great KEGHEYMIN, please take my small offering, this earring-”

“Nice little earring you got. I bet it was made by my cousin, the great silversmith. Thanks, but I don’t need it. Did you figure out how to activate its hidden potential?”

“No Sir, I don’t think anyone has done that-”

“You should at least try. It is a magical masterpiece! Very well, what do you desire, novice? Please be quick, I have an important trial in just five minutes and it doesn’t look too good for my poor little client. I don’t even have the time to properly bite you.”

“I’ll have some rum and maybe-”
I am interrupted mid-sentence by the violent shaking in the room.

“It looks like your circle is about to disappear. I can’t be here any longer because your circle can’t maintain my presence for much longer. Here, have some high quality white rum and I’ll give you a little extra, I’ll grant you some extra *gibberish*!”

I can't understand a word he says, his voice is too distorted. I begin to feel… tense? My body aches a little in every place where you can feel pain, my face muscles involuntarily twitch for a while and my hands are paralyzed, frozen in the air after all that shaking and waving.

“Thank you, oh great inventor of spiced rum!”

Steadily, his image begins to fade away as the circle is losing power. He says one final ‘’you’re welcome, kid’’ before he disappears and goes home, to the other plane.
I confess. I expect more from the demon. Still, I am very satisfied with the results. I successfully summoned a greater demon and I even got 12 bottles with high quality white rum for free! I better clean up this mess now.

Wait, why is the room still shaking? It should have stopped by now. And I think the circle should stop glowing any second now- by the dark prince, the crayon is burning! What the hell, the book never mentioned burning crayons!

I better get away- huh? I can’t move! I’m completely paralyzed! The flames spread like wildfire and now I’m surrounded by the flames! I’m trapped!
Huh? The flames are losing in intensity. They are gone in seconds. As they stop burning I am no longer paralyzed and I can move my limbs again. What was going on? The book never mentioned this, not even in the ‘’things that could go awfully wrong’’ section…

I better clean up thish messsh shoon… y am eye sho drowshy?


Ugh… my head hurts so badly. What happened and where am I? My eyes are open, but I can’t see, everything is so freaking blurry...
It is so loud here, just like in a big city. I can hear voice talking… they are talking about me.

“How did he get here?”

“I’m not sure, he just… appeared.”

“What is in these bottles? It smells like booze. Yes, definitely booze.”

“What are you going to do?”

“I’m going to drag him to the hospital. It must be a drunken wizard messing around with teleportation spell, there is no other explanation.”
Ugh. Something picks me up. Whatever it is, it is very strong and has no difficulty lifting my skinny body. I can’t move, my body is aching all over the place...


I wake up… my vision is still blurry, but not as blurry as before. I can see a gray ceiling and white lights. This is definitely not the mage hospital and this is definitely not home.
Judging by the conversation I heard I must be far, far away from home, somewhere where they know what a ‘’wizard’’ and ‘’spells’’ are.
My vision recovers. I see someone sitting next to me. It is a girl… she has blonde hair, ruby red eyes and a white T-shirt on. What is that on her head? Is it a horn? WHAT?

“Hey nurse, the wizard is waking up.”
“I shall give him some stimulants as the doctor prescribed.”

Oof! A sharp pain in my left arm… it feels like a syringe just more painful. I want to scream, but the pain soon fades away.
Moments later I feel my heart beating rapidly, my vision becomes clear and even the bad headache gets less intense.
The nurse leaves us… and the horned woman sits next to my bed.

“Are feeling better, wizard?”
I turn my head to the left, towards the blonde girl. My neck hurts, but not that bad.

“Umm, yes, I’m feeling much better after that injection.”
“You are probably wondering where you are, right?”
Judging by the white bed, boring ceiling, fairly strong white lights and the nurse, this can only be one place.

“I’m in a hospital, right?”
“Yes, yes, you are. Do you know how you got here? I found you falling down drunk on the sidewalk and I carried you all the way here.”
“Thank you very much… girl. Umm, what is your name?

Did her cheeks turn pink when I called her a girl? No, I must be imagining things, she didn’t blush. Why would she blush, anyway? She looks about my age, no more, no less, calling her a girl is appropriate. Her voice may be a little deeper than average, but that is normal, right?
“I’m Yuugi. What’s your name, wizard?”
“My name is Leon. It is nice to meet you, Yuugi.”
“Okay, Leon. Now please tell me something. How did you enter the underground city?”

What? How did I get to hell? I did everything by the book and nothing could happen... the demon I summoned was friendly, he gave me a gift and disappeared without any issues. Sure, the circle suddenly broke into flames, but that can't teleport me to another plane, like hell. I still feel my body, so I am alive, I didn't just die and go to hell...

“I am in the great underground city? Sweet goodness, how did that happen?”
“I’m wondering the same thing. Did you cast spells while you were drunk?”
“My spell kind of failed, yes, but I was certainly not drunk.”
“Your twelve bottles suggest otherwise.”

Oh, the rum.
“No, you have the wrong idea.”
“It is okay, I am also heavy on booze! I’m always drunk!”
She... smiles. How can she say things like that without any embarrassment?

“You look pretty sober to me.”
“I stopped drinking when you appeared behind me, out of nowhere.”

Suddenly, the nurse comes in. She says something to Yuugi so quietly that I can’t make out what she is saying…
“We notified the shrine maiden about your appearance. She should be here shortly.”
“Why did you notify a shrine maiden that I have appeared?”

Shrine maiden? Hell has no shrine maidens, what is she talking about?
“Well, she guards the border and any breeching must be reported to her.”
“Okay... what is a shrine maiden doing in hell?”
“This isn’t hell, this is Gensokyo, outsider!”

The horned woman smiles again. She seems very amused by my questions.
“This is... very interesting.”

[ ] Try to stand up and get something to eat, you are hungry.
[ ] Take a nap until that shrine maiden gets here.
[ ] Talk with Yuugi, you want to know her better.

I encourage write-ins with food suggestion and also questions for Yuugi. Please keep it real.
I also encourage feedback.
>> No. 5227
[x] Talk with Yuugi, you want to know her better.
-[x] Ask for details about the city.
-[x] Ask about Yuugi herself, what's with the horn?
Sorry, I have nothing better.
>> No. 5228
[X] Try to stand up and get something to eat, you are hungry.
--[X]Protein! We need meat!
>> No. 5229
[X] Try to stand up and get something to eat, you are hungry.
--[X]Protein! We need meat!
>> No. 5230
[X] Try to stand up and get something to eat, you are hungry.

Boy needs some meat on his bones.
>> No. 5231
[X] Try to stand up and get something to eat, you are hungry.
--[X]Protein! We need meat!

>> No. 5232
[x] >>5227
>> No. 5233
I hope you don't mind if I combine both votes.
First we'll eat something meaty in the cafeteria and later talk with Yuugi.

[X] Try to stand up and get something to eat, you are hungry.
--[X]Protein! We need meat!
[x] Talk with Yuugi, you want to know her better.
-[x] Ask for details about the city.
-[x] Ask about Yuugi herself, what's with the horn?

>> No. 5235
[Q] Stand your ground. You were not drunk, your spell simply backfired. You had no intention to breach any border, you just happened to appear in this ‘’Gensokyo’’ land.

[Q] Tell her the truth about yourself. You are not a powerful mage, you are mediocre at best. Your magic powers are limited by your impure wizard blood.

Blatantly honest. A good thing when dealing with demons.
>> No. 5237
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[X] Try to stand up and get something to eat, you are hungry.
--[X] Protein! We need meat!
[X] Talk with Yuugi, you want to know her better.
-[X] Ask for details about the city.
-[X] Ask about Yuugi herself, what's with the horn?

That injection sure fired me up, but it also made me hungry.

“You know what? I’m really hungry. Actually, I’m starving.”

“Hey, me too! Breakfast didn’t fill me up at all. The hospital has a cafeteria downstairs, we can brunch there. Can you stand up and walk?”

“Yeah, I’ll be fine. Look, I’ll get up by myself-”

Ouch. My poor achy back hits the cold grey ground as I fall down from the bed. Next time I won’t force all my weight to the side and roll down the bed like this.

“Are you okay there?”

Yuugi quickly offers me a hand to get up. Hey, is her skirt... transparent? No, transparent is not the right word... it is translucent at best. You can see her legs somewhat, but they’re all blurry and blue from the skirt. I take her hand- woah, what a strong pull! The girl is strong, I tell you!

“I thought you were heavier, sorry that I pulled you up so strong. You are a lightweight!”

“Hey, I’m just skinny. And you are very strong, too.”

We go downstairs. I walk very slowly and carefully not to fall over... those stimulants may have awaken me and lessened the pain, but my legs still hurt pretty badly. My rumbling stomach doesn’t help, too. The cafeteria is nearly empty. What should I get? I crave some meat. I need my proteins!

Let’s see what they have. Rice, more rice, rice with seaweed, rice with seafood, noodle soup, more noodle soup, something that looks like those Japanese rice cakes and they also have sushi and spiced vegetable stew. There is no real meat, just seafood and fish- freshly grilled chicken skewers! Yes, that’s the meat I want to eat!

