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66130 No. 66130
Sipping her tea, Yukari watches the beauty of nature in fall.
Using a gap as a chair, she looks over the ocean of orange trees "Ah this is the life."
She relaxes until she finishes her green tea "Such a shame that this will end earlier than usual."
She says frowning remembering the little incident with Yukako and remembering the pain delivered from Reimu from her fight with her.
'Did those needles have to be so big?'
She sighs "Oh well." As she leans into the gap but stops when she felt something... off.
Then she understands, an outsider is going through the Great Hakurei Barrier. What is strange though is that the outsider didn't leave a hole, which while thankful, confuses Yukari on how they didn't leave a mess.
She opens a gap to view this outsider "Well would you look at that." she says to herself.
This outsider is dressed like a hiker, brown coat, bright-blue jeans and a pack back probably filled with a variety of goodies.
The outsider looks rather frail as if a simple breeze can knock them over! They are wearing small round glasses showing blue eyes. Black hair tied back to a pony-tail to keep it from blocking their view.
They look around the area before walking as if already knowing where to go.
"Well this is strange, how did they enter Gensokyo?" The way the outsider enter was like Gensokyo was just a part of the outside world. Perhaps a hole in the barrier? She gaps in the area after the outsider left looking for any holes, but found none.
Yukari scans the area looking for her shikigami, but did not find her "Ran wasn't able to detect it... stupid fox." shaking her head sighing.

What will you do?
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>> No. 66512
Voting is close! Please wait warmly.
>> No. 66521
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"At least let me watch your back, Ms. Cane. It's not right that you risk your life while I just stay and do nothing." Jesse says

Keine looks between the house and Jesse

"If fight, get out. Understand?" Keine says

Jesse gives a firm nod and gets into position as Keine slides the door open and enters the house. The inside of the house like the outside is small with about two rooms, one to the kitchen and one to the living room.

Keine removes her shoes and places it in one of the shelves beside the entrance confusing Jesse why she did it, but decides not to question it. The duo enters the kitchen to find an unfinished dish on the table. Jesse places their hand over the food.

"Still warm," they say

The duo leaves the kitchen and enters the empty living room.

"Is where they sleep?" Jesse whispers

Keine shakes her head and points to the next room connected to the living room. Vines were covering the door keeping it shut.

"What... is that?" Jesse asks

But Keine only looks to them in confusion.

"The door?" she says

"Yeah, what's covering it?" Jesse says

Keine looks at the door again but looks back to Jesse

"There's nothing," she says

Jesse frowns "You don't see it?"

The teacher shakes her head.

"Try opening it," Jesse says

Keine stares at Jesse then walk over to grab the side of the door to slide it open. However, she is met with resistance from the door as it didn't budge. Keine pulls on the side harder, but it still did not budge. She then uses her inhuman strength to slide the door crushing the vines in the way and leaving crack marks on the door she was holding.

"Jesus! You murde-" Jesse shouts, but is interrupted by Keine covering their mouth.

"Shh!" she whispers

"Sorry, just got surprised from your strength," they say

Keine slowly enters the room with Jesse follows suit to find an odd site. A boy is infused to the ground with bits of there skin is what seems to be made of wood. His legs are like the trunks of a tree while his arms were like branches.

"Kenji!" Keine shouts running towards the boy

The teacher looks on with horror seeing one of her students in such a deform state.

"Who did this to you!?" Keine cries out, but the boy did not respond.

She tries to pull her student out of the invisible restraints.

"Wait!" Jesse shouts stopping Keine "He's part of the tree!" they say

"What tree!?" she shouts in anger

"Look!" Jesse points at the skin on the boy that is stretching starting to tear.

Keine immediately lets go in shock that she was just hurting her student. She begins to pace around the room trying to think what to do while Jesse stood still unsure what to do.

She stops her pacing "Jesse stay here." she begins to leave the room.

"Where are you going?" They ask

"Getting help, please watch over Kenji," she orders as she runs out of the room

"But what if his parents come?" Jesse calls out but she was already gone

"Great..." they say looking at the boy wondering what to do

Then an idea struck

'I could try to mind link with him and since he's unconscious, I won't have to worry about breaking in.'

'Although, I don't know what's going on in his mind, would it really be safe?'


[]Mind Link

[] Wait for Keine
>> No. 66529
Well looks like no vote for today, I will write anyway.
>> No. 66548
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Jesse walks up to the boy, with their hand glowing and reach for his face

"Nothing ventured, nothing gained!" they say before making contact to Kenji

The outsider wakes up to the color pink. Confused, Jesse begins to shuffle around trying to stand up with pink petals falling off their body. Now on their leg, Jesse observe that the mind-world is cover in cherry blossoms with the sky being cover like a dome by what appears to be the trunks of a tree. Even the wind itself send a chill down Jesse's spine as if it carries dark secrets that no human should know of.

Jesse is too terrified to speak by the power oozing from the world overwhelming them. They never felt this small in their entire life. Off in the distance, Jesse could see a blossoming tree and walk bit by bit, worry that just walking normally would get them killed for reasons they couldn't understand.

Finally, they were close enough to see details on the tree such as the tree is larger than expected from the distance and a familiar boy.

"...Kenji?" Jesse calls out but immediately regrets it

The ground below begins to shift under Jesse's legs then stop, but they didn't dare to move. Jesse clenches their hand and opens with now a rock in it. They limp throw the rock away from them and the tree. Once the rock landed, the ground begins to shift again this time away from Jesse.

They continue to walk towards the tree now slower than before to avoid alerting whatever is in the ground. Now in closer inspection, Jesse could see that the boy is covered in vines with some sort of bud sticking out of his chest. The bud seems to be pulsating, injecting something into Kenji. Jesse steps closer to the boy and quickly taps the bud to see if there is a reaction. The bud shakes sporadically causing Kenji to groan in pain.

'This bud seems to be the problem, maybe if I take it out it would free him.' Jesse thinks

'The faster this ends, the better. Although getting him out of this area first would be safer, but also longer...'

[] Pull out the bud

[] Get Kenji out of the area
>> No. 66549
[x] Pull out the bud
>> No. 66550
Voting closed! Thank you for voting.
>> No. 66551
[X] Pull out the bud

Risky, but so is waiting
>> No. 66562
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Jesse breathes in and releases the tension in their body. It slightly helps in this oppressive atmosphere. They place a leg on the tree planning to use it as leverage, then grabs the pulsating bud. Kenji begins to squirm, his groaning is louder than before, but Jesse ignores it and prepares to pull it.

"Sorry," Jesse whispers and pull on the bud

The ground begins to tremble as Kenji's groan grew louder, turning into screams. Jesse pulls on the bud with all their might ignoring the dread of death emerging from the ground. They didn't dare to look back too terrified to stop what they're doing. The bud itself is pulsating faster as if realizing it's in danger, with parts of its tendril begin to spaz out, flailing out of control lashing on Jesse's leg that is resting on the tree and on their arms holding onto it.

