”Sure.” You walk to the door and put you shoes on. Momizi looks happy. ”Great! Let’s go, she’s living nearby!” Momizi goes out. When you get outside, you have much better view of house’s surroundings than in the evening. It’s positioned right next to the mountain, with forest next to path leading down the mountain. You take a look up, and notice that road continues for a while before it turns to stairs similar to what you saw leading to Hakurei shrine. You can faintly hear sound of waterfall coming from somewhere. ”Come on!” Momizi has already started walking down the path, and is urging you to follow her. Well, you said you’d go with her.
The sound gets louder soon, and you reach magnificent looking waterfall. You gasp. It’s bigger than anything you’ve ever seen. You can’t clearly see the end of it due to there being so much steam in the air. ”…That’s huge.” She looks back at you in wonder. ”Hm? Is it? I guess so.” Maybe it’s because she’s used to it, or that there’s lots of waterfalls like that here, but she doesn’t seem to think much of it. ”We just have to go down these stairs and we’re at her house!” Momizi leads you to completely wet stone stairs going close to the waterfall, with no handrails at all. They’re pretty wide, but just one slip, and… ”Momizi, we’re going down these?” ”Sure! This is the shortest way since you can’t fly!” The stairs seem really long. Aside from their lethality, you and Momizi would end up completely wet from steam while walking them down. [ ] ”Okay, let’s go.” [ ] ”There are other ways to get down, right?” [ ] ”Wouldn’t it be faster if you carried me?” ______________
So yeah, I'll be updating this today through the day whenever I find time for it.
You brace yourself, no way you're gonna act like coward in front of Momizi ”Okay, let’s go.” "Alright! I haven't ever used these myself either, so it'll definitely be interesting. You swallow, and have one last look down the stairs before starting the decent.
At beginning it all goes well. The floor isn't that slippery, and sound of waterfall is quite pleasant. >>But it gets worse. At some points the part of the stairs has fallen off, either due falling rocks(that you see quite few yourself), or just because of old age. But that's not the main problem. >>At one particular tricky part there's lots of light rubble on floor, and you can't help it. You fall down. And it just so happens that floor is angled towards the fall, and you slide off the edge falling to your death. You can see that Momizi jumped after you, but she can't make it anymore... You shake your head. Half of the way is already behind you, and there were no accidents, except that once when you fell on your butt and Momizi tried to help you up and she fell too. Now you're both laughing with your clothes completely wet. ...You can almost see through Momizi's white shirt.
When you reach the bottom, Momizi immediately runs to small door at the base of waterfall and knocks. "Nitori! Open up!" Soon the door opens, and blue-haired girl about Momizi's age wearing green cap and blue dress comes out. "Alright, alright, what with the..." She sees the state of Momizi's clothes and stops. "...Why didn't you fly down?" Before Momizi can answer she sees you behind her. "OH! So you're with somebody! That explains it, I see... But who is she? I haven't ever seen her before." Momizi looks at you, unsure about what she should say. [ ] Introduce yourself. [ ] Introduce yourself, but lie about where you're from. [ ] Let Momizi handle it. __________
Momizi notices that you have no intentions of speaking yourself, and turns back to Nitori. "Oh, this is Adahn. She's a... Friend living with me and Aya for a while." Nitori nods in agreement. "I see, I see, but isn't she a human? You don't exactly visit the village regularly, how did you two end up knowing each other?" "Ah, uhm..." "Well, that's not important. Come inside and dry yourself up." She opens the round door for you, and following Momizi you go in.
Compared to Aya's place, Nitori's house is a mess. But in a sense, more modern. There's lots of electric equipment on floor, such as drills, computer keyboards and calculators. Most of them have been dismantled. But there's also lots of speakers and CD-players on floor, most of which seem intact. Apparently this isn't normal, as Momizi is suprised too. "Wow! Nitori, what are you up to now?" "Well... Actually, that's a secret. Don't worry, you'll find out soon!" "Aaw. Are you too busy for a game?" "Too busy? No way, I could use a break." With that Nitori clears off table, knocking few PS2 controllers and cassettes to floor.
"No... That won't work..." You turn to Momizi and Nitori. No, they're playing some board-game completely quiet. You look around to find the source of the noise, and soon notice that on the corner there's blonde-haired girl wearing sailor-uniform going through some papers, occasionally drawing on them, then talking to herself. "What am I thinking..." She rumples the papers and throws them to floor after which she continues scribbling something. [ ] Have a look at what Nitori and Momizi are playing. [ ] Try to talk to girl on corner. [ ] Find somewhere to dry your clothes. _________________
>>24126 Thank you. And yeah, I've had this part written for almost fifteen minutes now. To avoid stuff like this: If seven votes won't be reached in hour, then winner will be decided by which got most.