I’ll have the skewers and maybe some rice, too. Yuugi has something called ‘’soki soba’’ and it looks like noodle soup with pork meat. It looks delicious, but nothing it can beat the smell of grilled chicken meat! I can’t wait to dig in!


Man, that food filled a hole! I feel much, much better now. So, where is that shrine maiden? We have been eating for a while and she still didn’t appear in the hospital.

“Where is Reimu? Is she slacking off again?”

“Reimu? You mean the shrine maiden?”

The blonde woman nods. I can’t take my eyes off the horn as her head is moving up and down. Is there a yellow star on it? I now realize how her red horn goes well with her red eyes. She isn’t an albino, her skin is healthy and her hair is a rather strong blonde color, so her red eyes must be natural. Their color is special, it is no ordinary red. They are read like rubies.

“The shrine maiden usually responds quickly to such events, but she’s sluggish today. She said she’ll come as soon as possible. Well, that is what the nurse told me.”

“Oh, so you have phones in the underground?”

“Yes, we do. The kappa made them.”

Kappa? Aren’t kappa Japanese mythological creatures, living in waters, eating children and cucumbers? So they are for real? Hmm, it seems that this place called ‘’Gensokyo’’ is filled with more magical and mythological creatures than I first thought. What could Yuugi be? Her horn suggests that she is a demon, but I am in doubts. It is best to ask her directly.

“Hey Yuugi, I don’t want to be rude, but what are you? I’d say you are a demon, judging by your red horn.”

“Yeah, my horn gives it away, I am an oni. All the oni in Gensokyo live here in the underground city.”

“Can you tell me more about the underground city?”

“Sure. The underground city was build long, long ago as a refuge for oni and other banished youkai. We didn’t get along well with humans, but times have changed. Now that the industrial revolution is in full motion there seems to less trouble and more cooperation.”

This land is going through an industrial revolution? This seems interesting.
“There is an industrial revolution going on?”

“Yes, the kappas are inventing more and more things. While their inventions were first only popular with their tengu allies and the kappa themselves, their influence quickly spread here, to the underground city as well.”

She leans back on her chair. Wow, I didn’t notice but she is rather well-endowed. No, that is an understatement, she IS well-endowed. I must... not look directly... at her bust-
Okay, I am focusing on her eyes now. I don’t want to be rude to an oni, right?

“Hey, I totally forgot! Here is your earring!”


Yuugi hands me the shiny, silver earring. I used to wear it from time to time, but it occasionally gave me bad headaches and a chilly feeling on my skin. This chill is great on hot days and makes the heat bearable, but the headaches afterward can be very painful. I still have to unlock the hidden potential KEGHEMYN mentioned. What could it be, I wonder?

“So, who is the new guy here?”

The shrine maiden appears at the cafeteria entrance. She looks around the empty cafeteria and notices me and Yuugi. Her glare is serious, outright scary. Why is she looking at me like that!? She glares me the same way as if I killed her family or something!

“Hey Reimu, come and sit down!”

The scary shrine maiden sits down next to Yuugi. Her glare is no longer scary, but rather annoyed and slightly angry.
I bet she is angry because I appeared and she had to go to work, if she truly is such a lazy person as Yuugi implied.

“What is your name, outsider?”

“I’m Leon.”

“So, Leon, tell me, how did you get here?”

How I got here? I’m not sure what to tell her. Should I tell her the truth, everything about the spell? Will she even believe me?

“He used magic when he was way too drunk and now he turned up in Gensokyo.”

“So he got here with his own magic? Woah there!”

The shrine maiden leans back. Her face suddenly lightens up and she looks quite... surprised.

“You got here with your own powers?”

“If I think about it, yes, I actually have got here on my own.”

“I see, I see. You breached the border with your magic, stealthy. I didn’t notice you and Yukari also didn’t notice her. Somehow you appeared here in the underground city. This is an incident-”

The shrine maiden stands up and crosses her arms. Is she really a miko? Her outfit is weird, she wears a skirt and... detached sleeves? Wait, this isn’t the time to contemplate her looks.

“Hey, hey, calm down Reimu! He was drunk when he was using his spells!”

“How do you know? Were you with him?”

“No, but he appeared with twelve bottles of booze. The guy was smashed!”

“What if he just pretended? How can you be sure?”

“Hey, you can’t challenge him, he can barely walk!”

“Do you realize how powerful he could be?”

Excuse generator v1.1
[ ] Confess. You were totally smashed, you had absolutely no idea what you were doing. When you tried to teleport home, away from the bar, you failed miserably.
[ ] Stand your ground. You were not drunk, your spell simply backfired. You had no intention to breach any border, you just happened to appear in this ‘’Gensokyo’’ land.

About your power level:
[ ] Tell her the truth about yourself. You are not a powerful mage, you are mediocre at best. Your magic powers are limited by your impure wizard blood.
[ ] Lie about your power, try to intimidate her. She is just a barrier maiden, in charge of some border, right? And while you are not the greatest mage, you are pretty powerful.
-[ ] Still, try to solve things peacefully.
-[ ] She won’t challenge you, you’ll challenge her! Your physical condition may not be too great, but you still have enough juice to ice some pretentious shrine maiden!

Upgraded update.
>> No. 5238
[X] Stand your ground. You were not drunk, your spell simply backfired. You had no intention to breach any border, you just happened to appear in this ‘’Gensokyo’’ land.

[X] Tell her the truth about yourself. You are not a powerful mage, you are mediocre at best. Your magic powers are limited by your impure wizard blood.

Reimu's in an Incident-Stomping mood. We do not wish to be stomped.
>> No. 5239
[x] Stand your ground. You were not drunk, your spell simply backfired. You had no intention to breach any border, you just happened to appear in this ‘’Gensokyo’’ land.
[x] Tell her the truth about yourself. You are not a powerful mage, you are mediocre at best. Your magic powers are limited by your impure wizard blood.

Dammit Reimu, go back to being lazy.
>> No. 5240
[x] Stand your ground. You were not drunk, your spell simply backfired. You had no intention to breach any border, you just happened to appear in this ‘’Gensokyo’’ land.
[x] Tell her the truth about yourself. You are not a powerful mage, you are mediocre at best. Your magic powers are limited by your impure wizard blood.
>> No. 5241
[X] Stand your ground. You were not drunk, your spell simply backfired. You had no intention to breach any border, you just happened to appear in this ‘’Gensokyo’’ land.
[X] Tell her the truth about yourself. You are not a powerful mage, you are mediocre at best. Your magic powers are limited by your impure wizard blood.
>> No. 5242
[x] Stand your ground. You were not drunk, your spell simply backfired. You had no intention to breach any border, you just happened to appear in this ‘’Gensokyo’’ land.
[x] Tell her the truth about yourself. You are not a powerful mage, you are mediocre at best. Your magic powers are limited by your impure wizard blood.
>> No. 5251
Votes counted, writing.
>> No. 5253
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[x] Stand your ground. You were not drunk, your spell simply backfired. You had no intention to breach any border, you just happened to appear in this ‘’Gensokyo’’ land.
[x] Tell her the truth about yourself. You are not a powerful mage, you are mediocre at best. Your magic powers are limited by your impure wizard blood.

“Let me say something!”

Reimu leans forward, closer towards me. Her arms are still folded and that is generally not a good thing. It means she took a closed, defensive position. Yeah, she doesn’t trust me at all.

“Speak, Leon.”

“First, I have to correct Yuugi. I wasn’t drunk at all, I just happened to have those twelve bottles close to me, okay? The truth is that I tried a completely new spell and the last part failed miserably, sending me to another world.”

“You want to tell me that you didn’t get here on purpose?”

“No, no way. I never wanted to get here in the first place. Really, I had no prior knowledge about the border or this land. Yuugi was the first to tell me about it and the underground city.”

“Leon thought this is hell, the one made from brimstone and fire!”

I look at Yuugi for a moment and see just how tense she is. Fortunately, the shrine maiden’s face is now less scary, she is just pissed off.

“And Reimu, I am flattered that you think I am powerful at all. I’m just a lowly mage with impure wizard blood. My magic abilities are mediocre at best.”

“You seem oddly convincing when you get serious, Leon. Okay, I’ll believe you. If you wanted to get here on purpose and you really knew about this place then you would simply go through the shrine gates with no magic at all.”

I’m relieved. I try not to sigh too loudly as that would indicate that I’m happy that they bought my story, right? Yuugi is no longer tense and she looks just as cheerful as before. Even Reimu looks calm. She is still annoyed, but her face expression is now... milder than before?

“Fine, I won’t consider this an incident, just an accident. The only question that remains is where Leon is going to stay. I can’t send him home through the border.”

“Is there a special reason why not?”

“You are a wizard, even if you have impure blood. I can’t send you home as the border won’t allow you to go back home. Only human outsider can be sent back.”

“Hey Leon, are you alright?”

I thought my headache was nearly gone, but this just made it come back. Yuugi looks concerned, sad even. I can feel how my facial muscles are tensing up to make the biggest frown any living being has ever seen.