A shadow looms over Jesse reaching towards. The bud slowly begins to loosen which Jesse took advantage of by pulling it in different directions speeding up the process. The unseen figure wraps it enormous appendage around Jesse and begins to squeeze. Jesse closed their eyes not wanting to see anything, their thoughts only surrounding one thing. Keep pulling.

They kept thinking that mantra as bones begin to crack and dislocate. Jesse felt like an ant being hold by a human between two fingers, unable to do anything, but wait for death as the two finger press together.

'Keep pulling, keep pulling, keep pulling...'

"Keep pulling!" Jesse screeches

As the large figure is about to pop Jesse's body, the bud loses its attachment to Kenji and flies in the air disintegrating into nothing. Whatever was holding Jesse begins to break down bellowing out a roar that shook Jesse's entire being down to their soul before fading away. Jesse goes limp and falls on their back, curling into a ball, crying.

"Ah ded it! Am alave!" They say but were distorted by the tears and snots streaming out of their face. Overwhelm with relief from certain doom.

Kenji's screaming has stopped now replace with a soft snoring unaware of what happened.

"Jesse." A woman's voice calls out.

Jesse's eyes sprang open, but the tears hinder their sight. Blinking, Jesse begins to see two figures walking to them. Jesse recognizes the two.

"Mama! Papa!" the pain, dread, and death is replaced with sheer joy

Jesse forces themselves to stand up but falls back down. Father and Mother sit down on the ground and hug Jesse softly.

"We're here for you," Father says

"You're safe now." Mother says

Jesse begins to cry louder in joy feeling the warm embrace, feeling safe with their family holding close to them protecting them from any kind of danger.

"Ah'll f-find yah! Ah swear...!" they whisper

Using all of their strength from the trial, Jesse falls unconscious ending the mind link with everything including the parents, fade away.
>> No. 66563
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Good End
>> No. 66564
What the hell?
Not sure if you are joking or not.
>> No. 66565
>>66564
No, it's not over. Not sure what the other guy is talking about.
>> No. 66569
>>66565
Well, it's a Good End for Kenji at least.
>> No. 66572
Good end for the situation. Chill.
>> No. 66576
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All is dark, as it should. All is silent, as it should. All is nothing, as it should. Jesse's soul travels without direction, without purpose. All is natural in the unconsciousness that is Jesse's mind, until now. A single yokai decides to go against common sense by existing in a world of nothing. The yokai begins clapping as if the world is not broken enough.

"I have to admit, I'm surprised you live this long J." She says

Jesse's soul begins to travel towards the sound. Unsure if they are in a dream or in the afterlife.

"...Who are you?" Jesse says surprise being able to speak as well as exist.

"Well I go by many names, but you may call me Yukari Yakumo." she waves with just her fingers

Jesse recognize part of the name "Yakumo? Are you related to a yokai named Ran Yakumo?"

"Correct, she told me about you and your family. Interesting powers you all have," she says

Jesse didn't say anything. Instead, they try to open their eyes to see Yukari but fail to realize they don't have eyes.

"Why can't I see?" Jesse asks not sure why they don't mind this

Yukari shrugs "We're in your mind, just make something exist."

Jesse would have raised an eyebrow if they had one "How do I do that?"

"Just use your imagination. Like this!"

A gap similar to Ran made appears out of nothing as if acting as a curtain, begins to move to reveal a woman with golden hair and a purple dress. She may look like a young woman, but her golden-color eyes show something else. Her eyes show knowledge and maturity of someone far older, but it also has signs of being mischievous.

"Just think and it will appear?" Jesse asks

"Yes," she says

Jesse remembers how they created the pebble in the mental world and tries to imply it to their current situation. It's easier then they thought, just by remembering how they look, The floating orb that is Jesse's soul begins to transform into Jesse's body (clothes included). The eyes open and Jesse felt awake.

"I did it!" Jesse says finally able to see again

"See? It's easy." Yukari says

Yukari then taps the invisible floor with her umbrella. Grass begins to cover the ground with tree oaks emerging from the ground. Various animals that have been long extinct populate the forest either sleeping or just roaming the place. Finally, a road that seems to have stretch forever appears with Yukari standing on it.

"Let's go for a walk," she says

The two went for a walk while it is peaceful, Jesse couldn't shake off that there is a reason for this walk.

"Kenji wasn't the only one you know," she states catching Jesse by surprise

"How do you know about Kenji?" They ask

"I was watching you," she says

"...And you didn't help?" they say

"Didn't really care about the boy." She says smiling at them

Jesse narrow their eyes "Why?"

Yukari shrugs nonchalantly "Would you help an ant?"

The question reminds Jesse about what their parents said about yokai. Different beings with a different way of thinking. While some yokai may be nice, most viewed humans as something less.

"Nevermind." They say

"...Anyway, there are more people infected by the Saigyou Ayakashi." She continues

"Hold on! How do you know about what's causing this!?" Jesse stops walking

"Well, I peak in your memories and gather everything I wanted to know about what you saw, and came to the conclusion that it's that trees doing," Yukari says now mildly annoyed at the outburst

"You look through my memories!? Without my permission?" They ask

"Yes." She smiles

Jesse is too stunned by her demeanor to say anything.

"After you saved Kenji, the other people infected disappear only leaving a dirt trail." She says

"..." they stay silent

"I looked everywhere for them, but it was as if they never existed." She says

Yukari turns around looking at Jesse with a grin

"You wouldn't know how that happens right?" She asks

A small thought enters Jesse's head on who could have done it, but they immediately reject it.

"No." They say

Yukari's grin turn to a neutral expression, then she shrugs

"Eh, it doesn't matter to me. What does though is where there are now," she says continuing her walk with Jesse grudgingly follow.

"Fortunately, you can somehow still see them," Jesse says nothing to that

"And you want me to find them?" They say

"Correct! But I didn't visit you just to tell what to do. You probably would have searched for the rest of Keine's student." she says

"...How many are infected by Saigyou?" Jesse asks

"Seven, excluding Kenji," she says

"I see, what is the other reason you 'visit' me then?" they say

"To help you of course," she says

"I thought you didn't care." they retort

Yukari stops again and turns around

"I don't care about ants, but caterpillars are a different story." she walks towards Jesse

"Caterpillars turn into butterflies, who pollinate the flowers keeping the plant species alive." She reaches to Jesse's face pinch their cheek

"Plus they're cuter then ants. It's a fact really," she says smiling

"Ow ow ow! What's your problem?!" Yukari lets go and Jesse rubs their cheek. She's stronger then she looks.

"Anyway, I want to give you two gifts." Jesse raises an eyebrow

"Grab my hand," she orders

Jesse looks at her hand then back to her then back to her hand, unsure what to do. Yukari extends her hand further trying to make them shake her hand. They slowly reach for her hand and grab it. Jesse's eyes widen as knowledge begins to flow through their body becoming enlighten by Yukari's power. She lets go of their hand.