You walk to girl who just keeps making notes on papers. Either she’s really busy, or incredible concentrated, as she doesn’t notice when you look over her shoulder. Looks like she’s making some sort of blue-prints for-”HEY!” A hit from rolled paper is delivered to your head, and you can’t help but to jump back. It didn’t hurt, but sudden hit was definitely enough to surprise you. You lift your head and see girl looking at you annoyed. ”What do you think you’re doing?” ”I, just,” You try to think up explanation quickly, ”I was just interested in what you were doing.” She looks at you suspiciously. ”You didn’t see anything, right?” ”No! No I didn’t.”
She seems to calm down. ”Ah, that’s good,” She sighs; ”But you shouldn’t sneak on people like that.” She turns back to her blueprints ”I’m busy, so talk to you later.” You turn to leave, looking for some place to dry your clothes in. Having cold would not be very nice. ”Hey, wait a sec!” She jumps up from the chair and walks to you. ”Are you busy?” [ ] ”Not really.” [ ] ”Why do you ask?” [ ] ”Yes, very.”
”Not really.” The girl's eyes blaze in joy. "Yes! Listen, I need you to do something for me." She hands you a paper with various things written on it, most of which you recognize. There's also her name there, written so fancy that you almost can't make it out. "Chiyuri... Kitashiarkwaa?" You read it out. At least that's what you think it says. "No no, see, it's 'Doctor Chiyuri Kitashirakawa'. But just call me Chiyuri."
"Anyway, I need you to get these for me." She pushes you a bit to make you leave faster. "You should be able to these from Kourindou, don't worry about money, he owes me. A LOT." "If you bring everything, I'll give you something nice." And with that, she's back to her blueprints. -Item received: Chiyuri's shopping list!- You're almost about to leave, when it comes to you that you don't know just where this Kourindou is. Momizi and Nitori are still going at their game. How long is it going to take? Momizi has taken her shirt off and placed on top of some kind of heater, now she's just wearing a t-shirt. [ ] Just go. [ ] Ask Momizi to come with you. [ ] "Chiyuri, I don't know where the shop is." [ ] "Chiyuri, I'm not gonna do this."
The excitement that you got of her wears of and you walk back to her. "Chiyuri, I don't know where the shop is." She looks at you in disbelief. "Seriously, I have no idea." She continues to stare, until she rolls her eyes. She probably figured that you weren't joking. "Alright... Listen, you take the road down the mountain, after which you take the path towards the forest. Go through it, and soon you should reach it." She sighs. "If you can fly, the trip shouldn't take more than a hour." You get long, annoyed look from Chiyuri. "You know how to fly, right?" And she turns back to her table, and continues scribbling.
...Best not to annoy her any more. Momizi and Nitori seem to have paused their game, and now they're staring at you. Seems like you attracted quite bit of attention when speaking to Chiyuri. [ ] Ask Momizi to come with you. [ ] Ask Nitori to come with you. [ ] Go alone
You walk to Momizi and Nitori. "I'm going to Kourindou to by few things for Chiyuri. Wanna come along?" They look at each other for a moment, and Momizi stands up. "Well, I don't mind. What about you, Nitori?" Nitori is playing with her fingers flustered. "Ah, well..." She looks at Chiyuri. "I have lots of work to do, so..." "Don't worry about it! We're almost done for today!" "Ah." Nitori seems to be unsure about what to do, but when you and Momizi walk towards door she gets up and rushes after you.
After you get out into open Momizi looks at you. "You don't know how to fly, right? I'll carry you." She lifts you up with much lesser ease than Aya, but rises and starts flying towards flying down the mountain towards the forest in distance. Nitori follows quietly. In the distance you see the shrine you were at yesterday. It finally hits you just how fast Aya carried you to her place from there. Compared to Momizi she's on completely different class. Trip is going nicely, but it's quiet. [ ] "Nitori, what are you working on with Chiyuri?" [ ] "Momizi, how did you meet Nitori?" [ ] "What's up with Chiyuri?" [ ] Silence is good. _____________________
I have to get up at like six in the morning tomorrow to take my sister to volley-ball game, so that's it for today.
>>24296 Jesus H, I just realized something fantastic.
The two principle Gensokyo stories, WUiG and MiG, have long been surrounded with the feel/running joke of the Unlimited Egg Works and being Rinnosuke's past self, and all the other fun F/sn associated stuff. But this... this is different, and yet, it can still fit into that: this is the Shirouko version of F/sn.
I can't describe how awesome this realization was.
Also, I had a thought, the other day: Even in the Ayako/Saver thing in the artbook, the whole "lol wut genderswapping history" thing with Saber being Arthur could still have been preserved, if Saver was the incarnation of Joan of Arc.