Ugh, I suppress my urge to scream. I can’t go home anymore? I never liked my homeland, but I had some friends there and school was fun, too. Sure, I hated physical education but everything else was nice. I also didn’t dislike my foster family. Mom was neurotic, sister was obsessed with vampires but dad was a real bro to me.

Sweet goodness, my head hurts to so much... it is like all the pain I felt before all over my body is now concentrated somewhere inside my head.

“He looks devastated. So, where is he going to stay, Yuugi?”

“Can’t you send him to the human village?”

“Yes, I can but I’m not sure about their attitude toward outsider mages. Leon would stand out too much. Besides, he is not Japanese, he would hardly fit in.”

“Right, that would cause some problems. Hey, he could stay at your shrine! It is a nice, quiet place with hot springs and a gathering place for many interesting people!”

“No, just no. The last thing I need is another one to munch my food! Didn’t we agree to help move Suika to your apartment? She is drinking all my sake!”

“We’ll handle that... later. Are there any other locations where he could stay?”

“Well, there is still the Scarlet Devil Mansion.”

“Isn’t that the mansion where the vampire lives? No, I won’t let him stay there! He is too skinny to be bitten by her. She’d drink all his blood!”

“Remilia wouldn’t bite him, she isn’t like that.”

The shrine maiden inspects me closely. Why is looking at me like that? It feels like she is undressing me with her eyes... no, girls aren’t that perverted. She is rubbing her chin, in thoughts.

“On second thought, yes, she would definitely bite him.”

“So, what options are left?”

“There is still Yukari, but I’m not sure if he would fit in there. The place is far, far away and it is desolate, in the middle of nowhere.”

“What about the new temple? I heard the folks there are very friendly.”

“No way, not at the Buddhist temple! Well, except if he really wants to, but it is boring there. He can also stay on the mountain. They are former outsiders there and he would fit in well. ”

“Can’t I just stay here, in the underground city?”

I must intervene. If I can’t go home, then at least I can choose where I’ll live, right? All the options they presented to this moment are bad. I get to choose between a Japanese village, a shrine where I’m not wanted, a mansion with vampires, a place in the middle of nowhere, some boring Buddhist temple, and a goddamn mountain and then I have the option to stay in great underground city.

“Umm, you want to stay here with the oni? Are you absolutely sure you want to stay here, underground, and not somewhere where you can see the Sun?”

“Well, the other options you discussed are... strange at best. Yuugi is an oni and she’s friendly, so if the other oni are like her... then I would like to stay here.”

Reimu and Yuugi gaze at me in silence for a moment. Man, this is so awkward.

“The oni here are friendly, sure. Okay, so you’ll stay in the underground city, fine. Can he stay at your place, Yuugi? You two seem to be quite friendly to each other.”

Yuugi hesitates. She doesn’t want to answer to the question for some reason.

“Umm, you see, my apartment is very messy at the moment. He could stay at the palace or maybe by my friends until I clean up.”

“Your friends? You probably mean the spider and the jealous girl?”

“I trust them much more then my fellow drunkards.”

“How long do you need to clean up your apartment?”

“I’m not sure. It might take hours, maybe days.”

The shrine maiden leans back on her chair again. Her arms are still folded, but her face tells me that she is calm, just slightly annoyed by the situation.

“I think it is better if he stays at the palace. I’m sure Satori and her pets wouldn’t mind an outsider staying at their place.”

“I’m not sure about the palace... Satori comes over as creepy to new folk. Let him rather stay at Yamame’s place. Or maybe even Parsee’s place, the girl needs some company. Who knows, maybe she won’t be so jealous.”

“I know Yamame is a fun person, but isn’t she too quirky? And I’m in doubts that your jealous Parsee will ever change, she is jealousy incarnate.”

They continue arguing which location would be best suited for me to stay for the night. It seems that each location has its advantages and disadvantages... I also don’t feel like staying in this hospital. The stay will probably cost.

Where should I go?
[ ] Help Yuugi clean her apartment, can’t be that bad, right?
[ ] Stay at the palace, the place must be magnificent if it is called a palace!
[ ] The jealous girl seems interesting. You must see if she is really so jealous.
[ ] I’ll rather stay at the quirky, but fun girl’s place. Is she really a spider?
>> No. 5254
[Q] Stay at the palace, the place must be magnificent if it is called a palace!

He seems drawn to that kind of stuff.
>> No. 5255
[x] Help Yuugi clean her apartment, can’t be that bad, right?
Hey, if she has to clean out the place so that we can stay there, the least we can do is help.
>> No. 5256
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[x] The jealous girl seems interesting. You must see if she is really so jealous.

Why not try something new?
>> No. 5257
[X] Stay at the palace, the place must be magnificent if it is called a palace!

>> No. 5258
[x] I’ll rather stay at the quirky, but fun girl’s place. Is she really a spider?

>> No. 5259
[X] Stay at the palace, the place must be magnificent if it is called a palace!

Probably the most comfortable, and staying with Satori and Koishi should be interesting.
>> No. 5264
[X] Stay at the palace, the place must be magnificent if it is called a palace!
>> No. 5265

[X] Stay at the palace, the place must be magnificent if it is called a palace!

Will write in the morning.
>> No. 5269
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[X] Stay at the palace, the place must be magnificent if it is called a palace!

Their arguing is going nowhere, so I’ll tell them what I think.

“Hey Yuugi, I would love to help you clean your apartment, but I’m sure if I’ll be a help at all, considering my poor condition. I’m still achy all over my body.”

Maybe I’m exaggerating my pain, but I’m really in no condition to clean a messy apartment. My head hurts pretty badly right now...

“Hey, thanks, but I don’t want anyone to help me clean that mess. I must do it myself.”

“And I think I made up my mind where I’m going to stay.”

“So, where do you want to stay Leon?”

“I’ll stay at that palace you were talking about. It must be huge and magnificent if it is called a palace, right? They probably have many spare rooms, too.”

“You really want to stay at the palace?”

Yuugi looks surprised while Reimu is satisfied that her option won. I am sorry, but a freaking palace beats any other option. I’d go there even if it was haunted.

“Sure. The lady there must be nice if she has many pets like Reimu said.”

“I guess you are right. She really is nice and the palace has more space than Yamame’s and Parsee’s housings combined. It is just... well, she can get creepy some times.”

“He’ll get used to it. Hey, if he likes the underground city then maybe he won’t find her creepy at all. Leon, no offense, but you are very strange.”

“You are not the first one to notice.”

The shrine maiden smirks at my remark. Does she find me funny? It seems that she is no longer annoyed, but is rather happy. I wonder why?

“It seems my work here is nearly done. The last thing I have to do is to explain the spellcard rules to you. Listen carefully, Leon.”

“I’m listening.”


That was a very intense lecture. First she told me everything about the system’s creation, why the spellcards were made. It seems that they were made to balance the power between humans and the youkai, to protect the combatants and to create a way to peacefully resolve conflicts.

Prototypes were supposedly used by wizard nearly six hundred years ago for practice, but they were never really popular.
Reimu then decided to use this old concept to solve the many problems in Gensokyo.

The rules are simple, but the shrine maiden went into needless details. Basically, the spellcards are just patented projectile patterns that you use during duels. It is best if you make them before duels and have them always ready. You also take turns with your opponent, but you can choose to skip your turn if you feel really confident.

You are not allowed to make impossible patterns, but you are allowed to make such that are difficult to dodge. This is actually encouraged as it will obviously increase your chances to win and the fun you have when you see your opponent struggle with your patterns.

And if you are human and challenge a non-human, the non-human may not turn the challenge down. This can come in handy if you are attacked as the non-human is not allowed to kill you, even if you lose. You just have to do what you agreed when you challenged him or her.

I think that is it. The shrine maiden said that she would gladly demonstrate everything live in a friendly practice duel, but I’m sadly in no state to use magic or to dodge any bullet patterns at the moment. She orders Yuugi to show me once.

“And Yuugi, accompany him to the Palace of the Earth Spirits and tell them I said he’ll stay there. I’ll be going now. Goodbye!”

As say goodbye she stands up and runs to the window- did she just jump out of the window and fly away? Wow, I didn’t believe her when she mentioned aerial combat with spellcards, but now shit just got real.

“Is flying normal around here?”

“Yeah, it is just like breathing. Don’t you know how to fly?”

“No, we have no flying magic where I come from.”

“I’ll show you how once you get better. Shall we go to the palace now?”

“Sure. Hey, umm, where are the twelve bottles?”

“Nine bottles are at my place and three bottles were given to the doctor for your medical treatment. Actually, those were for the two expansive injections you got while you were sleeping.”

“Thanks for taking care of that.”


It was quite a long walk to the palace. While my legs and back don’t hurt as much as they did when I woke up, they still make walking difficult. We had to stop twice and sit down. Man, this is embarrassing! Good thing we are here.

This place is huge! It is a full-blown palace and it is underground, too! Yuugi answers the door while I am still struggling with the last few steps... ouch, my legs hurts pretty badly now. No pain, no pain, I must get to the top!