"How do you feel?" she asks

"I feel... different?" they say unsure on what she did to them

"I gave you the knowledge of speaking Japanese." She says in the language surprising Jesse

"Now that pesky language barrier won't be a problem for you!" she smiles

"Just like that!?" Jesse couldn't fathom what Yukari's power is.

"And since you will be hunting down the kids infected by the Ayakashi, I gave you the ability to detect evil."

Jesse is stun of how helpful Yukari is even though of her lack of care to humanity. Suddenly the ground begins to shake snapping them out of their trance.

"What's happening!?" They say

"You're waking up. Perfect timing too, I was thinking of going to sleep soon." She says yawning

"What!? Why not help me in finding the missing kids!?" They ask

"Eh, I'm sure you will be fine." She says as she opens a gap

"Ta ta!" she says before entering the gap and closing it.

'...What are you Yukari Yukamo? You said you don't care about Kenji's life and you violated my privacy without a care in the world, but then you want to help me in finding the missing students and you seem to care about me... Just what are you?'



[] Give Yukari a chance

[] Do your best to avoid Yukari
>> No. 66577
>>66576
[x] Give Yukari a chance

You should check the update checkbox when you are making updates to the story, OP. Otherwise your thread won't appear on the front page on the Latest Story Updates.
>> No. 66578
>>66577
Shoot didn't even notice it. thanks for the tip!
>> No. 66579
Okay, since I'm new to this, I'll give one more day for the voting continues just in case no one seen the latest update.
>> No. 66580
[x] Give Yukari a chance
I trust my 3rd favorite 2hu
>> No. 66582
[x] Give Yukari a chance

Everyone gets one.
>> No. 66583
Voting is closed. Thank you for voting!
>> No. 66617
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Jesse stirs on the bed, slowly waking up to the sound of someone talking. They soon realize their coat is missing from their body only leaving their yellow shirt covering the upper body. After getting off of the bed, Jesse looks out of the window to see it's night time with no people in sight. Then they hear the door open.

"Oh, you're awake." Jesse didn't recognize the voice

Jesse turns toward the door to see a man who's hair is completely grey and wrinkle face showing fatigue.

'he looks like around Father's age.' Jesse thought

"Excuse me, but where am I?" Jesse bows speaking in Japanese for the first time

"You're in the Villages clinic, Keine brought you and one of her students in." the doctor says

Jesse rushes towards the doctor "Is Kenji alright!?" they shout

The doctor steps back, surprised by the outburst.

"He's asleep, but other then that, We're expecting a full recovery for him," he says

The tension inside Jesse released and he makes a sigh of relief

"Thank you for telling me," they say

"You're welcome, now if you excuse me there are other patients I need to see," he says before closing the door.

Jesse continues to explore the room and found their book-bag in one of the corners.

'Keine must have dropped it here for me.'

They dig through their belonging and found what they were looking for. A notebook and a pencil. Jesse went back to their bed and sit on it with their back against the wall.

Day 1

Two weeks have passed since Mom and Dad disappear. On the last day, I woke up to find Mom's portal in the living room with a single note on the table. Gensokyo. Mom and Dad told me many times about the place, how dangerous it is or the monsters in it, but they never explain further.

I knew it would be dangerous coming here, but... twice my life was in danger and I honestly thought I was going to... die.'

Jesse couldn't help but shiver. Their body slowly being crushed is still in their mind.

I can't help, but worry about them. Where are they? Why did Mom create the portal? Are they in danger? And if they are... what can I do? My power can't help me in a fight!

"Damnit." Jesse whispers

Jesse takes a deep breath

And now there are Keine's missing students... Maybe there is a connection? Yukari, while strange and extremely uncaring about personal space, I feel like she is trying to help in her own strange (Yokai?) way and Keine is definitely trustful, but I'm worried how she is doing right now.

I need to come up with a plan! I don't... feel the evil? Nearby. I think the rest of the students are outside the village somewhere and I think Keine will be the only person that can help me and keep me safe, but what if I can't find her? ...Will I have to find the students by myself?

I don't want to find out what happens if the infection continues to grow, it could be like a zombie infection or something! And what if there suffering? In the mind-link world, I saw some sort of bud pumping something into Kenji. I can't just sit back while knowing I can help! Maybe I should ask Kenji what it was like being infected tomorrow... They are also the only possible connection to my family. It's dangerous and I might... really die, but what else can I do?

Jesse closes the notebook sighing. They look out the window before going back asleep.

[] Wait for Keine
[] Continue without her
or
[]Write in if you have a plan
>> No. 66618
[x] Wait for Keine
>> No. 66619
[x] Wait for Keine

He did say his power won't help him so...
>> No. 66622
Voting is closed! Thank you for voting.
>> No. 66670
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The night has ended and now comes the sun bringing its glorious light to the land of illusions driving away any nocturnal yokai back to where they came. A glimmer of light pierces through the window hitting Jesse's eyelid, waking them up. They slowly rise from their bed rubbing the sand away from their eyes. The door opens with a nurse carrying miso soup on a tray

"Hello! Here's your breakfast!" She says in Japanese

"...Thank you" They say taking it from her hand

"Oh! I didn't know you could speak Japanese." She says surprise

"Ah, well, you never know until you find out right?" They joke

"Very true! Oh dear! Where is my manner? I'll let you eat your breakfast." She says just as she is about to leave

"Before you go, could you tell me where Kenji is resting?" They ask

"Why he's in the room next to yours on the right, but make sure to eat first!" She orders

"I will." They say

As the nurse left, Jesse begins to eat the miso soup noting that the meat in the soup tastes like chicken

'Are their farm animals in this place?' they thought

After finishing their breakfast, Jesse places the tray on the drawer next to the bed and did a few stretches before leaving their room. Heading to the right, Jesse opens the door to find the small boy already up.

"..." Although Jesse didn't know how to start the conversation

"Hello," fortunately Kenji did

"Uh, hi... how are you feeling?" They ask

"I'm good, what about you?" He asks

"Yeah, I'm good, um, my name is Jesse Jane Jackson." they walk towards Kenji extending their hand

"What are you doing?" He stares at Jesse's hand

"Oops, I was trying to shake your hand." They bow instead

"...My name is Kenji Kimura." Kenji says

"Hello Mr. Kimura, is it alright to ask you a question?" Jesse asks

"Sure." He smiles

"Thank you, now, can you tell me if you remember anything before waking up here?" They ask

Kenji crosses his arms trying to think back on what happened.