No post now, this'll after about two hours. Just thought I'd say few things. 1. It'll be a while before there's gonna be actual h-scene. But I might add something to bad-ends. 2. ...Why did I write 3 before 2? 3. So far I think that worst scene has been talking with Chiyuri the second time. That felt really weak. Complaints and questions about story and whatever are welcome.
You almost ask Nitori about the project she’s working on, but pass. If it’s that important you should learn about it sooner or later. You’re more interested in something else. "Momizi, how did you meet Nitori?" She slows down and seems to think. ”Well... Ah, it’s not that interesting, you shouldn’t think about it.” Momizi tries to avoid your look, and Nitori speaks up. ”What are you talking about Momizi? If she wants to hear it then tell her, we’ve got time.” ”But really, it’s not…” Nitori continues to stare, and after a while Momizi gives up. ”…Fine.” She lets out small sigh. ”I don’t think you know that it’s also my job to keep watch on this mountain, although lately I’ve been doing errands around Gensokyo since almost no strangers come here. Anyway, some time ago I was doing the usual patrol around the mountain, when I saw somebody suspicious.” ”What do you mean by suspicious?!” Nitori is blushing and looking at Momizi furious. ”You asked me to tell the story and I’m doing it.” ”Uuu…” Nitori is sulking, now that she realized that Momizi’s story wouldn’t paint the best picture of her to you.
Momizi continues; ”So, she was sneaking around the place, probably looking for something. I did what anybody would’ve done in the same situation, and went to talk to her. Can you imagine what she did when she saw me?” ”No, what?” ”She started shooting at me with… Some gun! We ended up in a fight, which she fled. She dived in to water and I couldn’t find her anymore. But it didn’t look like she got what she was looking for, so I started keeping watch on that place. It didn’t take long for her to show up again, and this time I had a plan. I decided to sneak up from behind her.”
”Did it work?” ”…Not really. She noticed me, and I ended up chasing her all over the mountain. Finally when we were back at the waterfall with us both out of breath I managed to ask just what she was doing here. Turns out she was looking for place to live in that was away from humans.” ”What, she doesn’t like them?” ”No, but that’s what I thought too. Later I learned that she just didn’t know how to deal with them, nor with Youkai. She’s desperately shy.” ”Uu..” Nitori really isn’t enjoying the way story is going, but Momizi continues. ”I directed her to the abandoned house under waterfall. She was incredibly glad for it, and invited me to come play Dai shogi. I couldn’t play at all in the beginning, but eventually learned and started visiting regularly.” Momizi let’s out sigh as sign of the end for story.
”And that’s how I came to know Nitori.” ”Momizi, that was horrible! What are you telling to somebody that doesn’t even know me yet?!” Momizi grins ”If you wanted to present yourself better, you should have told the story.” She looks down to you. ”What do you think Adahn?” [ ] ”It was interesting.” [ ] ”Cheer up Nitori, it’s not a big deal.” [ ] ”Why did the mountain have to be patrolled?” [ ] ”You were right. It was boring.” ________________________
Originally that last part read ”She turns to you” but then I started thinking that how the hell that would happen. And I spent good amount of time looking for picture to go with this, but I only ended up thinking that what the hell is the logic behind Hina X Nitori pairing. I ended up picking this.
You look at Nitori while Momizi is carrying you. ”Cheer up Nitori, it’s not a big deal.” You say this with honest, wide smile on your face. Whole scene is so silly that Nitori can’t help but to stop and laugh it off. Well, you managed to cheer her up. That’s the main point, isn’t it? ”Aaah-hahaa… I guess so, thanks Adahn.” You turn your gaze back to Momizi. ”But really, why did that mountain have to be patrolled? Don’t you want strangers there?” ”Hmm, it’s not exactly that. People on Moriya shrine would be glad about visitors, but earlier when they weren’t here we just wanted to stop people from harming themselves. It’s not nice to have bad reputation because some idiots decide to go around eating humans.” You freeze when you hear that. Well, freeze as much as you can while being carried, but Momizi notices it. ”Huh, what’s the matter?” ”Uh… Youkais eat humans?” Nitori gasps. ”You really didn’t know?! Wow, just what are you?” Flight goes on quiet with you wondering about just how big danger you’ve been in all the time. Do Aya and Momizi… No way.