As I’m getting closer to the top and the doors, I see someone opening them. Her hair is something I would call celadon and her eyes are a dark green-blue color. She is wearing a yellow shirt with a dark green collar that matches her dark green skirt. The girl looks funky and oddly... cute. She looks incredibly cheerful and carefree, too.

“Hello Koishi! How are you?”

“Hey Yuugi! I’ve never been better, what about you?”

“I’m fine! Hey, is your sister home?”

“I think she is bathing at the moment. Hey, who is that guy?”

How embarrassing, I’m breathing so heavily that I can’t even properly introduce myself to my future host. Yuugi asks me if I’m okay and I just nod.
The blonde demon introduces me to the girl in my place.

“I’m Koishi, nice to meet you, Leon~! Hey, why don’t you come inside? I’ll make some tea!”

The two girls walk in front of me and I follow them steadily. While walking is not pleasant, the sights are great. This place may be quite dark inside, but it has wonderful stained glass windows and great.

I also overhear their conversation... Koishi is telling Yuugi about her recent journeys, I think. Is she travelling a lot? She also seems to know the blonde demon very well.

We get to the kitchen. I can finally sit down and rest my poor skinny legs. Now I think it wasn’t the best idea to spend all those evening reading books about magic, maybe I should have worked out sometimes.

The funky girl comes back with some tea. It smells fruity and very sweet. I wonder if it tastes just as heavenly as it smells! The tea cups looks very expansive, they are decorated with gold and silver… but these motives are really strange, I can’t make out what they are actually are

“Hey Leon, what do you see on these cups? Everyone sees something different and it can tell many things about a person!”

“Currently, I see nothing.”

“Concentrate… you’ll see something soon~!”

[ ] “I see many little snowflakes, arranged into one big snowflake.”
[ ] “I see faming meteors, flying down from the sky, wrecking havoc.”
[ ] “I see several different items being blow away by the strong wind.”
[ ] “I see beautiful geotectonic formations and many, many gemstones.”
[ ] “I see clouds and rain falling down, hitting the dry ground with a thud.”

Psychological games!
This is not a spoiler.

Hey, if there are any questions, go ahead and ask me. I’ll answer them when I’ll call votes again.
>> No. 5270
[x] “I see several different items being blow away by the strong wind.
>> No. 5271
[x] “I see clouds and rain falling down, hitting the dry ground with a thud.”
>> No. 5272
[Q] “I see clouds and rain falling down, hitting the dry ground with a thud.”

Rain rain rain, we love rain.
>> No. 5273
[X] “I see many little snowflakes, arranged into one big snowflake.”
>> No. 5274
[x] “I see many little snowflakes, arranged into one big snowflake.”
>> No. 5275
[x] "I see alien geometries and things that cannot exist in reality."
>> No. 5276
[X] “I see clouds and rain falling down, hitting the dry ground with a thud.”
>> No. 5278
[x] “I see beautiful geotectonic formations and many, many gemstones.”

Because saying geotectonic is neat.
>> No. 5281
Caling this:

[X] “I see clouds and rain falling down, hitting the dry ground with a thud.”

They'll turn off the power later today, so the update will probably be finished tomorrow.
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“I see clouds and rain falling down, hitting the dry ground with a thud.”

“Hmm, that is interesting! You are sad for some reason, indicated by the rain and the clouds. Yet secretly, you are happy. You are the dry ground that has waited for the rain to come. It seems you pushed these emotions into your subconscious, you repressed them.”

Her eyes meet mine as I look away from the cup. I understood every word she said. Yes, I am depressed because there is no way home, but I wanted a drastic change in my life all time. It was getting boring. My friends got distant, my family was focused on my sister’s success with controlled vampirism and I was unable to get attention.

They got used to the good grades and my magic stopped improving last year. I could barely learn new spell or perfect the ones I have learned already. And then I get desperate with magic and try summoning… which ultimately fails.

“There is no need to repress positive emotions, Leon! Let them out!”

She is right. I should get over it as soon as possible. Sorrow is not a functional emotion right now. It is hindering me and our conversation, too.

Hey, how come that I didn’t notice that thing floating by her? Sweet goodness, what is that thing!? It is like a blue closed eye connected to her by blue-purple cords.

“Yeah, Leon, cheer up!”

“Maybe he should get a real drink. Don’t you think so, Yuugi?”

“No, he was in the hospital and he got some injections. It is best not to mix that stuff with alcohol, his condition could get much worse.”

“Oh, are you sick, Leon?”

Just look at her face. In an instant she turns from absolutely carefree expression to a mildly concerned one. I’m practically a stranger to her, why would she be concerned about some guy like me?

“I’m not sick, my body is just achy.”

As I finish my sentence I hear someone else enter the room. We all turn towards the kitchen doors and there is she. This must be her sister, judging by the red eye floating around her. Her hair is pink and she is wearing a black hairband. The shirt she is wearing is blue and the wide skirt is pink.

“Hello, it seems that you are seeking me.”

“Hey sis!”

“Hey Satori!”


She looks pretty... and pretty emotionless, too. I don’t know if she is annoyed, happy, sad, angry or just plain serious. And her red eye is looking directly at me.
This is scary, it truly is! Huh? It just looked away the moment I thought it was scary.

“You don’t have to be scared, Leon.”

How does she know my name? Eh, maybe he overheard our conversation. More importantly, how did she know I was scared? I’m pretty sure I didn’t show any visual signs. Can she read my mind or something?

“I am Satori Komeiji. It is best that I tell you directly that I can read your mind, but you don’t have to worry, I keep your thoughts secret.”

Satori… hmm, aren’t those apes living in mountains that can read your mind? They are Japanese demons, too, aren’t they? Well, the two sisters don’t resemble apes at all- oh shit she can read my thoughts right now!

She doesn’t react. The pink-haired girl just sits down at the table. Koishi hands her a cup and she pours her some tea. Ah, it smells like the sweetest fruits ever in existence! And it tastes even better!

“Hey Satori, I just want to ask if maybe Leon can stay at your place until I clean up my apartment. He is an outsider who somehow ended up here in the underground. He decided to stay in the city, too.”

“You decided to stay here, underground?”

“Yes, I did. The options the shrine maiden offered were all inferior to the grand underground city. Besides, the residents are interesting and friendly.”

“Hmm, this is very unusual. A human wants to stay underground.”

“Oh, he is no ordinary human. He has some wizard blood!”

“Yes, I have, but not too much, Yuugi.”

“You can stay here for a few days if you wish.”

“Thank you.”

“Thanks, Satori. I owe you.”

“You owe me nothing, Yuugi. I’ll help Leon get back on his feet.”

She just smiled, but only for a moment. It seems she isn’t all emotionless, but she is hiding them from others- she heard my thoughts right now, didn’t she?

“Yes, Leon, I can hear your thoughts, but I don’t mind it. I am used to it.”

“Okay. Can your sister read thoughts, too?”

“No, I sealed my third eye away. See the stitches?”

“But she can read your subconscious mind. And she can manipulate it, too.”

“Sis, you know I don’t use my powers often!”

“Still, it is best that he knows.”

It seems that I’ll be staying with two very powerful beings that can read minds, one way or the other. Not that I mind, the girls seems peaceful. Actually, the whole underground feels peaceful for some reason.

“Yay, we’ll have a guest! Nobody stayed at the palace since, umm...”

“Last winter, Koishi. It was the time when that happened, remember?”

“Oh, sure, now I remember!”


Yuugi left shortly after she finished her cup of tea. I thanked her once more and she said that there is no reason to thank her... she is one friendly oni. I later had one more cup with Satori and Koishi. First they were very interested in the so-called ‘’outside’’. Well, Koishi was the only making question, Satori was just eagerly listening.

Somehow we change the subject to ‘’how I got here’’. I told them that I tried a spell for the first time, it went well for a few second and then it went horribly wrong.
Sure, I didn’t tell them what spell I used. I think Satori might already know what really happened, judging by her occasionally surprised and suspicious raised brow. Koishi on the other hand patted my shoulder when I was done telling them about the accident. She really feels sorry for me.

Later they wanted to know me better, so I told them that I’m a bookworm and that this is the reason why I am so skinny. Koishi chuckled at my honesty while Satori just smirked. I also told them about my family. I portrayed them in the best light possible, but the mind reader was suspicious again about me. Koishi was suspicious here, too. Did she read my, umm, suppressed hate or something?

Well, now I’m lying on the bed in the guest room. I’m not feeling too well, so I’ll rest for a while. Satori said that dinner will be quite soon and although I had brunch just two hours ago and I ate many chicken skewers, I’m getting really hungry.

Damn, I have too many conflicting emotions. On one hand I feel sadness because I can’t go home, but on the other hand I’m happy because I landed in this cool, magical land where magic is not restricted. You even have safe combat, the spellcard duels. Not to mention all the pretty ladies I met up to this point.

You know what? Forget about home! This place is so much better. I’ll hang out with demons and study magic like never before. Yeah, that’s it. I’ll also work out this time.
I seriously have to get some muscles this time. Yeah, that is what a real man would do! Get over it and work harder!

I guess I feel better now. Oddly my headache got better, too.
Wow, I’m feeling drowsy again... those stimulants apparently only have short-term effects...