"I was in school, we were learning about history, but Keine-Sensei forgot to bring the textbooks." He says

"After that..." Kenji scratch his head

"Yes?" Jesse inquires

"I don't remember. It's weird, but my head feels fuzzy kinda like a dream." He shrugs

"I see, thank you for helping me Mr. Kimura, I will let you rest." Jesse bows

"Ooh! I remember something!" Keine grabs Jesse's arm

"What is it?" They ask

"I remember something about cherry blossoms... but I don't if it's important." He mentions

"It is. Do you remember anything else?" Jesse asks

Kenji shakes his head

"Alright then, I'll be leaving now." Jesse gives a short wave

"Bye Je...jisse? Gesse?" Kenji fumbles

Jesse couldn't help but chuckle "Try saying 'J' it's my nickname." They say

"J? J, Bye J!" Kenji waves goodbye

Jesse exits the room and scratches their head, wondering what to do next. Then, they hear a familiar voice.

"Thank goodness you're okay Jesse," Keine says sounding a bit tired

Jesse looks down the hall to see the teacher. Keine did not look in her best condition, her hair is a mess, but oddly enough she still looks like she can take on the day

"Forgive me for leaving you alone with Kenji, I was so scared, I just had to get help," she says bowing

Jesse says nothing unsure how to tell Keine that they can speak her language now. But Keine mistook the look of Jesse's face.

"Ah, sorry how are you feeling?" she says now in her broken English

"Good," Jesse says in Japanese

Keine's eyes were as wide as a fish, with her mouth slightly open.

"How are you...?" Keine couldn't finish her sentence

Jesse opens their mouth to answer the question, but nothing came out. They try to remember who gave them their new abilities, but it came blank. They then try to remember what the person was, but it became blank again. Did they even remember if the person was a boy or a girl?

"...I'm not sure. It's strange, but I can't remember who." They say

"Someone gave you the knowledge?" She asks

"Yeah, but it feels like I always knew how to speak Japanese." They say

"I see, Jesse, can you wait here while I check on Kenji?" She asks

"Sure," They step aside

As Keine enters Kenji's room, Jesse is left alone with their thoughts.

'Why can't I remember?' They scratch their head

After a couple of minutes pass, Keine exits Kenji's room with a smile on her face now knowing one of her students is safe.

"I'm sorry Ms. Kamishirasawa, but I just can't remember who gave me the power." They say

"That's alright Jesse, now, can you tell me what happened when I left you with Kenji?" She asks

"Oh, that? Well while you were gone... I thought of mind-linking with Kenji." They answer

"Okay, but why did you do that?" She tilts her head

"I wanted to see if his mind was in danger or something." They say

"What did you find?" She asks

"I saw Kenji entangle by a bud against a cherry blossom." They recall

"A cherry blossom!?" She repeats to herself

"Is there something wrong Ms. Kamishirasawa?" Jesse asks

"...I think I know who is behind the kidnapping." Keine says

"Re-really!? Who is it?" They stammer

"You weren't probably here at the time, but there was an incident that also involved a certain cherry tree." She explains

"What happen?" They ask

"I don't know much of it, but I know the culprit lives in the Netherworld." She says

"What's that?" They ask

"It's where the dead lives." She says

"What?" Jesse says again

Keine couldn't but chuckle "I know that it sounds strange, but it's real."

"...Okay, so when will we go?" They ask

"I'm sorry Jesse, but you will have to stay this time." Keine orders

"But what if the rest of the students are there? I can cure them like with Kenji." They point out

"I know and I am extremely grateful for what you did, but the Netherworld is dangerous for humans. The place is full of ghosts that contain so much negative energy that it can kill you!"

Jesse says nothing, the feeling of being useless looms over them. They clench their hands unsure what to do.

"...Well, what am I suppose to do?" They look up to Keine

Keine begins to ponder

"How about this? While I face the suspect, you can continue the search for my students. I know you have been able to see what's happening to them. Maybe then you can see something I didn't." She suggests

"It's also possible there somewhere else besides the village," Jesse says unsure how to tell Keine of their other ability

"If that's the case, you should check on a girl name Reimu Hakurei, she is the Miko whose job is to help the humans." She says

"I can do that." They smile

"Good, be safe Jesse." She smiles back

"You too."



[] Find the Miko

[]Explore the Village (again) with your new abilities
>> No. 66671
[x] Find the Miko
>> No. 66690
Voting closed! Thanks for voting!
>> No. 66748
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After giving the direction to the shrine, Keine took off to face the possible suspect in the kidnapping. Jesse puts on their jacket and brought their book bag with them for the travel ahead. As they left the clinic, it felt like seeing a whole new world. They understood the signs and what the people were saying perfectly. Jesse couldn't help but smile.

Jesse follows the road to the shrine, although it seemed like no one kept it clean for a long time. Leaves cover a good portion of the road with some branches as well. There is even a fallen tree that Jesse had to climb over to continue the journey.

During the travel, Jesse notices something off. While they were traveling they would hear the leaves crunching from below their shoes, but it sounds like there is more than they are stepping on. They stop and so does the noise, but before they even move again, they heard the crunching noise from behind.

They quickly turn around but saw nothing and the noise is coming closer than before. Images of being chased and being closed to death fill Jesse mind. As they were about to run, they begin to hear whispers.

“Hello?” Jesse calls out, but no one responds

“Boo!” A familiar voice whispers to their ear

Jesse yelps, jumping in the air by surprise. They quickly turn around to see who the prankster is.

“Ran!?” They shout

“Hello J! It’s good to see you again.” The kitsune chuckles

“…It’s nice to see you too, but what was that for?” Jesse asks slightly annoyed

“Oh, nothing, just my way of saying hello to you.” She smiles

“What a strange way of greeting a person.” They retort

“Is it? It’s rather normal if you ask other youkais.” She says now following Jesse

They walked in silence for a few moments, with Jesse unsure what to talk about and Ran possibly just enjoys the silence

“If it’s okay to ask R- Ms. Ran, is there something you need?” Jesse finally speaks

“A mind at peace is all I require from you.” She says

“All I have to do is stay calm?” They ask

“Exactly, it’s difficult to listen if your mind is in shambles.” She says

“Okay, so what did you want to tell me?” Jesse asks

“Tell me J, do you know how to survive?” She asks

“Well, me and my family would go camping in the forest for vacation, so I know how to deal with wild animals and how to ration my foods.” They say

“That’s not what I meant, I want to know if you can handle an intelligent youkai.” She explains

“Oh, um, be friendly with it?” They say

“Close, but no, you have to show respect to them.” She says

“Isn’t that the same thing?” They ask

“Some youkais want friendship, but all desire respect. They are your elders after all.”

“I see, is there anything else I should know?” Jesse asks

“Hmm, exactly how much do you know about youkais?” Ran asks

“They eat meat and, uh, that’s it.” They answer shifting uncomfortably

“Really?” Ran raises an eyebrow

“Yeah, every time I ask my parents about Gensokyo they seem… sad.” They say

“And?” She persists

“They just say it’s dangerous and I don’t have to worry.” They continue

Ran says nothing for a moment

“Ms. Ran is it okay if I ask you questions?” Jesse asks nervously

“…Sure,” She says

“It's been bothering me for a while, but how many youkais are there?” They ask

“More than there are humans.” She says

“And most of the humans live in that village?” Jesse points at the other side of the road

Ran sighs “Yes.”