After a while you arrive to the little house in the forest with sign ”Kourindou” over it. Momizi lands and places you down. The earth under your feet is incredible sweet after that long flight. ”Well, this is it. Kourindou, shop where you can find almost anything if it happens to be there.” Momizi begins to walk towards the door, but stops when sounds comes out of the store. ”Hey! What’re you doing, treatin’ customer like like this?!” The sound is angry, belonging to girl. ”Even if you are a customer, you don’t trash around in the store! Out!” Other voice is that of man’s, and a lot calmer, but still angry. Soon… Traditional witch, that’s the best way you can come up with to describe that girl. Anyway, she flies out of store and lands on her butt. ”OW! Damnit Kourin, I’ll show you…!” She pulls something out of her dress and points it towards the shop’s door. ”Aah! It’s the white-black!” Nitori is taking cover behind Momizi, who also preparing herself for worst. ”Master….” Something seems to glow in girl’s hands. [ ] Stop her. [ ] Don’t stop her. [ ] Take cover behind Momizi. _______________________
Oh look, it calmed down. >>25216 I was eating. Family dinners are always awesome, this time we talked about crazy Swedish kings, lawyers and... Some other stupid crap. I love Fridays.
Something bad is about to happen, probably to that store. And you need that store. So, you do the first thing that comes to your mind and make rush to the witch. ”STOP!” You scream as you tackle her, just in time as she finished her spell, or whatever it was. ”SPAAAARGH!” You don’t see it, but something definitely happened. Wind pushes you down, lying heavily on top of the girl. You notice that she has her arm pointed up, holding some card. The wind dies out soon and you get up. The girl is lying on the ground with shocked look, and you snatch the card from her hand. It’s simple, with few words written on it in clear hand-writing. ”Wood Sign: ’Sylphae Horn’.” Doesn’t say anything to you. There’s a small note on lower right corner. ”Good for Thursdays.” That doesn’t exactly help either. You shrug, and throw the card to girl’s face. You walk to the store, and take a look inside from open door.
You’re not impressed. The story isn’t messy, but unorganized as hell, with swords coming out of old fridges, washing machine stuffed with magazines and dozen or so light-guns placed next to various extension cords. You can’t see all of the store, with shelves covering your view. But what really catches your attention is lying on the floor. It’s a silver-haired man. Sitting on the floor with his legs spread, looking at the witch you knocked down with his mouth open. He’s wearing some kind of blueish kimono, and glasses. Now that you think about it, everybody you’ve seen in here since you arrived have been girls. So that’s what was bugging you. You’re not impressed with the man either. [ ] Reach for the man ”Need a hand?” [ ] Look at the man with slightly amused look on your face. [ ] Take a look around the store. [ ] Leave the store. Fast.
[x] Take a look around the store. Resist the gland, Anonko. One moment you're reaching to his hand asking if he needs help, and the next you'll wake up naked in his bed wondering what the hell just happened.
He does look kind of poor, just sitting on the floor like that. You reach for him while smiling. ”Need a hand?” Soon he snaps out of it, and grabs your arm. ”Yes, thank you.” You pull him up, and he brushes some dust off himself. ”I can’t thank you enough, who know what would had happened if she had activated that spell-card to the store.” The witch has managed to get up too, and now is staggering inside. ”Says you! I was just givin’ you a scare!” She gives you a angry gaze. ”And who’re you to go around knocking people down?” Momizi walks in, with Nitori following close behind. ”Marisa, if she hadn’t done it, I would had.” Momizi speaks boldly, with Nitori trembling behind her. Does she fear the witch that much? Marisa turns to them, ignoring you. ”Oh-ho! If it isn’t the fox and kappa! Got tired of sittin’ on that mountain, huh?” Nitori squeaks, and steps towards door. Momizi sighs, and bows to man. ”Pleased to meet you, Rinnosuke.” Rinnosuke lets out smile in response to her formality. ”Ahaha, it’s fine. Nice to see you too, Momizi.”
Marisa doesn’t seem to be happy being ignored, and graphs Kourin. ”Don’t think I’ve forgiven you for throwin’ me out like that! The fall hurt!” Rinnosuke steps back. ”Marisa, you had already broken one of cameras. I couldn’t be sure about what you would’ve done next.” ”Oh, come on! Yukari gets them for you like every month! One or two is not a big deal.” Marisa starts arguing with Rinnosuke, who doesn’t seem to be doing that well. Looks like it was just a sudden burst when he threw Marisa out. [ ] ”Hey, calm down guys!” [ ] ”Marisa, what were you thinking?” [ ] ”Rinnosuke, don’t you know that customer is always right?” [ ] ”I’ve got this shopping list, could you help me?” [ ] Ignore them and look around the store. _____________________
...I won't even try to write anything after this. Story is just not coming out right at the moment.
[X] ”I’ve got this shopping list, could you help me?”
>...I won't even try to write anything after this. Story is just not coming out right at the moment. You're doing fine so far, if that's what you're worried about. Style is great, Anonko is a fantastic idea, don't worry, be happy, tail feel so good.