[ ] Take a nap on your bed and let them wake you up for dinner.
[ ] This room has its own bathroom, wash you face with cold water and wait.
[ ] Get up and slowly walk to the kitchen yourself, you are hungry.
>> No. 5298
[x] Take a nap on your bed and let them wake you up for dinner.
Relieving tiredness is always good.
>> No. 5300
[Q] This room has its own bathroom, wash you face with cold water and wait.

The last section there got a little mechanical sounding, I think.
>> No. 5301
Actually the whole update felt a bit... not forced, but weakly told, but I'm not certain just how to say it so that the writer might actually improve the text.
>> No. 5302
I blame my stomach aches and unstable internet connection (I hurried). I know it is worse than the other updates, the next will be better.
>> No. 5303
[X] This room has its own bathroom, wash your face with cold water and wait.

I hope your stomach and internet get better, this story has potential.
>> No. 5307
[X] This room has its own bathroom, wash you face with cold water and wait.
>> No. 5314
[X] This room has its own bathroom, wash your face with cold water and wait.
>> No. 5319
[x] This room has its own bathroom, wash you face with cold water and wait.
>> No. 5322
Calling this:
[X] This room has its own bathroom, wash your face with cold water and wait.
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[X] This room has its own bathroom, wash you face with cold water and wait.

I see I missed a ‘’r’’ there. Bloody stomach aches.


No, I have too little time to nap. It would be awkward if my hosts would have to wake me up for dinner. Maybe I’ll nap after dinner. Now, how should I stay awake? I don’t feel like doing sit-ups to increase my blood pressure... maybe I should wash my face with cold water. This room has its own bathroom, how convenient!

Stepping through the slide door, I notice how large this bathroom is. It isn’t huge by any means, but it still has two bigger mirrors and a rather large shower. It is nicely decorated, all in yellow with some white features there and there. I’m beginning to really like it here.

Brr! The cold water is quite refreshing on my hot face. I don’t know why, but it feels like the blood in my veins is boiling. Not in the upper layers, but deep inside, just above the bones… or maybe the bones feel hot too? It is a rather unpleasant feeling. Is my face red, maybe?

Good heavens and the flying spaghetti monster, what the hell happened to my freaking face? Those freckles, the borderline strawberry blonde hair, my beauty mark near my left eye and the big jaw, what happened!? Where are they? I don’t recognize my own face in the mirror!

Is the mirror okay? It reflects my shirt and my hand perfectly. My face feels real when I touch it... this is no illusion and no hallucination, this is reality. Sweet goodness, when did I undergo extensive plastic surgery? I looked in the mirror last evening and I was still the good old Leon. Now I look like someone else. Maybe I am somebody else?

I have to double check reality. Ouch, pinching my cheek still hurts. Turning the switch on and off turns the lights on and off, too. That is a clear indicator that I’m definitely not dreaming. This is the cold, hard reality I’m facing.

Okay, this is no time to freak out. Dinner will be served very soon and staying calm is essential. I’ll have to get used to this new face as soon as possible and accept the fact that I’m no longer the skinny ginger with the big jaw. Now I’m the skinny blonde guy with the sleek facial features!

Goddamn, am I handsome or not? If this is the little extra you mentioned, Keghemyn, then you are the best demon ever! Thank you, thank you!

Still, this change is ridiculous. I didn’t see any mentions that he does full face ops in the old book. Did I skim thought it too fast? No, that is not possible; I read too many books to miss something like this. I see what is important and what not. Maybe the handsome mariachi felt sorry for the average guy and decided to help him in an unusual way? At this point, it doesn’t matter to me. I’m fully satisfied with my new looks, but it will take some time to get used to them. You don’t get a new face every day, right?

Someone knocks on the door. It is Koishi, I can’t miss her childish voice. How old is the girl, anyway? She looks about sixteen years old, but judging by her demonic nature she must be way older than that. Satori looks older, but she too must be about sixty, if not several hundred years old. Not that mind, it is common for demons to have a several centuries long lifespan.

“Hey Leon, are you in there? Dinner is ready~!”

“I’m coming right away!”

I don’t let the girl wait any longer and rush to the door, ignoring the pain in my legs. As I open the door I can already smell the food from the kitchen, despite the rather large distance. Must be the hunger that increasing my senses.

“Are you feeling better?”

“I’m still achy, but yes, I feel better.”

“It seems that you are no longer repressing the emotions that much.”

“I guess you are right. I feel happier, too.”

“Shall we hurry to the kitchen? You must be hungry!”

I try to keep up with her rather fast walk, but I have to stop. Not even positive thinking can lessen the pain.
She eventually slows down for me and we walk slowly to the kitchen. The appetizing smells are getting stronger with each step.

We finally get to the dining table and sit down so I can finally rest my poor skinny legs. The dishes are served, but it seems we are still waiting for someone. Satori is getting nervous.

“Did you see Orin and Okuu on your way?”

“No, sis, I didn’t see them.”

Just moments later I hear an unfamiliar voice coming from behind.

“Here we are!”

I turn around to see who it is. Wow, more demons, what else could I expect? Both are girls and both have animal features. The one in the dark green dress is a cat demon as she has two cat tails and cat ears on her head.

The other one must be some bird demon, I presume. She has pretty large black wings and some red gem in the middle of her chest... it looks pretty scary, like that eye from the Tolkien novels.

“Orin, Okuu, this is Leon. He will be staying with us for a few days. Leon, the two girls behind you are Orin and Okuu, my pets.”

They are her pets?

“I’m Orin, nice to meet you!”

“I’m Utsuho, but they all call me Okuu.”

“Nice to meet you!”

Aw, look how cute her cat ears are! I think I smirked involuntarily just there. Orin sits on the other side, opposite of me while Utsuho sits to my left. Her wing could hit me anytime... how can she keep them so still?

They pray before dinner and I pretend to join in. Yeah, Satori probably read my mind just now and knows that I just pretended to pray. Anyway, we have miso soup with tofu and while I’m not used to this soup, it tastes good.

Next we have sushi. Just look at that plate! How many pieces are there? It seems there are multiple different fillings. I should try as many as possible!


Ah, that food was delicious. Dessert was surprisingly different as we had kiwi cake. The excellent taste was even more surprising, I didn’t expect kiwi cake to taste good at all. We are now having some tea. This is some different tea. It doesn’t smell as fruity and sweet as the last one, but it has its own distinct taste.

“Compliments to the chef!”

“Thank you, Leon. I knew you liked it.”

Oh right, she can read my mind so she must have heard how many times I thought that the crabmeat fillings were heavenly.

[ ] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.
[ ] You are feeling much better, maybe go for a walk.
[ ] Head straight to your room, you feel like napping.
>> No. 5326
[Q] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.

He made us sexy? Nice.
>> No. 5327
[x] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.

Only option I see here. Enjoying this story so far.
>> No. 5328
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[X] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.

Works for me~!
>> No. 5329
[x] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.
Ok, a few things, first light ones, praying? Really now?

Second, calm down with the constant "oh she read my mind"-notes, a couple of times here and there is fine, but you're going a bit overboard there.

Is the machinegun rush of short and to the point statements of events characterisation? If so, then good, if not, you might want to try a bit variety in sentence structures, storytelling is not just recording events on text. Include a bit of description in the lines of the old adage of "show, don't tell", that adds a bit of liveliness to the text. Oh, but don't go overboard with it, you don't want to end up with purple prose either.

Oh, and I love how finally we have
Komeiji sisters who are not either sociopaths, borderline insane or just total assholes. Thank you.
>> No. 5332
Koishi has been hit hard with the fanon stick around here. The Last non-mindrapist Koishi I think was Grue's, and even then she was feaky adorable.
>> No. 5334
Thank you for the advice, I find it helpful. My only excuse here is that English is my second foreign language and that MC (Leon) may not be in the right state of mind.

I am happy you like my relatively sane Komeiji sisters. I also hope you like the more feminine Yuugi.

You also missed Koishi coming into the room and waking you up. By force, if you know what I mean.
>> No. 5335

So, no one remembers, huh...
>> No. 5336
[Q] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.

This wins. Will write in the morning.
>> No. 5337
[X] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.
>> No. 5338
[x] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.
>> No. 5340
You also missed Koishi coming into the room and waking you up. By force, if you know what I mean.

Wait, what?
>> No. 5355

I think he means if we had gone directly to sleep after our meal. Probably. If that's what you were wondering
>> No. 5360
No, I meant if you had stayed in the room and napped. Anyway, the update might be late because I cut my thumb wide open on my writing hand.
>> No. 5363
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[X] Stay here for a while and talk with the girls.

It is best to stay with the girls for a little while longer, it would be rude to just leave after the first cup, right? I let Satori pour me another cup.

“Nice palace you have, girls. I like the decorations.”

“Thank you. I rarely get positive comments about the interior design. This style was brought to this land by foreigners before the great border was created. My sister liked it so much we redecorated the whole palace.”

Koishi giggles at her sister’s remark.

“The residents here dislike it for being too strange, too foreign.”

“I noticed that it is different from the other buildings in the city, both in size and style.”