A pregnant silence fills the air

“You know, now I feel a little silly.” Ran finally speaks

Jesse says nothing

“When we first met, you mention about older youkais liking cooked meat more than raw meat.” She says

“Which means you did research on youkais, didn’t you?” Her pupils slit vertically

“…I-I did.” They say

“I know that they eat humans, but how!?” Jesse turns around to see Ran but is taken back by how her pupil looks, they breath grows heavy

Ran cocks her head “How?”

“H-How the people are dress… from how the buildings look, that village is old maybe even before my parent were even born.” They say

“So… how are there still humans left M-Ms. Ran!?” Their heart starts to beat faster

Ran says nothing looking at Jesse directly to their shaking eyes

She gives a stoic look “Your mother is not the only one who can move between here and earth.”

“That’s impossible! Only Mom can do tha…” They remember Ran ability

“You use the gaps to kidnapped people a-and…” implications begin to form in their head

Their hands begin to shake “Y-you and al-ll of the youkais e-e-e-e” They couldn’t finish the line

“We did.” Ran answer

Jesse mind goes blank, then they press the clips that kept the book-bag attach to them off. They ran as fast as they could almost trip themselves several times unable to think straight. Their mind became their greatest enemy, images of Ran or possibly even Keine killing and eating humans flood their mind. The images made them run faster than they ever did in their entire life.

After running for what feels like a mile, Jesse stops to take a few breathes leaning against a tree

“A-All those mm-missing p-people!?” They stammer tears flowing freely from their eyes

They wipe the tears from their eye

They look back only to see Ran standing a few feet away from them holding their book bag

They were unsure if they made any progress or simply went through a gap without realizing it. But something felt off to them, Ran’s face did not show the face of a killer, but someone… curious, as if wanting to see their reaction.

Jesse didn’t know what to say. They let the first thing they thought of go first

“You could have and still can kill me, but you didn’t… Why?” They say shaking

But Ran did not say anything, she only took a step forward causing Jesse to take a step back.

’Unless you didn’t want to.’ They thought, but immediately dispel it from their mind

’She could be playing with me! Want to see my face before she kills me!’ Their breath became heavy again

Ran did not take another step, she only stood in the same spot, waiting for something.

’Maybe because… she’s f-full?’ They heard their heart thumping faster

Regaining stamina, Jesse could make a run for it, Ran doesn’t want to chase, but that would mean leaving their book-bag behind with her.

’Do I trust this… thing not to eat me?’

’Are they just animals…? No! Animals aren’t this intelligent!’

Then they concluded

’Is this what a youkai is? A murderer?’

The thought alone made Jesse nauseous. The thought of human flesh being consumed fills their mind.

’She saved me and is keeping me safe though… but…’

’I… I…’



[] ‘I trust Ran.’

[] ‘Keep running, be thankful she’s been full.’
>> No. 66749
[x] ‘I trust Ran.’

Only one option? Oh, well.
>> No. 66755
Voting is closed. Thank you for voting!
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Jesse gulps and stands straight up. They took their first step towards Ran, next take another, but a slower step.

’What will I say to her?’ Jesse thoughts ’What can I say to her? How do I even talk to a murderer!?’

They falter but, continue walking with the distance closing each step. Ran also took a step forward surprising Jesse from taking another step. She is still stoic, but her pupils are now rounder than before. Jesse regains their composure and continues their slow walk.

’Oh god, what if I made her mad? Did she was offended that I started running?’

Then without realizing it, Jesse sank to the ground.

“Huh!?” They yelp

Looking down they saw a gap instead of their feet. As they try to raise foot up, the gap rises to their waist and tightens. Jesse now couldn’t do anything but float as Ran continues to get closer. They begin to panic again, trying to grab the outline of the gap, but couldn’t make it budge at all.

“Ran!?” Jesse calls out

“Yes J?” Ran finally speaks

“I didn’t mean to make you angry!” They quickly say

Ran gives a confused look “Angry?” She chuckles “I’m actually happy of you Jesse.” She smiles

“…What?” They ask

The kitsune is within arm’s length of Jesse “What you did was natural after finding out how we get our food, in fact, I would have been surprised if you haven’t run.”

Jesse slightly calm down, but now is confuse of Ran’s action

“And what are you proud of?” They ask

“You came back, knowing full well of what I have done, you still trust me.” She answers

“Then what is the gap for?” It felt strange to Jesse, it’s like their legs are hanging in the air

“To keep you still,” She says

“F-For what?” They ask

“While I am happy, you’ve made a terrible choice Jesse.” She says

Jesse didn’t know what to say, but fear creeps on their back.

“You’ve panicked, you let your fear take control of you instead of the other way around.”

“You said it was natural!” They shout

“It is, but don’t worry this will be quick.” She says grabbing Jesse’s left hand

“W-Wait!” They plead, but it is too late

Ran inhale then blew on Jesse’s hand, with blue fire coming out of her mouth. At first, it did nothing, it pasts through Jesse's hands, but then it starts to burn from the inside. The fire is burning the nerves on the back of their left hand. Jesse yells in agony pleading for Ran to stop, but she didn’t. Due to the magical properties of the fire, Jesse still felt the excruciating pain of their hand on fire. Ran stops breathing fire and place a gap over Jesse’s now burnt hand. She places her index finger on the gap and traces a symbol over Jesse’s hand.

After finishing her work, Ran close the gap on Jesse, leaving behind a scar. Jesse screams stop now just sobbing from the pain.

“This is for your own good Jesse, remember this moment for this is what happen when you let your fear overrun you.” She says

The final words Jesse hears before falling unconscious.
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Evil, the first thought that enters Jesse’s mind after waking up. Rising from the futon, Jesse looks around the room. The room itself is rather empty, beside the futon, it has a table with a blanket over it and the seats seem to be just pillows. Light comes through the open front door showing a young girl around their age with black hair wearing a red-white clothing brushing the stone tiles with a broom.

Jesse tries to stand up by using their left hand, they hiss in pain from the burning sensation from the hand and instead use their right hand. After getting up, they check their left hand to see it all bandaged up.

“So, you’re up and awake, are you?” The girl calls out

Jesse looks up from their hand to see the girl limping using the broom as a support,

“Ah, you must be the Miko.” Jesse bows

“Reimu Hakurei and you’re J, right?” She asks

“Yes, but how do you know my nickname?” They
ask

“The fox told me about you. Weird seeing an outsider capable of using magic.” She says walking to another room in the house

“I see…” Jesse says

“Tea?” Reimu asks as she brought a pot

“Oh sure. Here let me carry this for you.”
Jesse walks toward Reimu who pass the pot to them

“Thanks, set it on the table, will you? I’ll get the cups” She smiles

Jesse did as she said and place the pot on the table. As they wait for Reimu to get the cups, they focus on the evil smothering the air

’Is one of the students here?’