“It stands out, doesn’t it?”

The girl with the pink hair takes her tea cup with both hands and sips some tea. Moments pass in silence. I want this conversation to continue, so I turn my attention to the bird demon. Would it be rude to ask her about the gem she has on her chest? I mean, it is just above her b-

“No, it wouldn’t be rude, Leon. Go ahead and ask her!”

“Umm, okay. Utsuho, may I ask you about that gem on your chest?”

The bird demon turns to me and shows me a prideful smile.

“This is the proof that I swallowed the great three-legged god! It gives me the power to manipulate thermonuclear reactions, like hydrogen fusion, for example!”

Is that even possible? She can manipulate whole nuclear reactions? Damn, that means she could make all possible isotopes from simple materials and so much more!

“You know what I’m talking about, right?”

“Sure, I do, but to what extent can you manipulate them?”

“Well, I never found my limit, but I can comfortably make a small sun from hydrogen and begin the fusion inside it. Impressed, Leon?”

“Yes, that is most impressive, Utsuho. That is a fearsome ability. I must see it live one day, but from a safe distance of course.”

“Cool, I’ll show you anytime you like!”

The two sisters quietly chuckle to themselves. Again, several moments pass in silence. We hit another dead end, so I speak to the cat demon.

“What cat demon are you, Orin? I heard that there are many different types.”

“I’m a kasha.”

Kasha… I don’t know these too well, but I think they have something to do with corpses, especially those that are not buried.

“I don’t want to talk about my job at the dinner table, that wouldn’t be nice.”

As I suspected, it has to do with corpses. How can someone as cute as her have any connection with unburied corpses? It is downright absurd! But that is how demons work and there is nothing you can do about it.

Satori strokes her back for her good table manners. The cat demon purrs quite loudly.

“Did you have any pets where you used to live, Leon?”

“I had a black kitten, but we had to give it away. My sister was allergic to cats.”

“Oh, that had to be terrible!”

“Koishi is right. It must have been terrible for your relationship with your sister.”

“Yeah, it was. I was just a kid back then and I really liked the kitten.”

“I think we should let Leon pet Orin for a while!”

Is Koishi serious? Suddenly the atmosphere in the room changed and only awkward silence and strange faces are left. Orin looks surprised and embarrassed while Satori turns from ‘’expressionless’’ to ‘’slightly freaked out’’. I didn’t check Utsuho, but I bet she is staring Koishi just now.

Not that I’m against her idea, but hey, she is a girl. While that is not a problem, I want to treat a girl with respect and I don’t think she will take petting from a stranger too well. Our thoughts have to be a mess for Satori to read right now.

“Relax Orin, I was just joking!”

Utsuho bursts into laughter, Satori lightens up while the cat demon just chuckles nervously. I only smile because I can’t bring myself to laugh. Way to go, Koishi.

“You and your jokes, sister!”

I’m getting drowsy again, my eyelids are heavier each moment I spend listening to their conversation. Satori looks at me mildly concerned.

“You should rest if you feel sleepy, Leon.”

“I guess you are right, Satori.”

“Koishi, go with him. He could get lost in the palace.”

“Okay, sis! I’ll do that!”

“Hey, thanks again for the dinner.”

“You are welcome. Sleep well, Leon!”

“Thanks. Goodbye, y’all!”

“Goodbye Leon!”

“Bye, bye Leon!”

Orin smirks mischievously at me for some reason. I leave the kitchen with Koishi. I can barely remember the way to my room. We don’t talk much on the way there.

I hit the bed... ah, this bed is so comfortable. I could fall asleep instantly if it weren’t for my back aches. I thought they got better at dinner, but no luck, they are still there. Well, at least my headache is much better than before.

Shtill, I’m sho shleepy...


Ugh. I just woke from my dreams. There was some club and I was drinking a tequila sunrise despite being one year below the drinking age. I can’t remember much more. Funny, I was dreaming about drinking in a club and I can’t remember what happened that night in my dreams.

What time is it, anyway?
Someone is knocking on the door. I better answer it. I’m dressed the same way I was when I went to bed – white shirt and black trousers. Maybe I should have removed them but I was too drowsy at the time.

“Good morning, Leon!”

“Good morning to you, too, Koishi. It is morning already?”

She is dressed different today. While her shirt looks similar to the one she had on yesterday, the collar is different and the buttons are not diamond shaped. Her skirt is a slightly different green color and has a subtle floral pattern, too. I think she is wearing stockings or maybe pantyhose, I can’t make out at that skirt length. Most importantly, she is playing with the ponytail she neatly tied on her side.

“Yes, you slept all the time! I’ll come pick you up for breakfast again. Here is your yukata if you want to change your clothes.”

“Hey, thanks. See you at breakfast, then.”

“See you later~!”

The yukata will come in handy now as my clothes got sweaty during my long slumber. I just wonder why she gave me such a girly one, light pink with white floral patterns and all.

Oh man, the warm water feels so great if your limbs are numb from sleeping in an awkward position for more than ten hours. Something feels strange, though. Oh sure, my head no longer hurts! And my back feels better too!

I take the nearby towel to conceal my lower body. It is really easy to bind it around your waist when you are as skinny as I am. Next I neatly fold my shirt and my pants on the bed, then I put on the girly yukata- hey, why did she put old-fashioned bloomers inside the yukata? Am I supposed to wear them!?

Oh man, those are girl’s bloomers, not the one’s men wore back in the old days. What now?
After pondering for a while if I should go commando, put my dirty boxers on or put these bloomers on, I find the white girl’s undergarment the most appealing option.

Actually, they feel nice and they even fit me quite nicely. I have to wear them a little lower so you-know-what doesn’t get uncomfortable. Now I slide the girly yukata on and wait for breakfast... while this is embarrassing, I find the joke funny. Hey, maybe this isn’t a joke and they just don’t have anything else for me to wear.

Koishi comes knocking on my door again.

“Breakfast is ready!”

I rush to the door without any difficulty, those legs feel much better today. As I slowly open the door, the girl closely inspects me.

“Do the clothes fit you?”

“Yeah, they fit fine, thanks.”

“Your obi isn’t tied correctly.”

“I don’t know how to tie it right, so I just made a huge ribbon on the side. Is it okay?”

“It looks quite girly!”

“So does the yukata and the umm... the undergarments you gave me.”

“Oh, are those bloomers comfortable?”

“T-They are okay, I guess.”

“Anyway, let’s have breakfast. We better get there soon before Okuu eats everything up!”

Today I can keep up with her. My legs may ache a little, but I’m a man, no pain! We get to the kitchen quickly and join in for breakfast.

Hey, why are they looking at me like that? Oh sure, the clothes, the clothes!
The cat girl stuggles to hide her laughter, Satori just stares at me like I’m an alien and Utsuho… she just froze.

“Sister, did you give him that yukata?”

“Yup, it was me~!”

“Didn’t you have any other… more appropriate ones?”

“No, I find it great. If it is meant as a joke it is fine, too. I like jokes.”

Orin finally bursts in laughter. Utsuho suddenly unfreezes and begins laughing, too. Hell, even the usually emotionless Satori giggles fairly loudly. I laugh with them because it IS funny. It is fairly humiliating, too. Koishi joins in and we all have a good laugh before breakfast.

So, what shall I have for breakfast?
[ ] Is Utsuho eating boiled eggs? Ravens do eat other bird’s eggs, don’t they?
[ ] Orin is having sardines early in the morning. I’ll have some, too.
[ ] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.
[ ] Maybe have the cereals Koishi has. They look pretty sweet!

Breakfast will have a larger impact on the day, so choose wisely.
>> No. 5364
[Q] Maybe have the cereals Koishi has. They look pretty sweet!

>Ravens do eat other bird’s eggs, don’t they?

Most birds will eat their own eggs. Good protein in 'em.

So, only remaining complaint is that it still feels like you're running through a checklist during the interactions.
>> No. 5365
[x] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.
Delicious toast.
>> No. 5366
[X] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.

Nom nom nom.
>> No. 5367
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[X] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.

Would be more in a mood for jelly but real butter will doo just as nicely.
>> No. 5369
[x] Is Utsuho eating boiled eggs? Ravens do eat other bird’s eggs, don’t they?
>> No. 5370
[X] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.
>> No. 5371
[x] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.
>> No. 5378
[x] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.

>I meant if you had stayed in the room and napped

Ah, didn't even see the first option to sleep, there. Should pay more attention. Anyways, I'm liking your (thus far) relatively cheerful cast. It's a welcome respite from some of the heavy doom and gloom.

>only remaining complaint is that it still feels like you're running through a checklist during the interactions.

To build on this, and with the knowledge that English is a difficult language to write in, regardless of whether or not it's your first or second, I have these few suggestions:

1. Use more contractions. I'm not sure if the staccato manner of speaking is our MC's thing, or not, but it seems rather...well...forced. Perhaps try to introduce some character-specific speaking patterns, and differentiate between speakers as you write the dialogue. May help to break it up some. To be honest, Satori's polite manner of speaking seems the most fitting of all your dialogue thus far.