A sound of something crashing echoes the house catching Jesse attention

“Reimu?” Jesse calls out

“I’m f-fine.” She stammers

Jesse walks to the room she entered to see leaning against the wall clutching her side

“Reimu! Are you alright?” Jesse swept the shards of the cup with their foot.

“Yeah, I should be.” She says, “Mind lending me a hand?” She asks

“Sure,” They say

Reimu rings her arm around Jesse’s neck as they grab onto her hand and brings their hand around her waist being extra careful not to touch her side. They walk back to the living room as Reimu’s legs shake with each step and set her down on the pillow next to the table.

“Thanks again, ugh!” She felt a sharp pain on her side

“Should I get the cups?” Jesse asks

“Yeah, that would be great.” She says then she sucks her teeth in pain

Jesse walks to the kitchen keeping special attention to the shatter pieces of the cups with the lack of their shoes. They spot a shelf that holds more cups and grabs two. As they were about walk to back to the living room, they spot Reimu’s broom on the floor and pick it up.

Returning to the living room, Jesse places the cups on the table and gave Reimu her broom.
She frowns “Some Miko I am, can’t even carry some cups.”

[] Comfort her

[] Ask about her injuries
>> No. 66857
Since no one voted, I will have to pick. Other than that, if there's something you don't like about the story please tell me! I would like to get better at my writing.
>> No. 66858
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>>66857
I'll attempt advice.

One thing is that this story tends to lack description. While you don't need to go full purple prose, setting a scene is important for immersion. Things like describing the place people are in at once, or building up descriptions of that place over time if the character has just gotten there. You don't need to describe places every time if it's a place the reader has already become familiar with.

You tend to focus on dialogue a lot, but it comes across as stilted mainly because of "he said" "she said"s. These are important, yes, but cutting them once it's clear who is who can create a much better conversation flow. An example of three characters in a scene.

==
Sanae is nervous. She picks at a thread of her skirt while seated at the table while the two natives observe her wordlessly... for a time, at least.

"I mean," Reimu speaks first, "it's just the first time I've seen an Outsider with green hair."

Marisa nods, squinting at the newcomer. She answers, "Like Yuuka, or the Yama... or Wriggle,"

"Who?"

"Reimu..."

Reimu blinks at her magician friend and shakes her head, "I'm not joking. Is that a fairy?"

"It's like a bug."

"Even less than a fairy."

"Oi."

"U-Um!" their guest finally speaks up. "P-Please don't stare too much..."

They stare.

"Well," Reimu eventually talks again in a half-whisper, "I suppose she is a living god."

"Not that Suwako's a greenie," Marisa replies.
==

It's good to try to interject with small actions and descriptions, but doing it every time makes the conversation hard to read.

At the same time I get an impression the story feels like it's almost rushing given the first point I made that it lacks scene descriptions. You do have a good idea of explaining characters' emotional states, though, and while perhaps you don't need to do it frequently, it's nice to have.

My last point is that you definitely don't wait long enough for votes. I personally don't have any voting troubles on THP but I will sometimes wait a week or more regardless because I want readers to have a chance to consider the update, choices, and their vote. Plus life is busy and THP isn't heavily trafficked. There are times people tell me they missed a vote even after I waited. Sometimes I won't wait long before I write another update, but in those cases I still have gotten a decent number of votes (usually indicating which of the options will PROBABLY win) so I feel it's reasonable. Saying "I didn't get any votes so I'll pick myself" after just four days is too much!

I hope this helps.
>> No. 66859
>>66858
I would add that non-verbal communication is a great thing in general (stares, gestures, glances aside), but perhaps don't overdo it. Also even if you do hit every dialogue line with an additional note of non-verbal communication, it may not need a "he/she/they say".
>> No. 66860
>>66858
Okay, after seeing your advice, I will keep the voting open until the 22nd.

And with writing, cut back on "She/He says" and put a bit more description of the setting

Other than that, thank you for helping me out.
>> No. 66873
I changed my mind on closing the vote, so I'll leave it open until the 23rd since I've been ending the voting too early.
>> No. 66881
[X] Comfort her
>> No. 66905
Voting is closed! Thank you for voting.
>> No. 66952
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“I think you should take it easy on yourself, especially with those injuries.” Jesse advice

Reimu’s face scrunches “Sounds like what a lazy person would do.” She says

“Well maybe if you weren’t injured.” They point at the kettle “Should I pour the tea?”

The Miko huffs “I’m not that weak.” She grabs the handle of the kettle and carefully lifts it up to pour the tea

She gives the first cup she pours into Jesse “Here.”

Jesse smiles “Thank you.” They sit down on the other side of the table

Reimu shifts awkwardly in her seat before clearing her throat “Uh, no problem.”

As they drink tea in the somewhat peaceful atmosphere, Jesse’s mind begins to wander back to the disturbing discovery on where youkai get their food from. A chill crawl down their back recalling of any time they have seen a missing person report with no traces of where they have gone

’How many people died? How many did Ran eat in her life? What about Keine? She’s a youkai too isn’t she!?’

Jesse’s left hand grew uncomfortably warm, but they ignore it

’Would she really do it? Kill a human?’ Their breathing hastens

Images of Keine devouring humans reappear in Jesse’s mind increasing the heat in their left hand to the point of smokes start to appear. Reimu alarm by the sign calls out for Jesse’s attention, but fail to get an answer.

’Does she only cares about the humans in the village and not the outsiders?’ Their hand starts to fidget due to the heat

“J,” Reimu raises her voice, but Jesse did not respond

’Is she just using me to find the students? Then after I’m no longer of use she would kill me!?’

”Hey J! She shouts catching finally dispelling their panic mind

After coming back to the real world, Jesse hisses in pain from the now unbearable heat sizzling their left hand

They hold their hands up “I-I’m alright! I was just wondering in my head…” They begin to shake their left hand in the air

Their eyes widen in surprise when they see smoke coming from their hand

“Well whatever you’re thinking, quit it.” She orders point the handle of her broom to them

Jesse begins to take deep breaths “S-sorry,” they took a sip of their tea to calm down

Putting the cup down, Jesse begins to take deep breaths trying to dispel the fear clouding their mind. Reimu, on the other hand, didn’t know what to do when someone is in a panic state.

Then an idea pop in her head “Uh try thinking about puppies or something cute!”

The smoke from their hand dissipate, the heat cools down as Jesse calms down

“Sorry I… it’s just…” Jesse wants to tell her what was in their mind, but couldn’t come up with the words

“The youkai diet?” she raises an eyebrow catching Jesse by surprise

“Y-yes, how did you guess?” They ask

“The fox told me.” She says before taking a sip of tea

It took a moment for Jesse to figure it out “Oh you mean Ran?” They ask

Reimu sets her tea down “Yup,” She says

Jesse shifts around their seat looking away “How… do the people in the village live with that?” They ask softly

She sighs “I’d guess that they don’t try to think about it, or maybe they just don’t care?” she shrugs

Jesse riles up “Don’t care? How could they not care when other humans are being eaten!?”

She shrugs again “Some humans can be worse than youkai.” She sips her tea again

“Worse than youkai?” Their shoulder slump unsure what to say

In the now silent room, Reimu continues drinking her tea with Jesse following as well although only out of politeness.

Feeling guilty, Jesse speaks “I didn’t mean to shout like that, sorry…” They bow

Reimu looks at Jesse confuse by their action but sighs “Do you want to know how I handle it?” she asks

Jesse returns to their previous position “Yes,” They say

She leans forward and rests her arm on the table “Alright, you know how humans eat meat right?”

“Yeah, we do it to survive,” Jesse answers back

“Exactly, same rules apply to youkai too, no humans to eat they die.” She explains

“…So, they either starve to death or kill to survive.” Jesse begins to understand a bit slowly

Reimu finishes her tea “Yeah, now I want you to repeat after me.” She waits for Jesse to finish their tea

They set the cup down “What is it?” They ask

The Miko then refill the two cups and grabs her cup “To survival.” She raises her cup towards Jesse

Jesse could only stare

[] “To survival.”

[] Do nothing
>> No. 66953
[x] “To survival."
do as the Miko do
>> No. 66958
[x] “To survival.”

I wonder if that's actually true. I thought they survived on fear not meat.
>> No. 66980
Voting is closed! Thank you for voting.

>>66958
They are some yokai that need to eat human flesh as mention in Perfect Memento in Strict Sense, but not all.
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“To survival.” Jesse taps Reimu’s cup with theirs

She smiles “Good! Now let’s enjoy the tea till it’s empty.” She sips her tea

Jesse shuffles in their seat “About that Reimu, but I believe one of the students are here.”

Finishing her tea, she pours another “I had a feeling that was the case,” She takes another sip

This catches Jesse’s interest “How did you know?” They begin to drink the tea

Reimu lifts her shirt up to show a horrendous scar on the right side of her abdomen that made Jesse choke on their tea.

They couldn’t believe their eyes, Reimu’s scar compares to her skin is beyond recognition. What is worst being that when Reimu turn to her side, the scar follows all the way to her back. Whatever hit her pierce her body.

"This wound hadn't caused me any trouble until now." She explains

“Oh god Reimu, what happen!? That scar seems bigger than my hand!” Jesse couldn’t help but stare at her wound.

Reimu smirks as she let goes of her shirt “Just an incident because of the main tree,” She grabs her cup gulping down her tea finishing it and exhale “Don't worry, I’m made of tougher stuff than your average human.” She slaps her scar which didn’t seem to affect her too much

‘Now you’re just showing off.’ Jesse couldn’t help but flinch when Reimu perform the questionable action

“I don’t think it’s a good idea hitting that.” They say but were impress by her gut for doing that

The Miko shrugs “As long as nothing bad happens, it was a good idea.”

Jesse couldn’t help, but raise an eyebrow at that statement “I see… Well, we should head out and find the tree.” They stand up and walk over to Reimu

They extend their hand to her “Do you need help standing up?” They ask

Reimu scoffs “I don’t need to be treated like a baby.” She slowly stands by herself with her broom

Jesse stood by just in case she fell “Sorry Reimu, I didn’t mean to be disrespectful it’s just that scar has me concern for you.” They explain

“How come?” She asks walking towards the front door

They follow as well “Well you always seem to be in pain so that makes me worry.” They say

Reimu rolls her eyes “I mean why do you care.” She asks again opening the front door

“Well, my parents also have superpowers which they used in secret to help people.” They explain

Before they left though, Jesse looks back to the living room ‘I guess Reimu’s parents are not here.’

Reimu calls out “Oi J! Your coming or what?”

Jesse follows shortly “Sorry about that, just got distracted.” They say

The front of the shrine contains what seems to be a box for donating on the stair. The shrine itself seem recently clean, which Jesse assume it was Reimu doing. Although what Jesse did find strange is patches of gravel that look layout by a person. On the side of the path is what seem to be a fountain with a ladle sticking out of it which Jesse did not know the use for. At the end of the pathway is two red beams holding up two post that seems to be made to walk through.

“So, you want to be like them?” She closes the door

Jesse looks back to Reimu “Absolutely! I love them very much and inspire to help people as well!” They exclaim realizing that got a little excited

Talking about their parents made Jesse curious about their new ally “What about your parents Reimu? What are they like?” They ask

Reimu stops for a moment and shrugs “Don’t know, I have never seen them in my life.” She walks to the right of her shrine “Hey J, mind taking the lead? I can’t sense the tree.” She looks back but is taken aback by Jesse shock expression

They begin to shift around “I-I didn’t mean to! Uh, sorry!” Jesse bows

Reimu raises an eyebrow “Eh? For what?” She asks

Jesse starts scratching the back of their head “Well, I didn’t mean to remind you something like that.” They explain

“Relax J, I don’t particularly care for them.” She says nonchalantly

Jesse didn’t know how to feel about that “…I see, well who is taking care of you now?” They ask as both children continue to find the tree

Reimu jabs a thumb to herself “Just me,” She says

“Ah… What about friends?” They ask hesitantly

Reimu smiles “Yeah I got one, she’s been with me since we were little kids” She begins to have a sense of nostalgia emitting from her

“What about you J? Got any friends from the outside world?” Reimu asks

“I was homeschooled, so I never really talk to other kids my age.” They say as the duo reach to the back of the shrine

The scenery took Jesse breath away who lived in New York for most of their whole life. They saw a small pond teeming with life from unique plants and animals alike. And just further ahead is a view that made Jesse realize that they were on a tall hill. The gorgeous view shows Gensokyo as a carpet of trees with a single mighty mountain standing proudly above it all.

“This… is beautiful!” Jesse says in amazement
Unfortunately, the serenity of the view is shattered by a pulse of pure evil spreading through the area suddenly with a scream of pain following soon after.

Jesse quickly turns around to find Reimu on the floor clutching her side and the blossom tree that stood behind the shrine that Jesse miss due to being distracted by the view.
Another wave of evil passes through and the Miko’s scream grew louder

They run towards her “Reimu!” Jesse calls out
Now able to reach her, they gently pick her up and carry her like before in the shrine.

She mumbles something, but Jesse couldn’t hear what she said

With haste, Jesse carries Reimu away from the tree, her cries soften now just groans as they return to the front of the shrine.