2. Try to set the scene for us, and give us more of an idea of WHAT the interior of the Palace looks like, sounds, smells, whatnot. The more you tell us about our hosts and surroundings, the easier it is to immerse one's self in the story.

3. Maybe give us a bit more depth to our MC's internal monologue and thoughts. Dialogue and characterization is tough for the best of writers, but I expect if you keep at it, improvement will come naturally.

Overall, kudos to you for putting yourself out there and starting a story. I'm more than willing to give support and suggestions where needed. It probably helps that you're writing about some of my favorite characters. Also take whatever is said with a grain of salt. None of us are professional literary critics, despite what some of us may think, and our thoughts are influenced by personal preferences. In the end this is your story, and I for one am looking forward to seeing where this goes.

I am also more than willing to proofread, if you need.
>> No. 5388
[X] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.

This wins.
The update is ready, but it needs some proofreading. Wait warmly.
>> No. 5390
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Grinning Satori because she really like the way we are dressed.

[X] I’ll go with the standard toast and butter combo, like Satori.

Meh, I’ll go with the classic combo, toast and butter. Satori is having it and it looks strangely delicious compared to the other food on the kitchen table. Back in the days when I was at my first foster parents I always had toast with jelly, but jelly doesn’t seem to be available underground. Sweet, cranberry flavored jelly-

“I believe there is jelly here underground.”


“It is an imported dish called grass jelly. Usually it is served as a standalone dessert, but I think it would fit on toast, especially the one with watermelon flavor.”

“Watermelon jelly sounds delicious.”

“I think I’ll buy it next time, I certainly want a change.”

“Would jelly in my cereals be tasty?”

“You can always try, sister.”

My toast is getting cold. I better focus on eating because cold toast is not tasty at all.
While being focused on my food, I listen to their quite lively conversation. Today they are very cheerful, I wonder if my extraordinary clothes are the reason. Could be. You don’t see a guy in a pink yukata often, especially if it has a floral pattern and the sash tied in a large ribbon on the side. Has any man dressed like this before? I believe not, mainly because pink is considered feminine.

Strange, I’m really comfortable with the color pink, I simply like it. Common knowledge is that real men wear pink. Well yes, they do. I’ve seen male celebrities with pink shirts and even pink swimwear. And they are straight, too.

The silk feels great on the skin and the underwear is not that bad at all. Actually, they feel like oversized boxers with some lace on the edges. Oh shit, Satori now knows what I’m wearing under the pink silk. She doesn’t mind, no, the girl smirked the moment I was comparing the bloomers to boxers.

Oh, I see I gave her an indirect compliment as well, thinking that I like the color pink, which is also her hair color. True, I can’t deny my love for this color.

“Shall we have some tea?”

“Make the sweet one, sis! It is so fruity delicious!”

I have to agree with Koishi, it tastes heavenly. That taste is hard to describe, all I can say it is good. Maybe it is some fruity mix where I can’t make out the base ingredients. Blackberries, oranges, strawberries, star fruits, and even vanilla flavors are in there. Maybe it is the magically enchanted sugar. Hell, I don’t know.
I can hardly wait till it’s done!
Ah, this tea is so good. First I taste the strong cinnamon flavor that spreads through my mouth and then leaves a strong fruity taste behind. After this point I can’t make out what fruits are in this mix. My taste buds fail. They simply can’t handle the heavenly taste and my brains only picks up the info ‘’extremely freaking delicious’’. I’d use another f-word right now to emphasize my statement, but that would be impolite towards my mindreading host.

With each sip I take the cup the nectar becomes emptier. It would be great to have an inexhaustible magic cup with infinite tea.
I’ve got to be careful, this tea is still hot and I have what people call a cat’s tongue. Coincidentally, the cat demon has the same problem. Orin sip slowly and she has to blow on her tea to cool it down. Seems like she is true to her animal motif.

“I heard Yuugi is coming over, is that right, Satori?” asks the bird demon loudly and interrupts my thoughts.

“If she is done with her cleaning, then she probably will.”

“Oh, that’s great! I’ll duel her to show Leon my powers!”

“Are you sure, Okuu?”

The older sister seems concerned over her pet’s idea. Considering her ability, it is really best not to play around with it, but if it is true what the shrine maiden said, then the protective barrier makes even her projectiles relatively harmless.

“She should, sis. Leon is new here and he has to see how a duel looks like.”

“We’ll both use just one spellcard for demonstration, we won’t get serious!”

“Alright, you have my permission to duel her, Okuu.”


Utsuho jumps up and stretches her arms, just like a little kid would in this situation. For someone wielding such power as fusing nuclei, she is pretty childish.

“That’ll be fun to watch!” says the cat demon and cheers together with her fellow pet. Funny how a cat demon gets along with a bird demon and vice-versa.

“Just don’t get too cocky, Yuugi is very powerful.”

How can someone be even more powerful that Utsuho? Oh right, the shrine maiden said that the duels aren’t that much about power but more about magical capacity, skill and wits. Basically anyone can win in the duel-
Hey, what was that bizarre buzzing noise?

“I got a text message!”

Oh, so it is Koishi’s phone. I didn’t notice that her skirt had pockets until now. Her phone resembles that clamshell phone I had back home.

“It is from Yuugi. She may need a day or two more to clean up her apartment. She’ll also visit us today and see if Leon is alright.”

“Did she state when she’ll arrive?”

“In... less than twenty minutes.”

“That’s soon! I have to get my gear!”

As Utsuho finishes her sentence she stands up and runs outside the kitchen. Outside she jumps in the air and… well, she doesn’t land anywhere in sight, so I presume she took flight. I guess I’ll have to learn how to fly if I want to stay in this world.

“Where will they duel, Satori?”

“I’m not sure, but they will most likely duel in the grand hall.”

“Isn’t that dangerous? Those stained glass windows are so pretty.”

“Oh, the protective border surrounding the duel is powerful enough to stop any projectile, don’t worry. We had duels inside there before and everything is still intact.”


Several minutes later, the bird demon returns. As she steps into the kitchen she is stopped by Satori’s voice.

“What did we say about your gear, Okuu?”

“No battle gear in the kitchen, I remember.”

Utsuho sighs loudly, turns around and leaves us.
So this was her ‘’gear’’, huh? There was a long, orange thing on her right hand, some gray shin guard and boot on her right leg and that large cape resting on her wings. That pattern looked like the night sky, but with depth. Wow, a 3D cape!

Now that I see Utsuho from behind I realized how long her healthy black hair is! Goodness, it is way down to her butt! Not that I prefer long hair over short hair, I like all hair length, but it find long hair a real feat.

Suddenly the doorbell is rung. It must be Yuugi.
Together we all head to the front doors to greet the blonde demon.

“Hey y’all! Wow, y’all got here to greet me?”

Boy is she tipsy! As her gaze passes me, she stops for a moment and carefully inspects me. Her cheeks are just as pink as my yukata.

“What’cha wearin’, Leon?”

First the demon chuckles, then snorts in her laughter. Yeah, I know it is funny. Satori shows her inside and the blonde woman clumsily steps into the great palace. Will she be able to duel like that?

“Still, it fits ya! Bit flamboyant, but still spot on!”

“Umm... thanks?”

“I know what’cha all think ‘right now. How the hell are you so drunk sho early in da mornin’? Well, I was cleaned da apartment all night long and I’m not throwin’ away not one single bottle, no, not one single drop.”

All of a sudden, she stops in the great hall and stretches her arms.

“I bettar sober up or somethang!”

Wow, what was that? How did that little blue mist come out from her mouth?

“Sorry everyone, I should have done that earlier, but I didn’t feel like it.”

“It is okay, we love you just the way you are Yuugi!”

Judging by what Koishi just said, she must be a regular drunkard. That also explains why they all were so normal about the drunken state of the blonde woman.

“Hey Yuugi, I challenge you to a spellcard duel!”

“Great! Now I can show Leon how these duels look like!”

“One spellcard each, no bombs and let’s not get too serious.”

“A little demonstration for Leon, am I right?”

“Shall we begin, oni?”

“Hell yeah, hell raven!”

Woah, what was that? Some powerful magic nearly swept me off my feet. The two demons take flight and fly in the middle of this large hall. Hey, look at the frescos!

“I’m Utsuho Reiuji, the Searing Divine Flame!”

“I’m Yuugi Hoshiguma, the The Rumored Unnatural Phenomenon!”

“I declare my first spellcard! Explosion Sign ‘’Mega Flare’’!”

Boom! Several little stars are generated by the hell raven just in front of her. Each is thrown into existence with a loud, explosive bang. As they travel towards Yuugi they shrink more and more, allowing the blonde demon to move in between. These stars generate hard lumps, so kind of debris. Maybe it is the carbon generated in later stages when the star begins to die. To me, it looks impossible to navigate through the pattern, but Yuugi dodges them pretty easily.

While the blonde is dodging the bullets she is using her outstretched right hand to shoot glowing blue bullets in the bird’s direction. These bullets hit Utsuho or more accurately, they hit some invisible shield that is in front of her.