Reimu begins to squirm “I’m… alright now, you can let go.” She says

“Are you sure?” They ask concern for her well being

She only nods for her answer

Jesse cautiously let go of Reimu making sure she can stand with her broom

“Hey J,” Anger seeping out of her voice “I got a question.” She states

“What is it?” They ask

She turns towards them staring directly to their eye “Ran told me about your power, but what I want to know is can there be more than two people in that world of yours?”

Jesse could tell what she is thinking “I’m not sure really, but do you think that really is a good idea Reimu?” They question now concern what the Miko would do

She snorts “I don’t care even if it was a good idea! I want that tree exterminated!” She shouts in anger

The sudden shouting caught Jesse by surprise “Wha-?! I don’t know if you notice, but I think the closer you are to that tree, the more pain you will be in!” They try to persuade her

“So, what? I should give up because it hurts!?” She punches where her scar is “I couldn’t care any less about this pain!” She punches her side again

Jesse quickly grabs Reimu’s hand to stop her “Reimu please stop hurting yourself!” They plead

This seems to calm her down just a little, but she manages to escape their grasp

“Reimu, we don’t know if my power can do that, even if I could, I don’t think it’s a good idea for you to enter the tree’s mind.” They explain

With surprising strength, Reimu grabs Jesse’s collar and drag them closer to her “J, listen to me,” She spoke calmly

“My duty is to keep the balance between youkai and human safe.” Jesse listen carefully

“Up to now, I’ve saved Gensokyo twice. Twice. ” She lets go of Jesse’s shirt

“If you don’t believe me, just ask any villagers at the Human Village, hell, I will take you there personally.” She says with absolute certainty that she is right

Jesse stares at Reimu, trying to decide what to do

[] Try Reimu’s idea

[] Do it alone
>> No. 67135
[x] Do it alone

Her sudden attitude shift is suspicious, but even without that she's too vital for Gensokyo to risk.
>> No. 67182
Just a reminder that voting will be closed tomorrow!
>> No. 67188
Voting is closed! I will get to writing the chapter.
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‘There’s no fear in her eyes, willing to fight a monster even though she’s injured… I want to be like that too.’ Jesse admits

They sigh “Reimu, you’re so injured that you have to use the broom to help you walk.” They say

“We’re entering the tree’s mind, right? It has nothing to do with my body!” She argues

Jesse’s eyebrow furrow “What about your mind?” They ask, “Your mood change so suddenly!”

Reimu rolls her eyes “That stupid tree had me awake through the whole night! Of course, I would be mad!” She exclaims twisting the broom into the ground

“But what if it can still hurt you? You would be helpless!” They point out “That’s why you can’t join me.”

“What about you?” She points a finger at them “You’re somehow immune to it?” She accuses

Jesse shrugs “I don’t know, besides this isn’t my first time with the blossom tree, I can handle it.” They explain

“Good for you, but I don’t care, I’m joining to kill that tree.” She says with a smile

Jesse frowns ’What’s with her? She offered me tea and now she’s acting like she’s an executioner!’

Reimu begins walking to the back of the shrine, but Jesse quickly step in front of her stopping her

She looks at them with a glare “What is it now?” She beings to tap her feet against the ground

Jesse glares back “I like how determined you are Reimu, It’s really cool.” They admit plainly

She raises an eyebrow “…Okay?” She stares at them a bit confused now

They slowly breathe in “But because of that, you’re going to get yourself hurt… or maybe even worse! I’m not going let you hurt yourself like this.” They explain walking pass her and turning around to face her

Reimu smirks “And what are you going to do?” She places her free hand on her hip

’I can’t believe what I’m going to do…’ They stare at Reimu, their body tensing

Reimu herself bring her broom before her “Try anything and you will regret it.” She warns

Both kids stand against each other, eye-to-eye, Reimu with her cold and determine eyes against Jesse’s anxious but hidden resolute eyes.

“From how you talked, I have a feeling you’re stronger than me,” Jesse says evenly

Reimu simply smiles “You would be right.” She says

Jesse nods “But I know how to beat you.” They boast

“Oh, this should be good, how?” She asks

They breathe in and out reading their body “All I have to do is…”

Jesse suddenly turns around and sprints to the blossom tree as fast as they can

They hear Reimu shouting “Hey!” Jesse didn’t bother to look back

’…Would Keine do the same?’ Memories of Keine begin to reemerge in their mind

’Now that I think about it if she didn’t care about me, why did she try to stop me from entering Kenji’s house?’

They turn around the corner of the shrine and sees the tree in sight

’But right now I have to deal with that tree. Hopefully, Reimu’s courage rubbed off on me!’

Jesse right hand begins to glow preparing to mind link with the tree

Reimu roars from around the corner, aggressively limping after them “J! Don’t you dare!”

Ignoring her order, Jesse touch the tree, feeling their mind connecting with the evil being

Like last time, Jesse finds themselves burry in cherry blossom. They slowly stand up making sure not to make any noise to avoid being attacked. Looking around, the scenery is still the same, a floor of cherry blossoms with a tree standing in the distance.

Jesse’s mind begins to wonder during the trek ’Ugh, now I feel like a hypocrite for leaving Reimu behind, but what else was I supposed to do? Bring an injured person with me?’ They shake their head

’At least with Keine, I wasn’t going to slow her down.’ They sigh softly
’Hopefully Reimu will get better when I-‘

Their whole body suddenly went against their will, unable to move ’W-what’s happening!? I can’t move!’ Their mind began to race ’This didn’t happen before! So why can’t I…?’

A pink glow brightens enough to catch Jesse’s attention. They realize that they could move their eyes. In the distance from where the pink glow is coming from, Jesse spots a little girl all tie up reminds them how they found Kenji, but what is different is a single eye rooted right above the girl’s head staring at them. It’s the source of the pink light.

’Is that thing the reason I can’t move?’ They thought

The eye fires a beam larger than Jesse’s torso at an extreme speed! It hits Jesse’s chest pushing them back as they scream in pain. The beam begins to push Jesse into the ground ripping the back of their shirt, causing a carpet burn as the beam plows them into the ground while also kicking up petals and particles into the air. Soon the beam sputters out of existence only leaving a trench of dirt where Jesse was drag through the ground, petals slowly falling and smoke covering the area.

Jesse groans in pain, slowly lifting their head up to check the damage. The clothing is now charred barely holding together with large holes. Their skin did not fare any better either, it looks identical to the shirt, burnt and flaky making Jesse gag at the disgusting sight. Strangely enough, there is no smell of charred skin

’…H-how am I alive?!’ Their breathing begins to go uneven, but their hand starts burning up again forcing them to stay calm ’I can’t panic now! Perhaps since this is the mind link world I can take a hit without dying?’ They struggle but were successfully able to stand up

They couldn’t see through the smoke ’It’s a different creature than before, but maybe it also has a weakness like the previous creature.’

’I can move now, but I need to come up with a plan before the smoke settle down!’

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I forgot to mention this, but the voting will close at the 9th!
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No write-in, but that's okay. I will keep on writing.
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