This goes on for what I would say it about one minute. Yuugi effortlessly navigates through those stars, like a real professional. Some carbon lumbs get close to her, but she evades them nonetheless.

“Twelve seconds left!”

It is getting hot in here. True to Satori’s and also Reimu’s words, the carbon lumps and miniature stars disappear when they hit the transparent bluish border.
Wow, this fight looks intense.

The bird demon begins a countdown. Her voice echoes through the great hall. Once she reaches the number three her voice is longer than even the loudest explosion she generates. I wonder, is it magically amplified- boom! All the projectiles disappear once she finishes the countdown.
They turn into fine, green mist.

“My turn now! Feat of Strength "Wind Blowing Down from Mt. Ooe"!”

Yuugi activates her spellcard. Suddenly, strong wings begin to blow from the side and bring rocks, small boulders and many little blue bullets, like the ones she used before. These are very dense and also extremely fast around Yuugi, but slower near the place where Utsuho flies. Still, their sheer speed makes them difficult to evade.

Still, Okuu remains perfectly still and moves very little, letting the projectiles simply pass by her. Some get dangerously close, but she doesn’t mind. While she is evading the rocks and blue glowing things, she shoots burning orange bolts in small arcs to hit Yuugi. Her shots aren’t as accurate as Yuugi’s, but their larger spread always hit the invisible shield.

Hmm, seems like Yuugi truly is more powerful than the hell raven. Many more bullets graze or fly close to Utsuho, despite the smaller density. I see some nervousness in the bird demon and her movements becomes unnecessarily quick as the blonde oni begins to count down to ten. Her powerful voice echoes through the great hall, similar to how Utsuho’s did before. Once she reaches the end, the air clears, there are no more projectiles, only green mist.

“We ended in a draw.”

“It is okay, this was just for demonstration.”

“So, what do you think, Leon?”

“That was a fantastic demonstration of power, Yuugi!”

“I’m glad you liked it!”

“What about my fusion powers work, Leon!”

“Nice stars, there, Utsuho. I’m just afraid that I’ll never be able to keep up with these patterns.”

“Don’t worry! We have easier ones just for fun!”

“Hey, want to try one, Leon? You look better today!”

“No, duel with me, I’ll go easy on you!”

I can’t deny that I’m feeling better. The headache is gone, the back pain is not there anymore and even my legs feel better today. I could even keep up with Koishi’s fast walk. Those girls are actually competing now who I’ll duel, showering me with needless promises that they’ll go easy on me... can I believe them?

[ ] Give it a try. Duel...
-[ ] ...Utsuho.
-[ ] ...Yuugi.

[ ] Diplomacy! Challenge a third party!
-[ ] <write-in>

[ ] Umm, do that another day, okay?
-[ ] <write-in>
>> No. 5391
[x] Umm, do that another day, okay?
-[x] "Pretty sure I should at least get the flying bit down before I try this, and maybe one or two spell cards as well."
Sorry, I have nothing better.
>> No. 5393
[x] Umm, do that another day, okay?
-[x] Maybe your host(s) could help you get the basics down before you take on someone so intimidating? Have her explain the rules, and if possible help you create your first spellcards. Flying would probably help as well. Who better to educate you than someone who can tell what you're thinking as you're thinking it, and make suggestions accordingly. Thank Yuugi and Utsuho for their impressive show. Maybe they can help too?

It may be a bit soon for us to be engaging in spellcard duels. Especially when we don't have any of our own.
>> No. 5394
>> No. 5397
[X] Give it a try. Duel...
-[x] ...Utsuho.

Making the first step is always the hardest to do.
>> No. 5399


Using what, exactly? We've got nothing to work with, unless our (possibly) flawed magician's powers can be directly converted into danmaku without previous experience. Which would be pretty damn awesome. Overly nice of the writer, too
>> No. 5400
That is what the ''what do you see on the cup'' vote was for, too.

Big spoiler ahead.
Rain Sign [Soil Rejuvenation]
>> No. 5401
[X] Give it a try. Duel...
>> No. 5402
[x] Umm, do that another day, okay?
-[x] Maybe your host(s) could help you get the basics down before you take on someone so intimidating? Have her explain the rules, and if possible help you create your first spellcards. Flying would probably help as well. Who better to educate you than someone who can tell what you're thinking as you're thinking it, and make suggestions accordingly. Thank Yuugi and Utsuho for their impressive show. Maybe they can help too?
>> No. 5403
[x] Umm, do that another day, okay?
-[x] Maybe your host(s) could help you get the basics down before you take on someone so intimidating? Have her explain the rules, and if possible help you create your first spellcards. Flying would probably help as well. Who better to educate you than someone who can tell what you're thinking as you're thinking it, and make suggestions accordingly. Thank Yuugi and Utsuho for their impressive show. Maybe they can help too?
>> No. 5405
I am sorry to inform you that this CYOA has reached its untimely end.

Due to many things that have happened in the last four days IRL, including some injuries, reoccurring heart problems and big trouble happening to friends, I have to end this little project of mine.

It was a pleasure to write this CYOA, but I no longer have the time to update it. There is no way that I could let myself do things half-assed, too.

Sadly, I'm also leaving THP for good. The only things that kept me hooked were (the now deader than disco) Gensokyo High by Taisa and (now finished) RiG by Krisslanza. I’m sure that GH will never ever update and I can’t wait for RiG2, so there is nothing left for me to stay. I’m sorry, other writers, but the Continuity Lockout makes other CYOA for me unreadable.

Whatever happened here will not be forgotten. I’ll use many elements from this story for my other long-term project, which is written in German, my first foreign language.

Get over here, McCoy, and say your line.

If anyone wants this CYOA, it is up for adoption.
>> No. 5406
You bastard.

We'll miss you.
>> No. 5410

What he said.

Best of luck to ya...
>> No. 5412
Sorry to hear about your health issues, and whatever else might be going on for you. I'm glad you made an attempt at writing here, and it seems you gained personal satisfaction and technical know-how out of it, which in the end is what should matter for you. I wish you luck in whatever you take up in the future, be it writing fanfiction about little girls with silly hats or not. Shame, you starting this story had renewed my interest somewhat in this site, but real life often has other plans when it comes to setting aside adequate time for personal interests.

>(the now deader than disco) Gensokyo High

>> No. 5762
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“Sorry, ladies, but I’ll have to decline. While I know all the rules, I’m not quite sure how they apply during duels. I also can’t fly and you are supposed to do that in these duels, right? Besides, I have a fairly large audience… I would be ashamed to lose in front of the ladies.”

“Are you sure, Leon? This is a great opportunity to learn it firsthand! You said you are a mage, so you’ll be more than able to make your spellcard!”

“Sorry, Yuugi, I can’t. I find you and Utsuho very intimidating, but don’t take that as an insult, it is a compliment.”

“Oh, don’t be so flattery. Okay, your reasons not to duel us are okay, I guess. Maybe I should wait till you get stronger and I won’t have to hold back so much.”

“Yeah, Yuugi is right. Once you get some advanced spellcards, it will be fun playing with you!”

“Still, thanks for the show, girls. I loved it! I promise I’ll duel you both one day!”

Yuugi and Utsuho don’t look disappointed at all. The hell raven is still cheerful because she got a chance to show me her powers and Yuugi- why did she grin like that? That was outright… eerie. Usually such a grin means everything is according to ke-, I mean, plan.
I’m glad that is over, there is no way I could use magic powerful enough to beat those two. Now I also have a promise to fulfill, too… will I ever get strong enough to beat those two?

“Shall we have some tea now?”

“Sure thing, Satori!”


Time perception is relative… when you are depressed and bored; it moves one step at a time, but when you are in good company, like these five fine girls I had tea with, then it feels more like a sprint. Sprint is an underestimation, it is more like raving on drugs – too fast.

At one point we realized that and because it was too late for Satori and Koishi to make dinner, we decided to go out. I thought we were going to some fancy restaurant, but then the surprise hits me – it was a simple, but neat, ramen stand.

At one point while eating the ramen I realized that I was wearing a pink yukata all the time. That explains why the demons in the city were eyeing me so much.
So, after we had some delicious ramen, Yuugi left our company, saying that she still didn’t clean her apartment…

And now I am in the guest bedroom, trying to fall asleep on the soft, Western bed.
For some reason I just had to choose spicy ramen, now my digestive system does not allow me to fall asleep.

What shall I do?
[ ] Try your best to fall asleep. Think about nice things, like…
-[ ] …the wonderful girls you just met…
--[ ] …especially a certain someone… (write-in)
-[ ] …the beautiful patterns you saw today.
-[ ] …random stuff you saw on the internet.
--[ ] <write-in YouTube video>

[ ] Maybe try some easy spells, like you did back at home!
-[ ] Try controlling water in the bathroom, you used to be good at it!
-[ ] You feel like practicing fire spells!
-[ ] How about the make-the-lights-go-out trick?

[ ] Get up. Find someone awake in the palace.
-[ ] Check the kitchen.
-[ ] Check the living room.
-[ ] Check the backyard.

Sorry for the short length, I just thought to announce that I’m back with a short comeback update. The next update might take some time, too, since I’m working on a project semi-financed by the government.
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